Adultery Betrayals & Sacrifices...

[Roberto]

Hi Dear Friends,

The storyline is interesting...

But, there are certain minor flaws in maintaining the flow...

1. The characters are many. It becomes difficult to connect with each of them, as necessary, for the purpose of the connectedness of the story 

2. Too many incidents, difficult to identify the main raising incident.

3. The story is basically a frame within a frame, similar to 1001 Arabian Nights...There is a main story, where the princess Scheherazade, the story teller and narrator of The Nights narrates to King Shahrayar to stay alive.
Unfortunately, for the Worldlover and the readers, maintaining the inner frame and fit it into the main story became difficult

4. A little planning, like the regular novelists do, would have helped Worldlover.

Worldlover tried hard, which is all there for us to see, but probably couldn't take the pressure to complete the novella

I was amazed at the subdued sex narrative...it was intense, but not intense enough for the length the author intended

But, hey I enjoyed the story, and my empathies are with the author. 

I have been in the forum for a long time, and observe that most of the authors are hard pressed for time, and probably, finding it difficult to balance between weaving the story and their personal life...

We really don't know how they handle their bread and butter.

Overall, a big thank you Worldlover, for giving us a glimpse of Bangladesh geography and social mores 

After all nobody pays for the lust 'ories' the authors pen or punch keys, here in this forum

OK...when the devil nudges you, World lover, all of us, the evil devils will be ready to welcome you back 

Rise and Shine, World lover!