Adultery Beautiful Tamil housewife seduced and trapped
(19-11-2021, 04:45 AM)Victorjohnson Wrote: Story is superb however i have some suggestions.. Please consider if u feel it valid

1. Before nazir fucks her, please keep a discussion between the friends where the 3 frienda along with maya says how they gonna change this house wife to slut and how dirty she is going to be transformed and made cheap... Reason why i say because this will create an interaction with readers as if you speaking what is there in their mind through characters... Then when she get changed it will create more impact

2.During the first fuck with nazir, it would be great if nazir quote to her how decent she was earlier and how cheap she became.. This may feel humiliated and guilty  however due to sex addiction she wont able overcome. That would be nice...

Even if u dont consider, waiting for ur next update as your story telling is great

I think the first one is already in the story. Second lemme see if I can fit in
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RE: Beautiful Tamil ***** housewife seduced and trapped - by rajutony87 - 19-11-2021, 09:58 AM



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