21-08-2021, 12:56 PM
(20-08-2021, 12:49 AM)Anvesharonny Wrote: Ab aate hain aapki story pe.
In the beginning of the story we introduced Namrata as sweet,shy,sanskari ,Sharif girl.
Even with the encounter with Birju and savla we always saw innocent face of Namrata.Even in diwali encounter episode we still thought Namrata as sweet sanskari but in safar saga we introduced to new Namrata Jo Sanskari dikhane ka natak karati hain lekin Hain chalak Lombadi.
And in flashback saga now we witnessing how Namrata is transformed into chalakh lombadi Aur iss flashback saga main bahot naye characters introduce hue Abhi,Karan,Dube sir ,raga etc.Ab story bahot intresting mode pe aa gayi Hain.Ab mujhe kya lagata Hain ya meri suggestions main aapko bata hoon.
1.iss flashback saga main bhi flashback aa gaya jab Namrata ne dance performance Kiya aur usse ek aadami ka message aaya jisane use khandar main bulaya jise namra pehele se hi jaanati hain.kyunki uss aadami ne message main likha tha ke us jagah aana jaha aana tumhe pasand hain aur jaha tumne apni andar aur baher ki khubsurati ko jana tha so Mera guess Hain ye ki wo buddha aadami Shayad das sir hoga.jisake bare main abhi ne bataya tha,kala buddha 58 saal ka.
2.Agar wo aadami das Hain to ye dekhana intersting hoga ke usane namrata ko peheli baar seduce kaise kiya hoga.kyunki Namrata pehele se to aisi hogi nahi wo pehele sanskari,shy,sweet rahi hogi.fir das ne use kaise dheere dheere seduce kiya ye janana interesting hoga.Aur sunsan khandar jaise jagah main usane Namrata ke sath kya kya kiya hoga ye sochte hi uttejana aa jati Hain.
3.Agar wo aadami das nahi to kaun ho sakta hain ye aap hi bata sakte ho wo koi buddha college peon,Fake pujari ya baba koi bhi ho sakta hain.
4.Aur Namrata ne uss addami ke sath college main bhi enjoy Kiya Hain ye hume abhi Namrata ke scene se pata chalta Hain kyunki college ki wo jagah bas Namrata ko pata thi.aur use wo jagah kuch kiye bina nahi pata hogi.
5.Aur story main jo baaki character Hain like dube sir,Karan,raga,abhi inhe supporting character hi rakho.Aur blackmailing angle bilkul mat dalo.
6.Story jaise pehele thi waise hi rakho more foreplay and seduction.koi force sex mat add karo.
Aapne last update Jo Diya tha usise aage kahani badhao Baki aap to master Hain story likhane ke jaisa aapko lage waise likho.kyunki aapki writing ke hum kayal Hain.
Thank you my brother
Apke iss comment se story ko aage padhane main boht help hogi iski value words main nahi bata sakta