17-04-2019, 11:52 PM
Nice but sexually frustrating update : (
As soon as the excitement started flowing in (when Rajat met Anvi in the morning or Anvi trying to talk about a lie which she believes as a truth) , like always you changed the topic at instant. LOL
Ofcourse its your story but don't know why bringing this kid Prithvi again & again in the picture sexually with Anita. I really fail to understand how & why Anvita is getting excited thinking of him ( seems as if you are forcing Anvita to think sexually about the kid(a Child slave ).
It feels you are trying to change Prithvi's demeanour from a soft boy to a Man but I guess his perception that he is just a kid ( not a man) has been set already when he was introduced in the story as its rightly said "first impression is the last impression". He can put all the efforts he wants to ,but it feels as if ,he doesn't deserve Anvita sexually and would not be able to satisfy her urges .It somehow feels nice to know that he is leaving the city. LOL
waiting .....
As soon as the excitement started flowing in (when Rajat met Anvi in the morning or Anvi trying to talk about a lie which she believes as a truth) , like always you changed the topic at instant. LOL
Ofcourse its your story but don't know why bringing this kid Prithvi again & again in the picture sexually with Anita. I really fail to understand how & why Anvita is getting excited thinking of him ( seems as if you are forcing Anvita to think sexually about the kid(a Child slave ).
It feels you are trying to change Prithvi's demeanour from a soft boy to a Man but I guess his perception that he is just a kid ( not a man) has been set already when he was introduced in the story as its rightly said "first impression is the last impression". He can put all the efforts he wants to ,but it feels as if ,he doesn't deserve Anvita sexually and would not be able to satisfy her urges .It somehow feels nice to know that he is leaving the city. LOL
waiting .....