Adultery Shazia ek khilona

[Samit_bhai]

I tell you what is the problem with this story and why it turned off most of the readers. You started off perfectly, there was so much eroticism at the start. Shazia was such a sensual and mysterious character and how she was scared of Kalia and how he overpowered her and used her in the lift was such a solid buildup for the story. You should have continued with this story line and have let Kalia use Shazia as he always wanted since he saw her growing up. There was so much lust in him for Shazia. 

However, you turned it around with such an angle that she started having sex with people out of nowhere and we started losing the interest. Kalia became a submissive slave and it was a turn off for me. 

Then you introduced this cuckold angle which I thing was a turning point for most of the readers. However you quickly managed to pick it up and once again the story came on track. 

You then introduced her new beginning which you again started off brilliantly with Hariya. This was so erotic and you should have just continued their secret dirty affair in her new apartment in her husbands absence. Yet, you again twisted the story and introduced two new characters and she started to get involved with the watchman which was not so good and not believable at all. 

You seems to have a good understanding of what you want to write but you don’t trust yourself and take one or two stupid comments seriously and turns the whole story into something which turns off most of your true true readers. 

I don’t know what is in your mind and how you are going to take this story further. Let’s hope you don’t mess it up again.

Kya ho gaya Lion...who is Rahul now?? What happened to your classic parts of bhiku or dhobi and all...are you getting influenced by others??
Aap Shazia pe hi story rakho..uske encounters batao..chahe sabzeewala ho ya auto wala etc.
Aise updates se to readers bhi kafi confused ho gaye
Aapne itni acchi kahaniya likhi hai...yahan kya ho gaya???you are losing the plot..
Achanak watchman gayab ho gaya!!