22-06-2021, 04:58 AM
(This post was last modified: 22-06-2021, 08:28 AM by PingpongDingdong. Edited 1 time in total. Edited 1 time in total.)
This looks great Mate. Just keep going with the flow . Don’t get carried away with other characters/too many deviations. Right now the story is evolving slowly in the right track. I liked the fact that you are not rushing Revati into sex, but keeping up the heat on with minimal physical intimacy. The element of interest is lost when the reader feels that things are not evolving naturally. I am sure you are having that grip to ensure the relationship evolves slowly and steadily, sensually. Primarily having the purity of innocence of Raj isn’t lost, the respect he had for Revati is intact, and basically the relationship is evolving to be meaningful and loveable. Hope they spend more time in emotional intimacy, to make the physical intimacy look more beautiful. And involving Satya, is just sugaring on the cake. It’s just fabulous Satya is involved when Raj and Revati are together, but I’d warn you, it would mess up if Satya push Revati to proceed further. It would be great to see if the desire come out of Revati on her own and Satya just giving the lead. This update shows the hard work you put in to collect the broken pieces together. This shows your great imagination skill. Khudos Mate