16-04-2021, 11:04 PM
(23-06-2020, 09:18 AM)Ajanmol Wrote: CHAPTER 1
wo bhi jawab mai muskura deti hai or phir aage dekh kar chalne lagti hai magar is baar wo or bhi jyada apni football samaan gaand ko matka rahi thi jaise wo jaanbujhkar us drivver ko dikhaana chhaa rahi ho or use tease kar rahi ho.[/b]
To be continue....
Good start.Just a suggestion if you don't mind.Do not give away her intentions.Just describe her actions and let the readers decide about the intention behind her actions.This will give the readers more pleasure,atleast that's what I think.
If you think that giving away her intentions will be better for the progress of the story,then go ahead.You are writing,you have full liberty to write the way you want.