Adultery The Unwanted Houseguest by Indiansubmale - a tribute

[Ramesh_Rocky]

Hi Manasi,


How are you doing?, Sorry for late reply.
Actually after jaya declared her self " manu is like her brother " I lost my excitement and I just thought kavita and manu reunion in only left. If it's going to happen I want to ask you one question " describe kavita? " then " why did she take her pils on prem visiting day " etc But you did something I didn't expect and all changed. I was num and I feel something missing no something's not completed. So I just read the original and your continution one more time.i am a slow reader so it took long time for me. You did fantastic job in analysing the original story and you planned very well the continution. But in continuation you did some mistakes too.

1. Kavita character Raveling you intentionally hide her true self for the final update and it's not expressed as you planned. You just not explained it thoroughly.
   
2. Manu - I don't know about everyone but I was disappointed in his ending. From the beginning all secret to him and in the end too. 
   
3. Nobody tell him what's happened? and what's happening? in his life.
   
4. All his training in ashram and jaya character not worked as you planned. At some point these episodes just misleaded the readers.
   
5. You created intresting characters and intresting situations with them but you did not extend those points maybe because the limitations which comes with the original story.
   
6. I didn't understand this point kavita want to hide her secret from prem and she want manu accept Prem chaild as his chaild. How she thinks this will happen with out talking to manu first.
   

After reading complete story I just loss respect for kavita character. She is worse than Prem. She is just hiding her true self and lying to everyone. She don't know what is love. That is why she unable to understand manu love and his pain. She is selfish. she used Prem in college days and she try to use him after her return from America too. She never love anybody other then her self. She just disappeared from everyone after guruji and Jaya know all her secrets.