09-01-2021, 10:20 AM
(08-01-2021, 01:28 PM)Yampag Wrote: Rafiqbhai, First of all.. waah waah kya bahetarin story aapne start ki and regular hot updates dete jaa rahe ho... So congratulations and hope that you will be planning for a long story.
Kya badhiya plots aapne socha hai aur abhi tak achhi tarah se sabhi characters ko describe kiya hai aur apna apna roles achce se nibha rahe hai.. Aap ki story ka title Zeba aur Gangu bhikari se pata chal raha hai ki ye do main characters rahenge.. leking abhi gangu bimar hai, hospitalize hai aur aapne corona ka jikra bhi kiya to thodi fikra ho rahi hai ki gangu ka abhi kya hoga.. Zeba usko milegi ya nahi.. Yu ki ye apki story hai aur aap hi bahetar jante hai ki kya kya turns aage ayenge..
Sach kahu to mujhe Zeba aur Gangu ke episodes jyada acche lage hai.. bahot mazza aaya.. aur aapki story pasand aane ek wajah ye bhi hai ki abhi tak Zeba pakadi nahi gayi hai aur abhi tak aapne abusing words istemaal nahi kiya hai nahi to aisi stories me jyadatar vahi words aane lagte hai jaise ki.. Raand, Randi, Chinal, rakhail bane ke rakhunga, gulam ya befizul gali galoch.. So keep continue with such discription what you have desribe till now.. Dekho bhai yaha pe story padhana hai to koi sati savtri ki strory to hogi nahi but yeh aapke lekhan ka hi kamaal hai hi sab characters chudte rahete hai apne apne hisab se, na kisi se pakde jana ya blackmailing hona etc. woh acchi baat lagi...
Main thoda alag socha tha jab woh uske ladke ka birthday ke dusare ding Gangu narraj huva tha, to mujhe laga Zeba alag tarike se manyegi usko, jaise ki cake etc. woh apne boobs pe lagake Gangu ko khilayegi ya chatayegi, apne muh me leke direct Gangu ke muh me dalti etc. thoda aur erotic lagta...
Ek aisa bhi vichar aaya tha agar aap ko thik lage to... Gangu zeba se Shadi ka propsal rakhata hai.. Uske gale pe mangalsutra dalna chahata hai aur mang me sinddor bhi bharana chahata hai.. Zeba ko dulhan ke roop me dekhna chahata hai, fir uske ke sath sugarat manana chahata hai.. Zeba bhi ready hoti hai.. Yu to lockdown hai but uski saar kahi jaati hai 2-3 din ke liye wohi samay ye log use karte hai shadi ke liye... ya to Zeba ke master bedroom me yaa fir gangu ki zopdi me.. Zeba ke bathroom me saath me nahate hai, zeba acche se saaf karti hai gangu ko, fir nadi kinare khule me ya chandni rat me sex karna... haa uske bachhe ka khyal rakhte huve plan karna pade.. kyoki bacche ko bhi sath me rakhna padega, baad me shayad gangu se pregnant bhi ho...1-2 din gangu ke zopde mai pati-patni jaise rahe, Zeba ki ek boobs se bachha doodh piye aur dusre boobs se Gangu doodh piye etc. etc.
Baki to yeh aapki story hai, aapne jaise soch hoga vaise likhate rahe.. if posible too much dirty languages se door rahe to achha lagega.. Aur kon se chracter aapne soch ke rakhe ho aur fir baad me story me aate rahenge.... But story bahot acche se ja rahi hai aur achhi lagti hai to aapse expectations badh jana lajmi hai.. Aur last me wapis vahi chahta hu ki yeh story ko aap aur lambi banate rahe. Thank you.
itna bada comments mujhe pahli bar mila accha laga and thanks ki aap meri likhi kahani padh rahe ho aur sabhi freinds se sorry kahunga mai travelling me hu is liye likh nahi pa raha hu jaise maine apni pahle ki 2 kahaniya start ki aur and bhi ki isi tarah ye bhi karunga .......aur ha bhia yampag aap ki suggetion acchi lagi is kahani me gangu hero hai aur rahega magar filhal bhima ka role rahega aur bhi ek male carector aayega situation ke hisab se aur ha bhai meri kahani ki heroin randi nahi hoti ...agar usko sharif bata raha hu to kuch sex secne sharafat aur rael lage waise likhta rahta hu aapne meri pahle ki kahani "House wife qiad hue apne ghar me " aur "saniya Ek mazbur Housewife" padhi .....dosto again sorry mai shayad aur kuch din update na de saku magar kahani me ab abhi 25 update aayenge .....