Misc. Erotica Hawas Ka Ghulam

[Rocksanna999]

I have read this story earlier... But the end was too abrupt in that... i hope you will make it more erotic with more erotic end..instead of the tragic end...Hope to see only hero utilizing the house...and somehow i do not like the party idea in the story earlier.. hope to see you make certain changes to it . but still its your story... just suggestion!!
Take care

Thank you so much for your presence...
Yes i agree with you last time i end this stroy because of my provocation... Some readers told me that i copy paste my stroy and some people blame so many things. On this site there are thousand of writers and thousand of readers we can not compare their word with others...  I welcome suggestions and ideas and i will work on them .... But only on one condition your ideas and suggestions must be based on the story... But problem is this story understanding is its end part ... Till now its only introduction part and rest are small incidents of life.. people try to read only erotic and seductive material but without stroy erotic part is totally waste...