24-12-2020, 11:56 AM
I have read this story earlier... But the end was too abrupt in that... i hope you will make it more erotic with more erotic end..instead of the tragic end...Hope to see only hero utilizing the house...and somehow i do not like the party idea in the story earlier.. hope to see you make certain changes to it . but still its your story... just suggestion!!
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