Ruchi Story –for Betterment of my family

[swap_neel]

Better than before. But I am having hard time understanding who is speaking what - Reddy or Ruchi speaking - u could use like
Ruchi : Red, Can I hv ur cream..
Reddy : Oh yes dear...

Sometimes the choice of words r important to convey the feelings etc - u may try grammerly or such software.

Also felt Ruchi is too much within her initial phase of knowing the new lover n that too such powerful man in the society/industry.

In the original story her MIL did know n even tried to coax Ruchi to form an illicit relationship. Her hubby n MIL must b very watcful n keen on knowing how things r developing after night @ Sen's house betwn Ruchi n Reddy. But here u r taking different route.

I feel you should concentrate on 1 story at a time. This story had such high standard (by the original author) and so vast scope.

Sorry for my brutal opinions. But kudos to you for even trying to take this story forward