17-12-2020, 08:55 PM
(This post was last modified: 17-12-2020, 09:26 PM by lacksidal. Edited 2 times in total. Edited 2 times in total.)
Congratulations Dubai Seenu
I just created the account to pass on my admiration for your story.
Your command on toying with the emotions of readers is so good, that I am unable to find a word to describe it exactly the way I feel. And the way your write the sex scenes are equally commendable but I will count it second when I compare the way you go about mixing emotions. The views and the comments for your stories are testament to that.
After reading Nisha, I read Your Kamini story. Even though the Kamini story was an excellent one, with all due respect I just want to say that this story is thousand times better than that, just for the way you handled the emotions.
Nisha, the story, has a life to it, even though it has all the excitement of a sex story, what standout is the remorse and pain, which I consider to be primary among the primary emotion. I just quit reading this story quite a lot of times just because the pain showered along the story.
Bizarre for a sex story reader?, finally completely read the story day before yesterday. And I give that to you.
Even though Nisha and Seenu are the heartbeat of the story as you said, I consider Kannan and Kathir on par with Nisha and seenu. If you take out these two, still the story would be an excellent one not a standout one as I consider it now.
My take on the personalities of these four (I try to stay away from judging).
In a Pack of cards, these four are the Suits. Nisha - The Queen ; Seenu - The Jack ; Kathir - The King and finally, Kannan - The Ace.
The Queen - Nisha, complex, She is a queen but deep down under, there is a slut hiding, which she is ready to expose only for those who are ready to dig deep, which seenu did and kathir may do so in future. She wanted to be treated as both the slut and the queen she is and she deserved it too. Seenu rightly treated her as a slut, tried and failed to treat her as a queen, which he is not capable of. Kathir treated her as a queen and will certainly treat the slut in her as she deserves. Kannan has always treated her as a Queen and treated her as a slut too, but it was a bit late, he has already lost her to seenu.
The Jack - Seenu, what makes him a jack is the skill to find the slutiness among both the numbers and the queen (Nisha and kamini). As in the game of cards, he always has the privilege to side with the queen and be in the company of suits and numbers. At his best, he may have had a chance to side with the queen and a number, if he played it right. (let give the number 10 as gayatri, with some cajoling, the Queen (Nisha) might have accepted it). But his character is such that even though he longs to be in the company of suits with an accommodative queen but he was more comfortable with numbers.
The King - Kathir, the noble among all. He can give a hand, like he lifted Nisha's self-esteem, take a head, like he kicked the shit out of seenu and stand firm in times of turbulence, like standing for the village. He deserves Nisha, right next to him as his queen and he deserves it.
The Ace - Kannan, as complex as the Queen. Like seenu, the Jack, the other one among the suits who can side with both the suits and numbers. He is right at the top of suits with a clear distance from the numbers in his work space and society, with the kind of admiration, respect he demands and he deserves it too. But when it comes to husband and wife relationship, he goes to the bottom of the cards, even below the numbers, it's due to the jack's place being right next to the queen, the privilege queens give to jack and also he is no king.
And my take on the emotions running through these four.
Seenu wants Nisha to be happy, he will always try to be the reason for her happiness. Even though he is a jack of all trades but ace of none. Deep down he knows that he can never be the man Nisha expects him to be, but he always tries, that's the reason why Nisha will always have a soft corner for him. He has the remorse that he was not able to meet Nisha's expectation but instead of fighting it, he succumbs to temptation, repeatedly.
kathir too wants Nisha to be happy but at the same time will never hurt her. And will decimate any one who tries to hurt her. He is a content man, a quality of a noble king. His love for Nisha is selfless and his selflessness, again a quality of a noble king. All he just wants Nisha is to love him with her whole heart, wants to move along with him in life, with no remorse for her past deeds.
Kannan too, like Seenu and Kathir, wants Nisha to be happy. He regrets that he failed to stand up like a king to protect his queen, Nisha. And he knows he is no king and at the same time he also knows that Seenu is just a jack and no match to him, the ace. And over time he became the ace he was, in his relationship with nisha too, treated her as slut, but it was too late and the fight was already lost.
Nisha like a pendulum, wanted to stay and tried her best to stay faithful to kannan but as she herself told to seenu, she is weak to resist the close proximity of jack without the Ace taking his rightful place as a king too right next to her. He knows very well that Kannan is The Ace and also he knows that Seenu is a Jack. Like a pendulum she was swinging between being the queen (as treated by kannan and society) and the slut (as treated by seenu). Just like seenu, Nisha succumbs to her temptation of being treated like slut. Still she knows her place, that's why she made a "Treat me like a queen, I will be your slut" deal with seenu. Alas, as by her own words she realised, seenu was a wrong choice and she could have easily been the queen and the slut she wanted to be, with kannan with some more effort from her side. But as like kannan, she too realized it bit late, the fight was lost to Kavya. Luckily, she found Kathir, who treats her like a Queen, she is also confident that he will dig deep to unleash the slut in her and both will devour it. And kathir did this to her, herself was somewhat ready to compromise the queen within herself as she made the final call to seenu, which was her breaking point.
At this point of juncture the story, seenu realised that he had completely lost Nisha and somewhat ready to accept the fact. But true to his sketch he longs not to be hated by her. He will remorse, feel the pain for his whole life, if Nisha hated him.
Kannan on the other hand finally became The Ace he was but still has remorse that he missed Nisha in his life.
Nisha finally stood up for her, was clear of the fact that seenu can never be the man she wanted and she will not fall for the temptation. But just like seenu, she can never hate him, cause she feels that she too had part for his current status and she too longs his closeness, without crossing limits. Also she cannot hate kannan too, she was happy to see him realize his dream, feels remorse for the humiliation she caused him and wants him to be happy in his life with kavya and their child.
Kathir being already a content man, he was elated of the fact that finally his love was acknowledged and reciprocated. He just needs the whole hearted love of Nisha, without remorse for her past deeds. will she able to live without any remorse?
I just created the account to pass on my admiration for your story.
Your command on toying with the emotions of readers is so good, that I am unable to find a word to describe it exactly the way I feel. And the way your write the sex scenes are equally commendable but I will count it second when I compare the way you go about mixing emotions. The views and the comments for your stories are testament to that.
After reading Nisha, I read Your Kamini story. Even though the Kamini story was an excellent one, with all due respect I just want to say that this story is thousand times better than that, just for the way you handled the emotions.
Nisha, the story, has a life to it, even though it has all the excitement of a sex story, what standout is the remorse and pain, which I consider to be primary among the primary emotion. I just quit reading this story quite a lot of times just because the pain showered along the story.
Bizarre for a sex story reader?, finally completely read the story day before yesterday. And I give that to you.
Even though Nisha and Seenu are the heartbeat of the story as you said, I consider Kannan and Kathir on par with Nisha and seenu. If you take out these two, still the story would be an excellent one not a standout one as I consider it now.
My take on the personalities of these four (I try to stay away from judging).
In a Pack of cards, these four are the Suits. Nisha - The Queen ; Seenu - The Jack ; Kathir - The King and finally, Kannan - The Ace.
The Queen - Nisha, complex, She is a queen but deep down under, there is a slut hiding, which she is ready to expose only for those who are ready to dig deep, which seenu did and kathir may do so in future. She wanted to be treated as both the slut and the queen she is and she deserved it too. Seenu rightly treated her as a slut, tried and failed to treat her as a queen, which he is not capable of. Kathir treated her as a queen and will certainly treat the slut in her as she deserves. Kannan has always treated her as a Queen and treated her as a slut too, but it was a bit late, he has already lost her to seenu.
The Jack - Seenu, what makes him a jack is the skill to find the slutiness among both the numbers and the queen (Nisha and kamini). As in the game of cards, he always has the privilege to side with the queen and be in the company of suits and numbers. At his best, he may have had a chance to side with the queen and a number, if he played it right. (let give the number 10 as gayatri, with some cajoling, the Queen (Nisha) might have accepted it). But his character is such that even though he longs to be in the company of suits with an accommodative queen but he was more comfortable with numbers.
The King - Kathir, the noble among all. He can give a hand, like he lifted Nisha's self-esteem, take a head, like he kicked the shit out of seenu and stand firm in times of turbulence, like standing for the village. He deserves Nisha, right next to him as his queen and he deserves it.
The Ace - Kannan, as complex as the Queen. Like seenu, the Jack, the other one among the suits who can side with both the suits and numbers. He is right at the top of suits with a clear distance from the numbers in his work space and society, with the kind of admiration, respect he demands and he deserves it too. But when it comes to husband and wife relationship, he goes to the bottom of the cards, even below the numbers, it's due to the jack's place being right next to the queen, the privilege queens give to jack and also he is no king.
And my take on the emotions running through these four.
Seenu wants Nisha to be happy, he will always try to be the reason for her happiness. Even though he is a jack of all trades but ace of none. Deep down he knows that he can never be the man Nisha expects him to be, but he always tries, that's the reason why Nisha will always have a soft corner for him. He has the remorse that he was not able to meet Nisha's expectation but instead of fighting it, he succumbs to temptation, repeatedly.
kathir too wants Nisha to be happy but at the same time will never hurt her. And will decimate any one who tries to hurt her. He is a content man, a quality of a noble king. His love for Nisha is selfless and his selflessness, again a quality of a noble king. All he just wants Nisha is to love him with her whole heart, wants to move along with him in life, with no remorse for her past deeds.
Kannan too, like Seenu and Kathir, wants Nisha to be happy. He regrets that he failed to stand up like a king to protect his queen, Nisha. And he knows he is no king and at the same time he also knows that Seenu is just a jack and no match to him, the ace. And over time he became the ace he was, in his relationship with nisha too, treated her as slut, but it was too late and the fight was already lost.
Nisha like a pendulum, wanted to stay and tried her best to stay faithful to kannan but as she herself told to seenu, she is weak to resist the close proximity of jack without the Ace taking his rightful place as a king too right next to her. He knows very well that Kannan is The Ace and also he knows that Seenu is a Jack. Like a pendulum she was swinging between being the queen (as treated by kannan and society) and the slut (as treated by seenu). Just like seenu, Nisha succumbs to her temptation of being treated like slut. Still she knows her place, that's why she made a "Treat me like a queen, I will be your slut" deal with seenu. Alas, as by her own words she realised, seenu was a wrong choice and she could have easily been the queen and the slut she wanted to be, with kannan with some more effort from her side. But as like kannan, she too realized it bit late, the fight was lost to Kavya. Luckily, she found Kathir, who treats her like a Queen, she is also confident that he will dig deep to unleash the slut in her and both will devour it. And kathir did this to her, herself was somewhat ready to compromise the queen within herself as she made the final call to seenu, which was her breaking point.
At this point of juncture the story, seenu realised that he had completely lost Nisha and somewhat ready to accept the fact. But true to his sketch he longs not to be hated by her. He will remorse, feel the pain for his whole life, if Nisha hated him.
Kannan on the other hand finally became The Ace he was but still has remorse that he missed Nisha in his life.
Nisha finally stood up for her, was clear of the fact that seenu can never be the man she wanted and she will not fall for the temptation. But just like seenu, she can never hate him, cause she feels that she too had part for his current status and she too longs his closeness, without crossing limits. Also she cannot hate kannan too, she was happy to see him realize his dream, feels remorse for the humiliation she caused him and wants him to be happy in his life with kavya and their child.
Kathir being already a content man, he was elated of the fact that finally his love was acknowledged and reciprocated. He just needs the whole hearted love of Nisha, without remorse for her past deeds. will she able to live without any remorse?
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