Ruchi Story –for Betterment of my family

[mouthinvader]

Dont think u r the original writer of this story too.

Very Good efforts but few suggestions that u may consider -

ur handling of sex scenes lack somewhat erotic part, take time n describe in more details, the conversation n other description that adds spice.

Also it will be good if u do spell check before posting

Thanks for the detailed feedback i just started writing it really helps
hope to improve on all points you mentioned