14-12-2020, 02:24 PM
Dont think u r the original writer of this story too.
Very Good efforts but few suggestions that u may consider -
ur handling of sex scenes lack somewhat erotic part, take time n describe in more details, the conversation n other description that adds spice.
Also it will be good if u do spell check before posting
Very Good efforts but few suggestions that u may consider -
ur handling of sex scenes lack somewhat erotic part, take time n describe in more details, the conversation n other description that adds spice.
Also it will be good if u do spell check before posting