02-12-2020, 12:44 PM
(02-12-2020, 10:11 AM)Fuckstar Wrote: Bhai 'Hawas or Khoon' bohot hi tagdi story hai aapki..... Esa lagta hai ki agar kuch shabad likhunga uske baare me to uski bezzati ho jaaegi..... Par itna zarur kahunga ki Kamal ke writer ho yaar aap...... I hope ki aap uss story ko aage badaaoge.....
Bs ek request hai ki Mahnaz or Nazbeen ko abhi maa mat banwaao...... Kuch bhi karke unka bachha girwa do...... Or dono ko Danish or talha se unsatisfied hi rakho..... Kyuki uss story ka main plot hi ye hai ki dono biwiya apne patiyo se unsatisfied h...... Agar inke pati apne Bhai ki biwiyo ko satisfy Karne lage to wo fir incest ban jaaegi.... Or aapki story unique hai use incest me mat tabdeel karo balki or bhi character introduce kro.......
Baaki all the best...... You are an awesome writer
Pahli baat apne jo tarif kari hai man se Dhanyawad aur dusra point ye hai ki apne mere story regular padte hai to aage kiya likhne wala ho woh apne is cmmt se bata diya.... Ha mai incent khud pasand nahi karta par ek baat apne likhi hai ki unka baccha girwao sach ye hai ki mai aisa hi kuch soch raha tha ki pareget kar ke story ko woh justify nahi kar pa raha tha kyoki baccha hone se normal real thing se kahani alag ho jati hai...... Abhi is update ke bad mai kal se woh kahani badaonga
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