21-11-2020, 06:47 PM
(21-11-2020, 06:35 PM)Lactator Wrote: Brother this story is toooo fucking good!! Its more than superb! Carry on please. But don't introduce too many characters at once. Zeba should be the only female lead character. And Gangu should be the male lead. And their relationship shouldn’t turn into straight boyfriend girlfriend or lovers. The sexual tension should always be there. Byt more dirty low class ugly man can be introduced later on who get to taste Zeba's breastmilk.
Brilliant..awesome buddy..
Will love to see Zeba open up during sex and talk dirty too..
Also agar koi voyeuristic scene banana ho to kisi 3rd bande ko spy karne ke liye rakh do but describe view from his point that how he is is seeing Zeba do dirty talks and kinky sex with bhikhari..make it descriptive plz..
Once again brilliantly written.