15-10-2020, 11:54 AM
Your story is good... The way story is told with different timelines jumping here and there makes it unique in xossipy.. But the same is impacted negatively when the update gaps are more or not regular.. Its hard to follow normally single flow stories if the updates are done after long gap...then how much difficult from reader perspective for your story... Also i suggest to habe an index tab so that readers can jump directly to update rather than searching within the comments
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