Adultery Betrayals & Sacrifices...

[Uday]

Thanks to everyone who commented or liked my story. All of your comments are the earings of the writers. But to be honest I am actually dissapointed at the number of comments. I don't know my story was good enough or not but I actually expected a lot more comments.
Well, there is still a long way to go in the story. I will try to improve the quality of the storytelling so that the readers become compelled to comment in my thread. This is a challenge to myself. Lets see what happens.

Bro..

chill, don't worry. Every story has got its set of readers like the fans of a particular movie star. They tend to follow and give their comments. The rest are passerby's, may be some one will stay when see something he/she likes and become a fan and start commenting.

You have exceptional story telling skills (it's different than the rest of the stories) and you mastered it. It is like a jig-saw puzzle and you are placing the pieces in right places at the right moment. You are matching the past, present perfectly with the timings, places, people. You didn't leave anything unused. But the problem in this type of narration is reader may forget what happened an hour ago as the updates is irregular. Please don't get offended, I am not blaming or criticizing. If this story comes as a novel, I bet people will not leave the book until they finish.  

You know basically this is a porn sight and most of the people including me come here to read some hanky panky stuff which is lacking a little bit here ( the other day that was reason I said "something fishy between Arjun & Razia" not that I didn't follow the story).

You should learn how to cook tasty biriyani from banisha like wise this story also needs some masala to spice it up.

I don't know, but don't make Banisha a slut, going and spreading legs to anyone comes on her way or by the demands of her brother in laws.

Also you can include some naughty talking, fun at Gopal's birthday party...may be Krishna opening up, Subadra showing some interest in Arjun etc..etc...

Otherwise this is excellent, keep going.