Poll: Do u like this story
You do not have permission to vote in this poll.
బాగుంది
88.24%
30 88.24%
బాగాలేదు
11.76%
4 11.76%
Total 34 vote(s) 100%
* You voted for this item. [Show Results]

Thread Rating:
  • 5 Vote(s) - 2.6 Average
  • 1
  • 2
  • 3
  • 4
  • 5
Adultery ఆడ కూలిని దెంగిన టాపిమేస్ట్రీ
#13
Narration bagundi.,

but needs improvement.. akkada akkada konni areas lo suspense matters antaru kada adi missing.
veelu aithe adi cover cheyyandi and also one more thing direct ga ala story lo romance scene ki vellipothe ela? kathanam anedi important. konchem kathanam nadapandi. chusthe aa vaani ane kathanayika ku aa mesthri tho istam unnatte rasaru. may be imagination thought process lo alane undachu anukuntunna. anyways na suggestions follow avutharo ledo naku theliyadu but nenu cheppalanukunnadi cheppanu.

Thanks
Good Reader
Be a happy Reader and Don't forget to appreciate the  writer. 


thanks
[+] 1 user Likes Bellakaya's post
Like Reply


Messages In This Thread
RE: ఆడ కూలిని దెంగిన టాపిమేస్ట్రీ - by Bellakaya - 01-10-2020, 10:15 PM



Users browsing this thread: 6 Guest(s)