29-06-2020, 11:18 AM
(29-06-2020, 03:41 AM)king of x Wrote: Bro thank you for your opinion ....maybe you are right.. because I am not a professional writer... this is my first story ever written.
I try to improve...in my upcoming part...if you still think it's not worth....I won't write anymore...
No bro am not trying to stop your story. Actually am excited in your story starting point...but it's lot of logical error.starting of the story you trying to say that mom have a innocent mentality it's also going towards lik that.but exactly in that tailor shop you trying to say she's lik a sex needed person like a worse.and the same thing happen in that north Indian mahendi update and the same in milk form...you see some of the ocean or any other incest story writer in starting point they have not convey that person is worse... situation only changes to involve in sex...if ur moving story this way...it's only full of worst sex moment but you trying to write The situation is make to sex with someone... it's really attract everyone...I know it's a story but everything is not only focused on sex..you have to add some reality in story then it's really make to feel good... it's create a aggressive mindset and it's only help to release a sperm with in 2 minutes.but you include a reality it's attract everyone and you also got the new fans in this blog........( If am hurt you am really sry bro.but this type of story writing is not possible to all...you have tht guts and mind so write in good way and attract everyone...if this anything wrong am really sry brother). But it's really give a positive mentality plz reply something.what ever it is