20-06-2020, 02:43 AM
Bhai aap ki poori story padhi aur ab climax ka intezaar. Heroine ka character vulnerable hai lekin is haadse ke baad shaayad strong banegi. You are the writer. Waiting eagerly. Ab aap ki dusri story baad men zaroor padhoongaa.
Why innocent girls in love & lust do silly stupid mistakes of making their own sexual act on smartphones?. It is always boomerang back to you to haunt you and your family for whole life. NEVER EVER TRUST ANY MALE PARTNER INCLUDING HUSBAND. Not worth it to take the risk of sexual liberation and private adventure fantasy.
Off course your story theme genre is BDSM hence male partner will dominate Shaalu to make his slave. And his friend Akhtar has now upper hand to dominate Shalu due to Sajjad financially dependent on Akhtar, more loyal friendship with him than paanv ki jooti Shalu. Even if Shalini will destroy Sajjad's mobile. His friends Akhtar and other must have Shalu's MMS Scandal on their phones due to no password and mobile was lying in shop when Sajjad was not present. His friends might have transferred the scam material.
Dost bura mat maanna. Jaise ek reader ne aapko aap ki spelling typo errors ke baare men aap ko bataayaa. Kahin aap sms language men bhi likhte ho. I know aap ke paas zyaadaa waqt nahin hai. Smartphone men story likhne men bahot typo errors hoti hai. Sabki hoti hai. Personal life plus 2 stories men aap busy hai.
If possible, kindly correct the draft before posting. Bahot dikkat ho rahi hai padhne men. Aur link toot jaati hai. Baaki aap writer achchhe ho. Aap ke characters ke contrast bahot achchha hai.
Why innocent girls in love & lust do silly stupid mistakes of making their own sexual act on smartphones?. It is always boomerang back to you to haunt you and your family for whole life. NEVER EVER TRUST ANY MALE PARTNER INCLUDING HUSBAND. Not worth it to take the risk of sexual liberation and private adventure fantasy.
Off course your story theme genre is BDSM hence male partner will dominate Shaalu to make his slave. And his friend Akhtar has now upper hand to dominate Shalu due to Sajjad financially dependent on Akhtar, more loyal friendship with him than paanv ki jooti Shalu. Even if Shalini will destroy Sajjad's mobile. His friends Akhtar and other must have Shalu's MMS Scandal on their phones due to no password and mobile was lying in shop when Sajjad was not present. His friends might have transferred the scam material.
Dost bura mat maanna. Jaise ek reader ne aapko aap ki spelling typo errors ke baare men aap ko bataayaa. Kahin aap sms language men bhi likhte ho. I know aap ke paas zyaadaa waqt nahin hai. Smartphone men story likhne men bahot typo errors hoti hai. Sabki hoti hai. Personal life plus 2 stories men aap busy hai.
If possible, kindly correct the draft before posting. Bahot dikkat ho rahi hai padhne men. Aur link toot jaati hai. Baaki aap writer achchhe ho. Aap ke characters ke contrast bahot achchha hai.
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