27-05-2020, 11:34 PM
(27-05-2020, 08:12 PM)perfectmohib Wrote: His narration as a past story is not so cool because being a small kid he can't remember so much and also he is behaving like a spy and so.
It's a hot erotic story so let it be kinda LIVE, don't let the kid narrate.
Also don't add that criminal in the story as this lady is not a slut. Instead add champas father in law to fuck both.
Also both oldies fuck this milf together.
And make big updates so to make it more erotic.
This is all my view
Bhai... main nahi janta aap kabse aur kaun se update se is story ko par rahe hai. Kyunki maine story ke shuru mein hi likh diya tha ke yeh ek 1st person view story hai. Yaani main nahi.... koi aur narate karega is story ko. Aur woh hai rohan. Yeh kahaani uski maa ko hai. Its maybe not cool for you but bahut log aaj tak is story ko enjoy karte aaye hai. Koi problem bahi hui.
Ek baccha shayad choti choti baatein yaad na rakh paye, adult baatein samajh na paye par koi nayee incident jo uske liye ekdum 1st time hai ajeeb hai, aur specially us ghatna ke sath uska family member specially maa ya papa jura hua ha aur aakhon ke samne agaar aisa kuch dekhle jo usey nahin dekhna chahiyei toh yeh baat ek bacche ke mind mein bhi hamesha ke liye lock ho jata hai.
And yes. He is behaving like a spy. Because he is curious. Har ek baccha is umaar mein curious hota hai.agar kuch alaag usko nazar ataa hai toh usko jaane ki iccha aur bar jaati hai.
Yeh mera point of view hai. Aab kahaani ke is parao me akar main story ke sath koi cherchar nahi kar sakta. Thank you.


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