27-05-2020, 08:12 PM
(27-05-2020, 07:16 PM)Baban Wrote: Thanks for your question....
Lekin yeh story ek baccha narrate nahi kar raha hai. Agar aap shuruaat se pare hai toh aapne dekha hoga narrator yaani Rohan ab hostel mein rehta hai. Adult ho chuka hai. Aur woh apne past life ko humey bata raha hai. Jab woh chota tha aur uske aakhon ke samne jo hua tha woh hi woh bol raha hai. Usne is time jo feel kiya wahi woh bata raha hai.
His narration as a past story is not so cool because being a small kid he can't remember so much and also he is behaving like a spy and so.
It's a hot erotic story so let it be kinda LIVE, don't let the kid narrate.
Also don't add that criminal in the story as this lady is not a slut. Instead add champas father in law to fuck both.
Also both oldies fuck this milf together.
And make big updates so to make it more erotic.
This is all my view