17-04-2020, 07:14 PM
(04-04-2020, 08:15 PM)doctor101 Wrote: Logan bro, Shobha Vikram aur Neha ka scene outstanding Situational Comedy, very hot erotic, dramatic edge pe tha. Maze aam gaya. Highlight: Vikram could not listen Shobha's last night sex due to climax egeculation with Neha. Bhima shows a necklace to Shobha and her fumble reaction was very natural but Bhima got a sixth sense.
I would suggest you to focus on those characters who did not get opportunity of sexual intercourse. But you have total command on your story even after completing 163 pages. Congratulations Logan bro. Keep Entertaining us with more erotic surprises.
Thanks doctor ha har scene ko pichhle se thoda alag karne ki hi koshish karta hu isliye kuchh na kuchh naya try karta rehta hu is baar sex me thoda comedy try kara khushi hui readers ko pasand aya. Bheema Shobha neha Vikram Stranger ka kaafi achha plot ban raha hai kahani me jo ant tak jaega.
Ab unhi charectar ko jada sex intercourse dunga jinhe ab tak bacha kar rakha isilye saare charectar shuru se nahi khole vineeta neetu ko bacha kar rakha. Aur kahani me jab tak readers ke man me ye suspense bana rahe ki aage kya hoga kahani me jaan bani rehti hai.aur meri bhi shuru se yahi koshish rahi ki kahani me suspense bana rahe