11-04-2020, 11:59 PM
(This post was last modified: 12-04-2020, 12:01 AM by doctor101. Edited 1 time in total. Edited 1 time in total.)
Baban bhai, nice start and let's hope it's a long inning. Loved your characters. Try to minimise self expanation of a child to avoid extra details distraction. Readers know it that it's a child's protagonist point of view story. Just focus on Dadaji and Bahu. Just a suggestion bro.