10-04-2020, 02:35 PM
bro, very good update. Loved your story. Just a suggestion, exploit erotic scene fully with more hot narration. Built up develop karo. You have missed the opportunity between Cellena and Watchman. Please develop Bad watchman character for more variety and contrast. Revathi was lucky that Meena saved her. Or the Watchman could hve exploited and bllackmailed Revathi. He could have make her uncontrolled lust while she was recording and touching her private parts. And Revathi is very vulnerable. I hope you understand the scope of your watchman's character in future.