29-03-2020, 09:37 PM
(26-03-2020, 09:06 PM)hirarandi Wrote: Zabardast updates diye hain janab. Choot bht geeli ho gai 3 bar pani nikalna para. Lekin ek choti c request hai. Ap k in updates me kabhi javed or kabhi Poonam ki zabani kahani chalti rahi. 2 lines javed ki taraf se or 2 lines poonam ki taraf se, isi tarah kahani me kahi kahi English me lines likhi gaien. Jis se thora ajeeb b laga or kahin na kahin is se kahani ka flow b kharab hua. Please in cheezo ki ehtiyat kijiye. Agar apne javed or Poonam ki zabani kahani me switch kerna hai to ek do nahi 8-10 lines ek sath likhain or sath me batain k ye iski zabani hai. Ta k maza bana rahay. Shukriya. Agle update ka shiddat se intazaaar hai.
Thanks buddy jo ap mere story ko itni siddat se padhi
Main apki bato ko note kar liya hu age se in bato ka pura khyal rakha jayega
Waise ab ye story apne naam ke mutabit original track pe aa gye hai or jaise jaise ye story age badhegi isme romanch or badhta jayega