24-03-2020, 05:55 AM
I don't know whether the readers who have replied here are reading your story properly or not. But I have read all the updates. As I promised that I will give honest and genuine feedback. So here I am giving my few cents on the story.
1) Mother son incest is your choice. But the scene of Parveen and Altaf interaction is not realistic. Parveen is a mother , atleast more mature , so how come she so easily fall on her son.
2) The details of the story are commendable but they fall flat when the premise of the story is predictable. Like how many times the readers have read incest stories where due to accident or any other incident mom-son or bro-sis come close to each other. Means there is nothing creative in the plot.
3) This is just my feedback and my point of view. Well I love the urdu words and detailed explanation in some parts. I just want you to improve the plot on coming updates and make it more realistic or believable.
4) Don't take it personally , it is just my opinion. Take it as a healthy criticism.
1) Mother son incest is your choice. But the scene of Parveen and Altaf interaction is not realistic. Parveen is a mother , atleast more mature , so how come she so easily fall on her son.
2) The details of the story are commendable but they fall flat when the premise of the story is predictable. Like how many times the readers have read incest stories where due to accident or any other incident mom-son or bro-sis come close to each other. Means there is nothing creative in the plot.
3) This is just my feedback and my point of view. Well I love the urdu words and detailed explanation in some parts. I just want you to improve the plot on coming updates and make it more realistic or believable.
4) Don't take it personally , it is just my opinion. Take it as a healthy criticism.
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