25-02-2020, 05:11 PM
Aaaaahh! Ek dam maja aa gaya! You've been able to get deep into the frame of a true cuck and seen it from the watching husband's POV.
This story has been really well written. The proof is, you've made the lunds n chooths all of your breathless readers throb with sheer passion! So you can understand why there are hardly any comments! Fists & fingers are feverishly busy! That should give you enough satisfaction to continue your great work for many many more episodes to cum!
Just a couple of points, purely as a suggestion, dost : You could slow down the pace a bit so as to go easy on the action. In this case you have reached heavy humping & spilling in just less than a page. Will be nice if you build up the atmosphere of how Uncle was secretly trying to gauge the size of your lovely wife's boobs as she sat nervously on the sofa. He manages to get his 'relatives' into a comfortable, relaxed state of mind, maybe by first giving them lunch after their bath & changing into home clothes. Only then they slowly move into the touchy kissy scenes. This way the seduction value is more & anticipation of readers is built up gradually.
Also the punch of the cuckold aspect will best come out if the money angle is kept out or kept low profile. The young couple is into this kinky love life, just for the pure lust of the adult forbidden situation.
Anyway, it's your story boss, and you finally decide how to present it. So welcome with your style & give us many more adventures!
pylode
This story has been really well written. The proof is, you've made the lunds n chooths all of your breathless readers throb with sheer passion! So you can understand why there are hardly any comments! Fists & fingers are feverishly busy! That should give you enough satisfaction to continue your great work for many many more episodes to cum!
Just a couple of points, purely as a suggestion, dost : You could slow down the pace a bit so as to go easy on the action. In this case you have reached heavy humping & spilling in just less than a page. Will be nice if you build up the atmosphere of how Uncle was secretly trying to gauge the size of your lovely wife's boobs as she sat nervously on the sofa. He manages to get his 'relatives' into a comfortable, relaxed state of mind, maybe by first giving them lunch after their bath & changing into home clothes. Only then they slowly move into the touchy kissy scenes. This way the seduction value is more & anticipation of readers is built up gradually.
Also the punch of the cuckold aspect will best come out if the money angle is kept out or kept low profile. The young couple is into this kinky love life, just for the pure lust of the adult forbidden situation.
Anyway, it's your story boss, and you finally decide how to present it. So welcome with your style & give us many more adventures!
pylode
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