08-02-2020, 04:32 PM
The story should have some more humiliation and dirtiness...making her feel humiliayed and zalil...continuously reminding her that she is good family girl. But bhikhari taking disadvantage of her, forcing her, blackmailing her. Also rather than just ohh umm...there should be more pleading words from her when bhikhari is devouring her forcefully. That will make the story more awesome.