Fantasy அவன், அவள், புருஷன் (Completed - நிறைவு)

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நான் இந்த கதையை ஆரம்பத்தில் இருந்து படித்து வருகிறேன், பின்பு கதை போன பேக்கில் அதை படிக்க மனம் இல்லை, உங்கள் கடைசி பதிவு, மோகன் மறுமணம், பவானி மறுமணம்.. நல்ல தீர்ப்பு  ஆனால்,  துரோகம் செய்தக்கு  தண்டனை பத்தாது.. பவானி விக்ரம் இருவருக்கு  குழந்தை இல்லம் இருக்க செய்து முடித்து இருக்கலாம்.. Xossip ல என்னோட  முதல் comment.

I am not supporting the few members who had used unethical words in comments. In an adultery story, it is not mandatory that person who is unfaithful has to be punished. This story has somehow created an expectation like punishment is needed for the Bavani and Vikram that and that is the main reason for the issue. Agree that everyone enjoyed the sex portions between the pratagonists.

I beg to differ with you telling the marriage of vikram and bavani as a punishment for them. you told that she lost her son and parents and he is punished with alpha image got affected and big hit for his ego. Two reasons.

1. Bavani once told that when she is with vikram, she will never think about her family. So, she will never ever think about her son or parents in future anyway and how it can be called as punishment for her. 

"நீ ரொம்ப மோசம்டா, நீ இருந்தால் எல்லாற்றையும் மருந்துடுறேன். அம்மா என்னை திட்டுறாங்க."

2. You never spoke about vikram family or friends anywhere in the story from the beginning and telling that they are against his marriage is not in acceptable manner. Also, marrying a beautiful girl looking better than sumitha cannot be a punishment. Infact you had done good for both. 

If vikram had to marry Bavani, and take care of Avinash like father also, then it would have made some sense to understand that his relatives scolding him or alpha image/ego getting affected. Because he was made to father another person child. it would have really hit his ego.

If vikram did not love Bavani and only want to prove his alpha image defeating mohan, but had to marry her due to circumstances and his deeds would have been some sort of  punishment for him. You had made him fall in love with her already during the course of story. So, this did not well with the ending and you calling them as punished. 

Vikram had already tied the knot to Bavani. He has enjoyed her fully and impregnated her as well. He must have just registered the marriage for the sake of it. Anyone seeing bavani that time knows that she is pregnant. I dont see a point that he can go for a grand wedding and his family, friends and relatives rejected him. Why do they going to seek their blessings after all. Are they marrying the first time? 

Again, i would reiterate that it is only Mohan who got punished or really suffered. I am very sure that most of the readers will agree with me. He had to be single father for avinash before marrying Amudha. His social status would have definitely got affected and his family, relatives would have scolded him citing the reason for divorce and friends would have teased him saying that he  cannot live with beautiful wife properly. 

Many of his relatives have seen Bavani and vikram talking together in the marriage including one of vikram friend for whom Bavani is Anni. Vikram friends know about his character and when they come to know that Vikram and Bavani got married, they will say that she had affair already with vikram, became pregnant and eloped with him because Mohan cannot satisfy his wife properly and he is now giving different reason for divorce. Sadly, The punishment is ONLY for Mohan. There cannot be a big humiliation for a man than this. 
 
The last portion where you had told that they are attending a relative marriage is something confusing. When there is no relatives supporting/inviting both which relative marriage they are in. 
Secondly, when vikram asked Bharani to seduce another woman and identified one for her, it clear that his character has not changed. 
Bavani acting as if she is not happy with what vikram did to Bharani also did not go well. 
Bavani using more respectful words to vikram like "avuru, neenga" like calling mohan did not look good. 

Thanks for giving a wonderful story. Except the epilogue, everything else is good and i enjoyed reading it. 

I understand that you are affected by the words of few comments. Considering the involvement of readers, you can forgive them for the mistake that they did in the last minute/part and continue with your new story. 

If you still feel that you do not want to continue, all that i can say is respect your decision.  

I can accept a difference of opinion and criticism that the guilty duo did not really suffer and they should have had a greater punishment. I have also no issue with Mr. Harris Raj's comment that he did not like the direction the story was going and did not subsequently follow the story. That is his prerogative. What was not acceptable was the abusive tone of some. To be fair that was only a minority of the many readers to comment but nevertheless it was upsetting. I on a personal level had very consciously made an effort not to offend anyone as I view that as unacceptable behavior. It is easy to hide behind a keyboard and be abusive. That is a classic example of cowardice. I too read many stories here in the genre of Adultery, Fantasy, Misc. Erotica Thriller but avoid incest stories as that's not my cup of tea. However I only comment when I find the writing or story to be good. That does not mean everyone should avoid criticism of any kind, but there is a way to do it. Let it be constructive and with proper propriety. Anyway thank you both and others who have taken the effort to reply on my last post.