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Minister · (This post was last modified: 13-01-2019, 09:35 AM by Minister.)

Kavita Happy lohri and your update is an answer in itlself that how calm and composed you are.

Bestforme7 · 13-01-2019, 10:08 AM

Update aa gaya
Thank you
Padh ke review deta hu

SARFARAZ · 13-01-2019, 12:12 PM

(13-01-2019, 07:15 AM)desimeet Wrote: Best reply ever.... hun agla cover karan lai jo marji karda rahe par ik var ta pooori lassi karti Kavita ji.....

Gal sun mera reply edit krta moderator ne. Nhi tan lassi ridk ke makhan teri kavita da kaddea si baahla mai smje.

SARFARAZ · 13-01-2019, 12:13 PM

Why Criticism is not allowed here? If i dont like any story or update, I should have full freedom to put forward my view. Why you deleted my replies moderator???

Bestforme7 · 13-01-2019, 03:54 PM

Update mast hai pure maze le raha hai jeetu preet ke
But ab kahani me do mod aa gaye hai jeetu ka bhai pahle dono ke pyaar me padne pe jitna maza aata tha vo feel kam ho gayi kyu agar jeetu ka bhai jinda na hota to baat kuch aur thi ab jitna jeetu aur preet karib aayege utna hi jab unhe sach ka pata chalega unhe utna jyada dard hoga

Superb update
Waiting for next

Chamanchutiyabsdk · 13-01-2019, 06:28 PM

criticism allowed aa, tenu criticize kr ta rhe aa... ਨਾਲੇ ਤੂੰ ਕੀਤਾ ਕੀ ਰਜਿਸਟਰ ਹੋ ਕੇ ਸਭ ਤੇ ਘਟੀਆ ਹੀ ਕਮੈਂਟਸ ਕਿਤੇ ਨੇ, ਤੂੰ ਇੱਕ ਕਮੇਂਟ ਨੀ ਢੰਗ ਨਾਲ ਲਿਖ ਪਾ ਰਿਆ ਤੇ ਦੂਜਿਆਂ ਨੂੰ ਮਸ਼ਵਰੇ ਦਿਨਾਂ ਫਿਰਦਾ, ਮੈਨੂੰ ਹੈਰਾਨੀ ਹੁੰਦੀ ਹੈ ਕਿ ਲੇਖਕ ਨੇ ਤੈਨੂੰ ਤਵੱਜ਼ੋ ਕਿੳੁ ਦਿੱਤੀ....ਤੇਰੇ ਕਮੈਂਟਸ ਤੇ ਇਕ ਜਵਾਬ ਨਾ ਆਉਂਦਾ ਵਧੀਆ ਸੀ, ਅੱਗੇ ਲਈ ਵੀ ਦੋਸਤਾਂ ਨੂੰ ਸਲਾਹ ਹੈ ਰਿਪੋਰਟ ਕਰੋ ਏਜੇਹਾ ਨੂੰ, ਘੂਸੇ ਜੰਮਣ ਕੰਧਾ ਕੰਮਣ... ਜੇਕਰ ਨਹੀ ਵਧੀਆ ਲੱਗੀ ਸੀ ਤਾਂ ਕਮੈਂਟਸ ਹੀ ਕਿੳੁ ਕਿਤੇ, ਰਜਿਸਟਰ ਹੋ ਕੇ ਆਵਦੀ ਜਾਤ ਹੀ ਦਿਖਾਈ ਏ ਤੂੰ....ਇਕ ਪਿਓ ਦਾ ਤਾਂ ਮੁੜ ਕੇ ਉਰੇ ਕਮੇਂਟ ਨਾ ਕਰੀ....

Chamanchutiyabsdk · 13-01-2019, 06:35 PM

ਬਹੁਤ ਸ਼ਾਨਦਾਰ ਕਹਾਣੀ ਜਾ ਰਹੀ ਹੈ, ਭਾਬੀ ਕਹਿਣੋਂ ਕਿੳੁ ਨੀ ਹਟਦਾ ਜੀਤੂ? ਜਿਹੜੀ ਜੀਤੂ ਨੇ ਟਰੇਨਿੰਗ ਲਈ ਹੈ ਪ੍ਰੀਤ ਤੋਂ ਓਹ ਰੂਪੀ ਤੇ ਲਾਊਗਾ ਤਾਂ ਪ੍ਰੀਤ ਦੇ ਮਨ ਤੇ ਕਿ ਬੀਤੂ, ਕੀ ਪ੍ਰੀਤ ਵੀ ਕਿਸੇ ਹੋਰ ਨੂੰ ਸਵਾਰੀ ਕਰਾਉਗੀ, ਉਧਰ ਰਮਨ ਦਾ ਇੰਜਣ ਵੀ ਕਰੂ ਗਾ ਕਹਿਰ ਸਿੰਘ, ਇਕ ਸਿਰਾ ਓਹ ਵੀ ਪਿਆ ਕੀ ਇੰਦਰ ਨੂੰ ਮੌਤ ਦਾ ਜਿੰਮੇਵਾਰ ਕਿੳੁ ਬਣਾਇਆ ਗਿਆ....ਅੱਗੇ ਪਤਾ ਚਲੂ, ਲਿਖਦੇ ਰਹੋ ਤੁਸੀ...

SARFARAZ · 13-01-2019, 09:19 PM

(13-01-2019, 06:28 PM)Chamanchutiyabsdk Wrote: criticism allowed aa, tenu criticize kr ta rhe aa... ਨਾਲੇ ਤੂੰ ਕੀਤਾ ਕੀ ਰਜਿਸਟਰ ਹੋ ਕੇ ਸਭ ਤੇ ਘਟੀਆ ਹੀ ਕਮੈਂਟਸ ਕਿਤੇ ਨੇ, ਤੂੰ ਇੱਕ ਕਮੇਂਟ ਨੀ ਢੰਗ ਨਾਲ ਲਿਖ ਪਾ ਰਿਆ ਤੇ ਦੂਜਿਆਂ ਨੂੰ ਮਸ਼ਵਰੇ ਦਿਨਾਂ ਫਿਰਦਾ, ਮੈਨੂੰ ਹੈਰਾਨੀ ਹੁੰਦੀ ਹੈ ਕਿ ਲੇਖਕ ਨੇ ਤੈਨੂੰ ਤਵੱਜ਼ੋ ਕਿੳੁ ਦਿੱਤੀ....ਤੇਰੇ ਕਮੈਂਟਸ ਤੇ ਇਕ ਜਵਾਬ ਨਾ ਆਉਂਦਾ ਵਧੀਆ ਸੀ, ਅੱਗੇ ਲਈ ਵੀ ਦੋਸਤਾਂ ਨੂੰ ਸਲਾਹ ਹੈ ਰਿਪੋਰਟ ਕਰੋ ਏਜੇਹਾ ਨੂੰ, ਘੂਸੇ ਜੰਮਣ ਕੰਧਾ ਕੰਮਣ... ਜੇਕਰ ਨਹੀ ਵਧੀਆ ਲੱਗੀ ਸੀ ਤਾਂ ਕਮੈਂਟਸ ਹੀ ਕਿੳੁ ਕਿਤੇ, ਰਜਿਸਟਰ ਹੋ ਕੇ ਆਵਦੀ ਜਾਤ ਹੀ ਦਿਖਾਈ ਏ ਤੂੰ....ਇਕ ਪਿਓ ਦਾ ਤਾਂ ਮੁੜ ਕੇ ਉਰੇ ਕਮੇਂਟ ਨਾ ਕਰੀ....

Mainu ni vdia lgi tan mai tan kru comment. Tere kehen nal mai do peo da ni ho jana smje. Nale main tere to ni pusha kuj moderator to pushya si. Jaat di gal krda tu meri. Salea apna naam pehla dek chaman chutiya bhosdika. Tere ta naam ch v gaal aa bhosdika chutiye

Bestforme7 · 13-01-2019, 10:03 PM

Kya yaar tum log itni muskil se to kahani chali hai ab tum logo ne jung ka maidan bana diya ise tum logo ke chakar me writer story fir se bandh na kar de chodo yaar

SARFARAZ · 13-01-2019, 10:10 PM

(13-01-2019, 10:03 PM)Bestforme7 Wrote: Kya yaar tum log itni muskil se to kahani chali hai ab tum logo ne jung ka maidan bana diya ise tum logo ke chakar me writer story fir se bandh na kar de chodo yaar

Mai kuj ni keha. Just opinion dita. Thats all.

kavitakhullar · 14-01-2019, 02:22 PM

'Kiven a bisney ' apni haveli ch beithey bisney wal vekhda mehar singh muuch nu taah dinda bolea' disda nyi aj kal kithey rehnda'
'kitey b nyi ji' mehar singh agey hath jod beitha bisna bolea' sardar ji bahrley mulk ton aye ney bs haveli di saaf sfayi ch vehal e nyi milia'
'Ek gal das bisney' agey nu ho bisney wal vekhda mehar singh bolea' eh teri sardarni kehar tey bdi meharwan hoyi firdi a ajkal.. ki gal... pehlan tan kadi nyi vekhya .. haveli ch eni saaf safayi ena khiyal kehar singh da .pichley 6/7 sal ton tan mein kdey enha nu apas ch gal krdey b nyi suniya tey es baar aap lain gyi hwayi addey kehar singh nu ..gal ki a ..'
'Ji sardar ji hun mein ki keh sakda
.'kuch sochda mehar singh wal vekhda bisna bolea
'Meinu tan eh kehar singh lagda e nyi ...'Ena keh gaur nal bisney wal vekhn lga kehar singh
'Hay tan sardar ji e ney 'mehar wal vekhda bisna bolea 'pr haan bahrley mulk ton aa bdl hoye lagdey ney ... ghat e boldey ney... nyi pehln tan tuhanu pta e a kidan ..'
'Ehi tan...pta krkey dass vichli gal ki a ..' bisney wal vekh kuch der chup reh mehar singh bolea' haan sach bisney tere lyi rakhi a lay jawin ... ghar di kaddi hoyi jma e att a .. naldey pind dey sarpanch ney bheji c.. mein sochea ek bottle bisney nu b ..'
'Vohat mehrwani sardar ji 'hath jod mehar singh wal vekh ghar di kaddi sharab da sun munh vichon laar tapkanda bolea bisna

'Ki kehnda mehar singh ..' beithak ch beithi ramanjot bisney wal vekhdi boli

'Kuch nyi sardarni ji ..' hath jod khada bisna dab ch rakhi bottle nu lukonda bolea' ehi puchdey c tera sardar tere lyi ki lay k aya bahrley mulk ton...
'Hummmm' gaur nal bisney wal vekhdi ramanjot boli 'fer tun ki keha.. '
'Kuch nyi..' hasda hoyea bisna bolea' lagda suh lenda c'
'O kiven' ek dum sidi ho beithdi bisney wal vekhdi ramanjot boli
'Menu kehnda ki gal tera sardar bda chup chup sau jeha rehnda aj kal ..' thora agey nu ho edr udr vekhda bisna bolea
'Fer tun ki keha..' gaur nal usdey munh wal vekhdi ramanjot ek dum boli
'Mein b keh ditta edan di koi gal nyi' ramanjot ton akhn churanda apni dabb ch rakhi bottle nu lukon di kosis krda bolea bisna' kayi dina baad aye ney bahrley mulk ton .. es lyi lag riha tuhanu. .'
'Hor kuch kehnda c ... ' bisney da jwaab sun kuch sochdi boli ramanjot
'Nyi bass ... kuch sochda bolea bisna' .ajeev jehia gall kr riha c kehnda c menu tan eh kehar singh lagda e nyi ..'
'Hmmmm..' kuch sochdi hoyi rananjot boli' chal ja kamm muka apna ... jyada naa peewin ... haan naley bholi nu bhejin mere kol ..'

'Sardar ji apney kamrey ch e ney ..' ramanjot wal vekhdi bholi holi jehi boli' 'ranno ayi a unha nu milan...'
'Ranno ..' gardn ghuma ramanjot debu dey kamrey wal vekhdi boli' o kado ayi ..'
'Kado di ..' ramanjot wal vekh fer kamrey wal vekh nimi nimi hasdi hoyi boli bholli
'Awen dand kyoun kad di a ..' bholi wal vekhdi ramanjot gussey ch ghurdi hoyi boli' daseya kyoun nyi menu ..'
'Es ch dasn ali kehri gal ..' ramanjot wal vekhdi boli bholi' agey b tan andi rehndi c apney deor nu milan ..'
'Tun . Na.. ' uth khadi hundi ramanjot kuch kehn tan lgi c fer kuch sochdi hoyi boli' tun chaa bna'
'Jee ..' rasoyi wal jandi ney ek bar mud ramanjot wal vekheya fer burburandi hoyi rasoyi andr wad gyi' sardarni nu ki ho gya pta tan hay es nu sardar tey ranno barey fer awen kyoun ..'

Khadi soch e rahi c k debo kol andr javey k na pta nyi ki gal krdi honi ranno usnal . ..kitey koi suh lain tan nyi ayi sochdi da dil dhark uthea kamrey wal jaan e lgi c k bahr andi ranno nu vekh sah aya..

'Mil lya apney deor nu.. bhain ji' gussa luko hassn di kosis krdi ramanjot upr ton lay haithn tak ranno nu vekhdi boli

'Haan mil lya ...' hasdi hoyi ranno ramanjot wal gaur nal vekhdi boli' ki keha nee tun becharey nu ..jad da waps aya ..chup chup a'
'Mein ki kehna' hasdi hoyi ramanjot boli' tuhanu tan pta e a meri kadi gal b suni usney ..'
'Hye edn na keh nee ..' hasdi hoyi ramanjot nu mehna mardi ranno boli' 'teri gal na sunney koi ..eh b kadi ho sakda ..fer kehar di ki majaal..'
'Ayo Beitho ..' ranno wal vekhdi ramanjot boli tan eh dil bilkul b nyi c usda k ranno us kol rukey usnu tan kahli c kad ranno javey tey o debu nu mil k puchey ki krn ayi c ranno..
'Nyi baad ch awangi ..' ramanjot wal vekhdi ranno hasdi hoyi boli' ghar roti tuk da kr lwan .'

'Theek nyi lag riha eh sab' ramanjot nu andr ayi vekh pareshaan ho burburaya debu
'ki hoyea 'gaur nal debu wal vekhdi boli ramanjot' ki kehndi c ranno! '
'O mehar singh di vohti .. o.. ' kuch sochda hoyea debu bolea' Ajeev ajeev galln krdi c'
'Shak tan nyi ho gya 'bahr buhey wal vekh fer debu samney kursi tey beithdi ramanjot debu da chehra padan di kosis krdi boli
'Pta nyi' pareshaan hoyea debu kamrey ch edr udr vekhda bolea' Kehndi ki gal kehar singh ena ena chup kyoun a menu tan tun badlya badlya lagda.. tun kehar e a ..kitey koi hor tan nyi
'Ohhhh..' debu wal vekh ek dum pareshan ho gyi ramanjot' edan kyoun keha usney tun kuch keha usnu '
'Nyi mein kuch nyi ' pareshan jeha ho debu plang tey beith ramanjot wal vekhda bolea 'badia khullia chakmia galln krdi c ..menu tan samj nyi ayi ki bolan' kuch der chup reh sochda hoyea fer bolea debu 'Gussa na kareyo menu lagda ranno tey kehar singh da kuch na kuch chakr jarur hona ....'
'Hona ki haiga c ' debu wal vekh ramanjot b pareshaan hundi boli..'kehar tan c e lucha tey ranno kehri ghat luchi a.. khasm tan sharb ch dubeya... tey eh deor bhabhi tan sadey viah ton pehlan dey e ..'
' Haan..' Ramanjot di haan ch haan milanda debu bolea' kehndi c aj kal tun bda dur dur behnda.. bhul gya kidan ..'
'Hmmmm ..' es barey tan sochea e nyi c ramanjot ney na e debu nu pind lyan ton pehln ranno barey daseya c ..

'Kehndi buha khulla rakhin rat nu ayoungi.... ' ramanjot ton akhn chura holi jehi bolea debu
'Raat nu ..' ek dum akhn chuk debu wal vekhn lgi ramanjot
'Mein tuhada naa lay k keha b usney hona rat nu' kuch der chup reh fer bolea debu' Kehndi kyoun jooth bolda o tan tenu eney sallan di nedey nyi lgn dindi'
'Ohhh ' sab das gyi ranno debu nu ...burburayi ramanjot
'Kuch smj nyi aa rahi ..' khada hunda debu pareshan ho bolea ' keh k gyi a rat buha khula rakhin mein ayoungi..'
'Hun fer ..' kursi ton uth khadi hundi ramanjot b sochan ch pay gyi..
'Ohi tan samj nyi aa rahi ek passey mehar singh din da doh tin baar aa mil chukka hun eh...tusi dsso ki krn ..' apney mathey tey hath rakh kamrey ch edr udr ghumda debu bolea

'Mein ki ..' debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli 'ek gal chetey rakhin usnu shak nyi hona chahida ki pta teri suh lain lyi '
'Meinu u b ehi lagda' ek dum bolea debu
'Khilya rakhin kuch b ajeha na boli k bnda bnda kam bigad javey. .' Debu nu samjandi ramanjot preshaan ho boli 'Jinna ho sakey dur reh unha ton'

'Ehi soch riha c rat kitey bahr ja fer dujey kamrey ch' pareshan jeha ho kamrey ch edr udr vekhda bolea debu..'
'Koi na edn kr tun upr chubarey ch .. ' debu di haan ch haan milandi ramanjot pareshan hoyi burburayi ' eh kutti b naa..'

'Ek gal hor kehndi c oh ..' kuch der chup reh ramanjot wal vekhda debu bolea
'Kehri ..' bahr jandi jandi debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli
'Kehndi tera smaan tey kagaj pye ney mere kol mein sambh sambh thak gyi' ramanjot wal vekhda debu bolea' pta nyi kehrey kagajn di gal. ...'
'OooOh' ek dum ramanjot dean akhn ch chamak aa gyi ' matlab matlab jammen tey lain den dey kagaj ranno kol ney ..mein sari haveli labh...'
'haan shyad' ramanjot wal vekhda burburaya debu
'Fer tan tenu esi kamrey ch sona paina' apna faisla sunadi khush hundi boli ramanjot' koi na aan dey rat usnu'
'Nyi nyi ..' pichey nu hunda debu bolea
'Ki gal ..'gaur nal debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli' eni madi b nyi o . Sohni sunkhi uchi lambi a'
'Nyi mein nyi' ramanjot di gal katda ek dum bolea debu
'Kyoun' gaur nal debu wal vekh kuch sochdi boli ramanjot' koi kamjori a ..'
'Ki matlab' hadbdanda hoyea bolea dwbu
'Us Rat tere kol sukhjeet wargi jwaan kudi ayi tun usnal kuch nyi 'gaur nal debu nu upr ton lay haithn tak vekhdi ramanjot boli' tey hun ranno ton dr riha'
'Edn di koi gal nyi ' ramanjot ton akhn churanda bolea debu
'Fer ... ' debu wal vekhdi boli ramanjot' raat usnu mil tey keh kagaj devey tenu..'
'Mein kidan' jijhkda haklanda bolea debu
'Vekh debu ajeha kuch na krin k usnu shak pwey .. ' debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli' jidan tun jijhak k galln karda ethey .. tere ton ult c o kehar singh ..Runna kuddia tan usdi voht wadi kamjori c'
'Nyi mein nyi' saaf saaf mukrda debu bolea' mere ton nyi eh sab'
'Ena changa naa bn na e soch ena ..' debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli' gaddar wargi run a j aap thalley pain nu firdi a tun kyoun jikhkda nap lay .. naley tera b pani nikl jayo .. awen preet preet krda rehnda'
'Nyi ...' munh khulla reh gya debu da ..eni khul k boli ramanjot umeed nyi c usnu ...
'Eh tan tenu krna e paina debu' debu wal vekh faisla sunadi ramanjot us nu ghurdi boli' sadi jameen jaydad dey sarey kagaj sambhi beithi a kutti.. o tan tenu uston lay k deney e painey a ...'
'Pr mein kidan 'samaj na ayi debu nu ki boley .. kambni jehi nal kamb uthea... hay tan sirrey di rakkaan ranno ..
'Lagda nyi eh tenu dassn di lod a ..' debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli' gaddar run a .. ajehey khamb khilayrin kabutri dey k kehar dey e nyi o apney gharwaley dey kagaj b tenu fda k jawey ..'
Kuch na bolea debu samj na ayi ki jawab devey ..
'Ena ki sochda gabru jwan munda a lutt najarey ..o aap tere thalley pain nu firdi a tun awen' upr ton lay haithan tak debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli' vekh debu ajeha kuch na karin jis nal usnu shak ho javey.... tun kehar singh nyi a...'

'Chaa bn gyi ..' buhey tey khadi bholi di awaz sun ramanjot tey debu us wal vekhn lgey ramanjot tan ghabra e gyi ek dum gussey ch boli' tenu kiss ney keha c ethey aan nu ..'
'Mein tan eh kehn ayi c cha thandi ..' dar nal kambdi bholi ramanjot dean gussey ch lal hundia akhn wal vekh ghabra k larkharndi awaz ch boli
' tun chal mein ayi ..' bholi wal vekh bahr nu jandi ek baar fer debu wal vekhdi boli ramanjot ' menu nyi pta eh kam hona chahida ... sarey kagaj menu chahidey ney o b jaldi.. hun eh tere tey a kidan tey kini jaldi lay k dinda...'
Kuch na bolea debu bahr jandi ramanjot wal vekhda palang tey beith kamrey ch bney dujey buhey wal vekhn lga......

Harryjatt · 14-01-2019, 04:19 PM

Kavita Ji, like all previous updates, this update is also excellent.

Jatt Saab · 14-01-2019, 07:32 PM

Nice update

Gilly · 15-01-2019, 07:23 AM

NYC update kavita, love ur skil ....keep it up

desimeet · 15-01-2019, 07:55 AM

(13-01-2019, 12:12 PM)SARFARAZ Wrote: Gal sun mera reply edit krta moderator ne. Nhi tan lassi ridk ke makhan teri kavita da kaddea si baahla mai smje.

Oye Meri sun gal.... Jado Tere nal gal Kara fer boli me writer nal gal kiti c na ki Tere nal.... Tera jo Dil Ave oh kar... Par khabardar j Meri gal ya conversation ch tang arai te...

desimeet · 15-01-2019, 07:56 AM

(14-01-2019, 02:22 PM)kavitakhullar Wrote:
'Kiven a bisney ' apni haveli ch beithey bisney wal vekhda mehar singh muuch nu taah dinda bolea' disda nyi aj kal kithey rehnda'
'kitey b nyi ji' mehar singh agey hath jod beitha bisna bolea' sardar ji bahrley mulk ton aye ney bs haveli di saaf sfayi ch vehal e nyi milia'
'Ek gal das bisney' agey nu ho bisney wal vekhda mehar singh bolea' eh teri sardarni kehar tey bdi meharwan hoyi firdi a ajkal.. ki gal... pehlan tan kadi nyi vekhya .. haveli ch eni saaf safayi ena khiyal kehar singh da .pichley 6/7 sal ton tan mein kdey enha nu apas ch gal krdey b nyi suniya tey es baar aap lain gyi hwayi addey kehar singh nu ..gal ki a ..'
'Ji sardar ji hun mein ki keh sakda
.'kuch sochda mehar singh wal vekhda bisna bolea
'Meinu tan eh kehar singh lagda e nyi ...'Ena keh gaur nal bisney wal vekhn lga kehar singh
'Hay tan sardar ji e ney 'mehar wal vekhda bisna bolea 'pr haan bahrley mulk ton aa bdl hoye lagdey ney ... ghat e boldey ney... nyi pehln tan tuhanu pta e a kidan ..'
'Ehi tan...pta krkey dass vichli gal ki a ..' bisney wal vekh kuch der chup reh mehar singh bolea' haan sach bisney tere lyi rakhi a lay jawin ... ghar di kaddi hoyi jma e att a .. naldey pind dey sarpanch ney bheji c.. mein sochea ek bottle bisney nu b ..'
'Vohat mehrwani sardar ji 'hath jod mehar singh wal vekh ghar di kaddi sharab da sun munh vichon laar tapkanda bolea bisna

'Ki kehnda mehar singh ..' beithak ch beithi ramanjot bisney wal vekhdi boli

'Kuch nyi sardarni ji ..' hath jod khada bisna dab ch rakhi bottle nu lukonda bolea' ehi puchdey c tera sardar tere lyi ki lay k aya bahrley mulk ton...
'Hummmm' gaur nal bisney wal vekhdi ramanjot boli 'fer tun ki keha.. '
'Kuch nyi..' hasda hoyea bisna bolea' lagda suh lenda c'
'O kiven' ek dum sidi ho beithdi bisney wal vekhdi ramanjot boli
'Menu kehnda ki gal tera sardar bda chup chup sau jeha rehnda aj kal ..' thora agey nu ho edr udr vekhda bisna bolea
'Fer tun ki keha..' gaur nal usdey munh wal vekhdi ramanjot ek dum boli
'Mein b keh ditta edan di koi gal nyi' ramanjot ton akhn churanda apni dabb ch rakhi bottle nu lukon di kosis krda bolea bisna' kayi dina baad aye ney bahrley mulk ton .. es lyi lag riha tuhanu. .'
'Hor kuch kehnda c ... ' bisney da jwaab sun kuch sochdi boli ramanjot
'Nyi bass ... kuch sochda bolea bisna' .ajeev jehia gall kr riha c kehnda c menu tan eh kehar singh lagda e nyi ..'
'Hmmmm..' kuch sochdi hoyi rananjot boli' chal ja kamm muka apna ... jyada naa peewin ... haan naley bholi nu bhejin mere kol ..'

'Sardar ji apney kamrey ch e ney ..' ramanjot wal vekhdi bholi holi jehi boli' 'ranno ayi a unha nu milan...'
'Ranno ..' gardn ghuma ramanjot debu dey kamrey wal vekhdi boli' o kado ayi ..'
'Kado di ..' ramanjot wal vekh fer kamrey wal vekh nimi nimi hasdi hoyi boli bholli
'Awen dand kyoun kad di a ..' bholi wal vekhdi ramanjot gussey ch ghurdi hoyi boli' daseya kyoun nyi menu ..'
'Es ch dasn ali kehri gal ..' ramanjot wal vekhdi boli bholi' agey b tan andi rehndi c apney deor nu milan ..'
'Tun . Na.. ' uth khadi hundi ramanjot kuch kehn tan lgi c fer kuch sochdi hoyi boli' tun chaa bna'
'Jee ..' rasoyi wal jandi ney ek bar mud ramanjot wal vekheya fer burburandi hoyi rasoyi andr wad gyi' sardarni nu ki ho gya pta tan hay es nu sardar tey ranno barey fer awen kyoun ..'

Khadi soch e rahi c k debo kol andr javey k na pta nyi ki gal krdi honi ranno usnal . ..kitey koi suh lain tan nyi ayi sochdi da dil dhark uthea kamrey wal jaan e lgi c k bahr andi ranno nu vekh sah aya..

'Mil lya apney deor nu.. bhain ji' gussa luko hassn di kosis krdi ramanjot upr ton lay haithn tak ranno nu vekhdi boli

'Haan mil lya ...' hasdi hoyi ranno ramanjot wal gaur nal vekhdi boli' ki keha nee tun becharey nu ..jad da waps aya ..chup chup a'
'Mein ki kehna' hasdi hoyi ramanjot boli' tuhanu tan pta e a meri kadi gal b suni usney ..'
'Hye edn na keh nee ..' hasdi hoyi ramanjot nu mehna mardi ranno boli' 'teri gal na sunney koi ..eh b kadi ho sakda ..fer kehar di ki majaal..'
'Ayo Beitho ..' ranno wal vekhdi ramanjot boli tan eh dil bilkul b nyi c usda k ranno us kol rukey usnu tan kahli c kad ranno javey tey o debu nu mil k puchey ki krn ayi c ranno..
'Nyi baad ch awangi ..' ramanjot wal vekhdi ranno hasdi hoyi boli' ghar roti tuk da kr lwan .'

'Theek nyi lag riha eh sab' ramanjot nu andr ayi vekh pareshaan ho burburaya debu
'ki hoyea 'gaur nal debu wal vekhdi boli ramanjot' ki kehndi c ranno! '
'O mehar singh di vohti .. o.. ' kuch sochda hoyea debu bolea' Ajeev ajeev galln krdi c'
'Shak tan nyi ho gya 'bahr buhey wal vekh fer debu samney kursi tey beithdi ramanjot debu da chehra padan di kosis krdi boli
'Pta nyi' pareshaan hoyea debu kamrey ch edr udr vekhda bolea' Kehndi ki gal kehar singh ena ena chup kyoun a menu tan tun badlya badlya lagda.. tun kehar e a ..kitey koi hor tan nyi
'Ohhhh..' debu wal vekh ek dum pareshan ho gyi ramanjot' edan kyoun keha usney tun kuch keha usnu '
'Nyi mein kuch nyi ' pareshan jeha ho debu plang tey beith ramanjot wal vekhda bolea 'badia khullia chakmia galln krdi c ..menu tan samj nyi ayi ki bolan' kuch der chup reh sochda hoyea fer bolea debu 'Gussa na kareyo menu lagda ranno tey kehar singh da kuch na kuch chakr jarur hona ....'
'Hona ki haiga c ' debu wal vekh ramanjot b pareshaan hundi boli..'kehar tan c e lucha tey ranno kehri ghat luchi a.. khasm tan sharb ch dubeya... tey eh deor bhabhi tan sadey viah ton pehlan dey e ..'
' Haan..' Ramanjot di haan ch haan milanda debu bolea' kehndi c aj kal tun bda dur dur behnda.. bhul gya kidan ..'
'Hmmmm ..' es barey tan sochea e nyi c ramanjot ney na e debu nu pind lyan ton pehln ranno barey daseya c ..

'Kehndi buha khulla rakhin rat nu ayoungi.... ' ramanjot ton akhn chura holi jehi bolea debu
'Raat nu ..' ek dum akhn chuk debu wal vekhn lgi ramanjot
'Mein tuhada naa lay k keha b usney hona rat nu' kuch der chup reh fer bolea debu' Kehndi kyoun jooth bolda o tan tenu eney sallan di nedey nyi lgn dindi'
'Ohhh ' sab das gyi ranno debu nu ...burburayi ramanjot
'Kuch smj nyi aa rahi ..' khada hunda debu pareshan ho bolea ' keh k gyi a rat buha khula rakhin mein ayoungi..'
'Hun fer ..' kursi ton uth khadi hundi ramanjot b sochan ch pay gyi..
'Ohi tan samj nyi aa rahi ek passey mehar singh din da doh tin baar aa mil chukka hun eh...tusi dsso ki krn ..' apney mathey tey hath rakh kamrey ch edr udr ghumda debu bolea

'Mein ki ..' debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli 'ek gal chetey rakhin usnu shak nyi hona chahida ki pta teri suh lain lyi '
'Meinu u b ehi lagda' ek dum bolea debu
'Khilya rakhin kuch b ajeha na boli k bnda bnda kam bigad javey. .' Debu nu samjandi ramanjot preshaan ho boli 'Jinna ho sakey dur reh unha ton'

'Ehi soch riha c rat kitey bahr ja fer dujey kamrey ch' pareshan jeha ho kamrey ch edr udr vekhda bolea debu..'
'Koi na edn kr tun upr chubarey ch .. ' debu di haan ch haan milandi ramanjot pareshan hoyi burburayi ' eh kutti b naa..'

'Ek gal hor kehndi c oh ..' kuch der chup reh ramanjot wal vekhda debu bolea
'Kehri ..' bahr jandi jandi debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli
'Kehndi tera smaan tey kagaj pye ney mere kol mein sambh sambh thak gyi' ramanjot wal vekhda debu bolea' pta nyi kehrey kagajn di gal. ...'
'OooOh' ek dum ramanjot dean akhn ch chamak aa gyi ' matlab matlab jammen tey lain den dey kagaj ranno kol ney ..mein sari haveli labh...'
'haan shyad' ramanjot wal vekhda burburaya debu
'Fer tan tenu esi kamrey ch sona paina' apna faisla sunadi khush hundi boli ramanjot' koi na aan dey rat usnu'
'Nyi nyi ..' pichey nu hunda debu bolea
'Ki gal ..'gaur nal debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli' eni madi b nyi o . Sohni sunkhi uchi lambi a'
'Nyi mein nyi' ramanjot di gal katda ek dum bolea debu
'Kyoun' gaur nal debu wal vekh kuch sochdi boli ramanjot' koi kamjori a ..'
'Ki matlab' hadbdanda hoyea bolea dwbu
'Us Rat tere kol sukhjeet wargi jwaan kudi ayi tun usnal kuch nyi 'gaur nal debu nu upr ton lay haithn tak vekhdi ramanjot boli' tey hun ranno ton dr riha'
'Edn di koi gal nyi ' ramanjot ton akhn churanda bolea debu
'Fer ... ' debu wal vekhdi boli ramanjot' raat usnu mil tey keh kagaj devey tenu..'
'Mein kidan' jijhkda haklanda bolea debu
'Vekh debu ajeha kuch na krin k usnu shak pwey .. ' debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli' jidan tun jijhak k galln karda ethey .. tere ton ult c o kehar singh ..Runna kuddia tan usdi voht wadi kamjori c'
'Nyi mein nyi' saaf saaf mukrda debu bolea' mere ton nyi eh sab'
'Ena changa naa bn na e soch ena ..' debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli' gaddar wargi run a j aap thalley pain nu firdi a tun kyoun jikhkda nap lay .. naley tera b pani nikl jayo .. awen preet preet krda rehnda'
'Nyi ...' munh khulla reh gya debu da ..eni khul k boli ramanjot umeed nyi c usnu ...
'Eh tan tenu krna e paina debu' debu wal vekh faisla sunadi ramanjot us nu ghurdi boli' sadi jameen jaydad dey sarey kagaj sambhi beithi a kutti.. o tan tenu uston lay k deney e painey a ...'
'Pr mein kidan 'samaj na ayi debu nu ki boley .. kambni jehi nal kamb uthea... hay tan sirrey di rakkaan ranno ..
'Lagda nyi eh tenu dassn di lod a ..' debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli' gaddar run a .. ajehey khamb khilayrin kabutri dey k kehar dey e nyi o apney gharwaley dey kagaj b tenu fda k jawey ..'
Kuch na bolea debu samj na ayi ki jawab devey ..
'Ena ki sochda gabru jwan munda a lutt najarey ..o aap tere thalley pain nu firdi a tun awen' upr ton lay haithan tak debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli' vekh debu ajeha kuch na karin jis nal usnu shak ho javey.... tun kehar singh nyi a...'

'Chaa bn gyi ..' buhey tey khadi bholi di awaz sun ramanjot tey debu us wal vekhn lgey ramanjot tan ghabra e gyi ek dum gussey ch boli' tenu kiss ney keha c ethey aan nu ..'
'Mein tan eh kehn ayi c cha thandi ..' dar nal kambdi bholi ramanjot dean gussey ch lal hundia akhn wal vekh ghabra k larkharndi awaz ch boli
' tun chal mein ayi ..' bholi wal vekh bahr nu jandi ek baar fer debu wal vekhdi boli ramanjot ' menu nyi pta eh kam hona chahida ... sarey kagaj menu chahidey ney o b jaldi.. hun eh tere tey a kidan tey kini jaldi lay k dinda...'
Kuch na bolea debu bahr jandi ramanjot wal vekhda palang tey beith kamrey ch bney dujey buhey wal vekhn lga......

Nice going Kavita ji keep it up..... Update dende raheo......

kavitakhullar · 15-01-2019, 12:58 PM

'Kagaj Dey jayougi ek adey din ch mehar singh ton akh bacha k ..' ramanjot nu andr ayi vekh plang tey dho la beithda debu kahli kahli bolea.. pta c usnu kagajn da e puchn ayi a..
Sun dey bulln tey muskaan akhn ch chamak aa gyi ramanjot dey debu dey munh ton eh sun dil khushi nal khind utheya na rok saki apney aap nu munh vichon tichar nikl e gyi ' Kr lyi laut fer bhabhi.. '
'Kuch na bolea debu .. 'pehli baar usney shyad ramanjot nu muskurandi khush ho k boldi suneya c
'Shak tan nyi hoyea ..' gaur nal debu nu upr ton lay haithn tak vekhdi ramanjot boli .. dil nu ek sakoon c raat nikl gyi tey debu nu hun kagaj b fda jayougi ranno
'Kehndi c ki gal badlya badleya lag riha kehar singh .. 'kuch sochda chetey krda bolea debu' ena chup chup tan tenu kadey nyi vekhea ..fer puchn lgi tun kehar singh e a..' ehi keha mein edn di koi gal nyi pareshaan haan thora es lyi ..'
'Ohhhh .. ' 'tenu keha c jijhki naa uston' dil dhark uthea ramanjot da khijdi debu nu samjandi hoyi boli 'fer'

'Kehndi menu dss apni pareshani mein kahdey wastey haan mere ton kuch lukeya tera..' ramanjot ton akhn churanda debu holi jehi bolea
'Luchi ..' munh bnandi boli ramanjot' kado gyi'
'Tadkey..' kuch sochda chatt wal vekhda debu bolea
'Hor kuch kehndi c' gaur nal debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli
'Mein keha c na tuhanu mere ton nyi eh sab...' kuch sochda ek dum bolea debu' usnu hor shak pay jana'
'Nalley kehnda tadkey gyi .. sari rat tere thalley pyi rahi' debu wal vekhdi boli' fer kehra shak'
'Samjdey kyoun nyi hun tusi mera chehra tan bdlwa ditta pr baki taan' apney munh tey hath fer apney app nu vekhda debu bolea
'Kyoun ..kad kathi teri kehar singh wargi a ' gaur nal debu dey jism nu vekhdi ramanjot boli
'Fer b' samj na ayi debu ki kahey o hun
'Fer b ki' thori hairan thori pareshan hundi ramanjot boli
'Umar ch tan frak a 'kuch jijhkda sochda bolea debu 'jad asin kardey pye c usney tan saaf e puch liya kaun a tun'
'Ohhhhh fer 'hun samj ayi ramanjot nu eh tan usney sochea e nyi run nu tan jhat pta lag janda jad kisi hor da pehli baar andr lendi a .'
Kuch na bolea debu kadi chatt wal kdi kamrey ch edr udr vekhda ..smj na aa rahi c ki dasey hun .
Pareshan hoyi ramanjot b apna sar fad beithi .Eh tan usney sochea e nyi c usnu kehra pta c ranno bhaji bhaji ayougi kehar singh kol .. na e eh pta c kehar singh ney apney sarey hisab kitaab tey jameena dey kagaj ranno kol .. .. kehar singh da tan c b motta lumba es da tan... pareshan hoyi debu dey jism wal vekhdi boli' fer tun ki keha
'Ehi tuhanu behm a ..eney mahinia baad asin miley haan ... ' ramanjot wal vekhda debu bolea 'hor ki kehnda mein'
'Fer ..'gaur nal debu wal vekhdi ramanjot boli
'Kehndi eney salan da tera lendi haan menu naa pta hovey .. ' ramanjot wal vekhda bolea debu' kehndi das kaun a tun..'
'Ohhh..' ghabra e gyi ramanjot munh khulla reh gya usda' matlab ranno nu pta lag gya eh kehar singh nyi ....'
'Kosis kiti hor na boln dewan usnu pr bar bar ehi kehndi rahi ..ena josh tan jwani ch nyi c tere ch .. kaun a tun. .' Ramanjot wal vekhda debu bolea
'Hmmmm..' samj gyi bdl tan ditta debu nu kehar singh naal ... pr umar da frak tan' pareshaan hoyi boli' eh tan galat hoyea debu jehra usnu pta lag gya k tun kehar singh nyi'
' nyi pta nyi lga shak hoyea c' plang ton uth khada ho ek passey nu janda debu bolea 'kosis kiti samjan di fer kitey ja yakeen hoyea usnu ..'
'Ohhhh..' kuch sah aya ramanjot nu kuch sochdi debu wal vekhdi boli' o kidan'
'Kol pyi hath ferdi ferdi boli 'eda wada tey lumba' ramanjot ton akhn churanda bolea debu ..' sida e kehn lgi tun kehar singh ho e nyi sakda'
'Ohhh .. ' pta nyi kyoun sarsari jehi hoyi ramanjot nu eh sun ranno ney eh keha debu da kehar ton b lamba tey motta . . kehar Singh da tan kafi motta tey lumba c tey c es da uston b..' boli kuch na bull ghut tedi akh nal debu dey pattn wal vekhn lgi
'Mein samjaya bhabji bahrley mulk ton eney mahinia baad ayea haan.. ' ramanjot kol anda debu bolea' uthey doct kol kyi tareekey ney nwa josh paan tey lamba motta krn dey..'
'Ohhhh..' sakoon sah aya ramanjot nu ...socheya nyi c usney ..debu ena sahi jwaab dey dayouga ranno nu ..
'Fer kitey yakeen ayea usnu ' lamba sah lenda bolea debu' kehndi apney bhra da b chakr lagwa dey bahrley mulk ... uskol tan jma e nika jeha a'
'Kutti 'Burburayi ramanjot kuch der chup rahey dono fer ramanjot boli 'kad dayougi kagaj'
'Kehndi c aj raat lay k ayoungi sambh k rakey ney' ramanjot wal vekhda bolea debu
'Aj raat nu .. kutti nu jyada e chaska' burburayi ramanjot fer ek dum chup kr debu nu upr ron lay haithn tak vekhdi boli' kehna c din nu dey k jawey ...'
'Menu pta e nyi c kehrey kagajn di gal kr rahi a es lyi chup e riha' chatt wal vekhda bolea debu
'Aho tenu ki lod c kam di gal krn di' debu wal vekhdi burburayi ramanjot 'gaddar wargi jatti hath lgi c .. Kaun chad da hath ayi beigani run ...'
'Edan di koi gal nyi 'akhn churanda jad burburaya debu ek baar tan ramanjot b thori jehi hil gyi usney tan waisey e burburaya c tey debu ney sun lya kuch soch bahr nu jandi boli
'Chal koi na lutt najarey' ..' ajay tan ek pyi a tere thalley hor pta nyi kinnia honia ...'
Boldi boldi hass pyi ramanjot pehli baar usney ramanjot nu hasdi vekheya c smj nyi usnu tichar krkey gyi a k kehar singh lyi apna gussa kad k gyi...'

Vicksv · 15-01-2019, 05:47 PM

Good keep it up.......swaad aa geya

Sexyjanu · 15-01-2019, 06:33 PM

I read a lot of stories but the way u write its amazing as silent reader from last year now i finally join to waxe u kavita mam ur the bestvof best i had ever seen in these stories

Gilly · 15-01-2019, 09:41 PM

Update thoda vada deoo

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