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28-01-2026, 01:03 PM
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I think the key to the story was how Prem will react when he gets to know...it felt like he won't be cuckold and would leave and move on considering his planning...and also what Nivi might do to either save the marriage or face the consequences of her betrayal... so for me the ending felt unnatural and an escape to not confront any real conflict and emotions...
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(28-01-2026, 11:36 AM)heygiwriter Wrote: Thanks you observed a lot.. I should be cautious in titles so its like setting a different expectations.. yes my initial idea was how the doubts of a husband indirectly pushing his wife to do the exactly the same - affair or cheating he feared. but over the chapters he becomes side character and Nivi become main character. and for writing it does have taken time but i use to work around some slid plot points make separate chapters and build conversation around it so looks like that make it quick.. but id does eat full day of time..
Glad you liked the ending.. for the way i drafted..
Also with encouragements in personal boxes and here open chats.. im planning for Part 2 where Prem will eventually get to know.. i dont know yet bt lets see where it goes
Rather than a sequel you could probably create a different story line. I really liked the way you ended this story giving an open ended conclusion and its for the readers to assume to their thoughts. I for everything liked that you did not unnecessarily created humiliation to the husbands and showed the strength of Nitin & Prem to hold the secrets while knowing that it would ruin the lives. I liked how Aadhil & Rohan were matured not to hurt the family while having pleasure. I liked how you treated the ladies balancing between pleasure and family. This was perfect. Any continuation will actually ruin the story from either side of opinions. Let people assume, the spark would exist for few days and eventually people will be immersed in other stories. They only want a pleasure and will soon be bored if the story line do not fall into their perversion.
Just my thoughts. I respect your opinions but honestly appreciate your efforts and more so in awe for how you wrote a real good story. it had technicalities, pace, thought provoking elements like mirror. It was a perfect screenplay.
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(29-01-2026, 12:36 AM)lakshana Wrote: Rather than a sequel you could probably create a different story line. I really liked the way you ended this story giving an open ended conclusion and its for the readers to assume to their thoughts. I for everything liked that you did not unnecessarily created humiliation to the husbands and showed the strength of Nitin & Prem to hold the secrets while knowing that it would ruin the lives. I liked how Aadhil & Rohan were matured not to hurt the family while having pleasure. I liked how you treated the ladies balancing between pleasure and family. This was perfect. Any continuation will actually ruin the story from either side of opinions. Let people assume, the spark would exist for few days and eventually people will be immersed in other stories. They only want a pleasure and will soon be bored if the story line do not fall into their perversion.
Just my thoughts. I respect your opinions but honestly appreciate your efforts and more so in awe for how you wrote a real good story. it had technicalities, pace, thought provoking elements like mirror. It was a perfect screenplay.
Im very glad to hear this.. finally someone understood my intentions behind giving every characters a better ending -- than a perfect one.
Thanks a lot :) Started writing new story
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30-01-2026, 07:17 AM
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@heygiwriter
Like everyone said - We loved your story telling narration, plots, twists, climax and cliffhanger just AWESOME.
But what is also more surprising is that you checking and replying cautiously to everyone... Dude you are just on another level of awesomeness ?
however, like you wisely said that its not easy to meet everyone's expectations and point of views etc etc...
I also have a advice or request or suggestion. I hope you atleast read my pov and understand what and where am coming from. So lemme begin to explain what I really want to say and hence why I made this account and write my 1st ever comment in my last 20+ yrs of being a active reader on such site
" Cheating, Adultery, Kink, Fetish.... everyone has it and enjoys it in their own way. But as a human and from personal experience being cheated + humiliated + shamed and not being able to do anything against is a very very very bad feeling for a human (from a normal man's perspective) (cucks and simps are different breeds all together) . Any story that shows and portrays that a WOMEN feels empowered being a slut is a stab to human society and to MEN if am being honest. Mens are slut maker, while womens are sluts. Its not easy to make a women slut than a women making themselves slut. If you may have read an amazing story " The Unwanted Houseguest" that story touches every aspect of kinks, shames, simps, ducks, bdsm, subs and doms etc... but in the end rightfullness prevails. Right thing has to prevail... IT MUST PREVAIL....
Am not saying theres always a happy ending... but some conscious rightfull relief of atleast one thing happening right.
For example in my opinion " Prem and nitin should have found out the cheating... the appropriate skut shaming of their wives, the humiliation of their wives defending illogical sense of freedom and control but being nothing more than worse of sluts. The husband's disowning them and divorcing them and give them ultimate freedom on expense of not getting custody of the children or else the husband's will prove thier infidelity in court. The wives have everything now they wanted - freedom, have sex with anyone anywhere, their business and money ..... but no TRUE LOVE and Real Caring / trust from that one person... have one void known as LOVE... the false empowerment of success and smile behind the guilt of destroying family is something every h03 should feel the shame.
Those 2 men's building career and giving better guidance to their children's. Etc seems a rightful ending. Because here no one actually won or lost.... everyone won and everyone lost...
My whole point is let morals and righful consciousness win rather than any gender. The reason I say so is that even if this is just a fiction, it does add up in one's thought and might give birth to something that shouldn't exist in their mind. As a moral code, give flare to the fantasies, but dont give birth to such fantasies as something to be accepted as OKAY.... because u never know when your words may ruin a person's life in real...
There are many cucks stories where the man stays cuck till the end of story because he has to accept the consequences of being cuck... however characters like PREM or any such character in any story is a REAL MAN. He made mistakes, realized his mistakes and made effort to work it out. That's what being a man is and dont shame such man with a ending where such slut cheating women thinks infidelity is success and empowering.
There are people who want to see their partner with someone else once tbh... but they know that the fantasy as 1 thing and the consequences of it is other thing. its jst a fantasy or a thought, but not every cuck would let any other man have dominance over their own manly ego/ authority.. simple.....
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(30-01-2026, 07:17 AM)Whyamihere Wrote: @heygiwriter
Like everyone said - We loved your story telling narration, plots, twists, climax and cliffhanger just AWESOME.
But what is also more surprising is that you checking and replying cautiously to everyone... Dude you are just on another level of awesomeness ?
however, like you wisely said that its not easy to meet everyone's expectations and point of views etc etc...
I also have a advice or request or suggestion. I hope you atleast read my pov and understand what and where am coming from. So lemme begin to explain what I really want to say and hence why I made this account and write my 1st ever comment in my last 20+ yrs of being a active reader on such site
" Cheating, Adultery, Kink, Fetish.... everyone has it and enjoys it in their own way. But as a human and from personal experience being cheated + humiliated + shamed and not being able to do anything against isn't is a very very very bad feeling for a human (from a normal man's perspective) (cucks and simps are different breeds all together) . Any story that shows and portrays that a WOMEN feels empowered being a slut is a stab to human society and to MEN if am being honest. Mens are slut maker, while womens are sluts. Its not easy to make a women slut than a women making themselves slut. If you may have read An amazing story " The Unwanted Houseguest" that story touches every aspect of kinks, shames, simps, ducks, bdsm, subs and doms etc... but in the end rightfullness prevails. Right thing has to prevail... IT MUST PREVAIL....
Am not saying theres always a happy ending... but some conscious rightfull relief of atleast one thing happening right.
For example in my opinion " Prem and nitin should have found out the cheating... the appropriate skut shaming of their wives, the humiliation of their wives defending illogical sense of freedom and control but being nothing more than worse of sluts. The husband's disowning them and divorcing them and give them ultimate freedom on expense of not getting custody of the children or else the husband's will prove thier infidelity in court. The wives have everything now they wanted - freedom, have sex with anyone anywhere, their business and money ..... but no TRUE LOVE and Real Caring / trust from that one person... have one void known as LOVE... the false empowerment of success and smile yet behind the guilt of destroying family for what?
Those 2 men's building career and giving better guidance to their children's. Etc seems a rightful ending. Because here no one actually won or lost.... everyone won and everyone lost...
My whole point is let morals and righful consciousness win rather than any gender. The reason I say so is that even if this is just a fiction, it does add up in one's thought and might give birth to something that shouldn't exist in their mind. As a moral code, give flare to the fantasies, but dont give birth to such fantasies as something to be accepted s OKAY....
There are many cucks stories where the man stays cuck till the end of story because he has to accept the consequences of being cuck... however characters like PREM or any such character in any story is a REAL MAN. He made mistakes, realized his mistakes and made effort to work it out. That's what being a man is and dont shame such man with a ending where such slut cheating women thinks infidelity is success and empowering.
There are people who want to see their partner with someone else once tbh... but they know that the fantasy as 1 thing and the consequences of it is other thing. its jst a fantasy or a thought, but not every cuck would let any other man have dominance over their own manly ego/ authority.. simple.....
So true. I Agree with every single line of yours. This is the reason i ended the story with open ending. The real time consequences are bigger. I even stay with Prem or Nitin on this they are honest but their wives are fucking around. Imagine same in real time.. The mens genrally dnt hide or keep secrets. Nivi or Vani would have got divorce. because the story has this one solid show prem/nitin are never a cuck or wanna be.. They are just worried about the friends and wish their family get back on feet as family.. The proper end would be atleast the least let them have their familes and ladies back to family zone.. I also saw the line fantasy cannot be accpeted as okay. Never.. its just a fantasy withing the fiction within xossipy. :) and inside one personal thoughts.
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(30-01-2026, 10:28 AM)heygiwriter Wrote: So true. I Agree with every single line of yours. This is the reason i ended the story with open ending. The real time consequences are bigger. I even stay with Prem or Nitin on this they are honest but their wives are fucking around. Imagine same in real time.. The mens genrally dnt hide or keep secrets. Nivi or Vani would have got divorce. because the story has this one solid show prem/nitin are never a cuck or wanna be.. They are just worried about the friends and wish their family get back on feet as family.. The proper end would be atleast the least let them have their familes and ladies back to family zone.. I also saw the line fantasy cannot be accpeted as okay. Never.. its just a fantasy withing the fiction within xossipy. :) and inside one personal thoughts.
I am really looking forward for more stories written by you. You are good in writing and very creative too.. I just hope, just hope that in one of your future stories, you ensure that justice and rightful person prevails. It doesnt has to be a happy ending, but a ending which feels right if considered to be a real life experience.
If you ever need help to come up with a plot or have a weiters block, ask us and we will help you with different idea, which you can use it in your own amazing imaginative way. Afterall, you are good story teller ?
Meanwhile, jst to know - are you writing anything ? Can we hope for a new story from you anytime soon ?
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(31-01-2026, 12:58 AM)Whyamihere Wrote: I am really looking forward for more stories written by you. You are good in writing and very creative too.. I just hope, just hope that in one of your future stories, you ensure that justice and rightful person prevails. It doesnt has to be a happy ending, but a ending which feels right if considered to be a real life experience.
If you ever need help to come up with a plot or have a weiters block, ask us and we will help you with different idea, which you can use it in your own amazing imaginative way. Afterall, you are good story teller ?
Meanwhile, jst to know - are you writing anything ? Can we hope for a new story from you anytime soon ?
already started one.. Mirnaa - Vikram's innocent Hotwife
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31-01-2026, 01:05 AM
(27-01-2026, 01:22 AM)DeanWinchester00007 Wrote: Well , This is your story . Yes , You cannot satisfy every one . .
But After that informer introduce , The story tank . The sex was as Usual great no doubt , even better . The chemistry between Aadil and NIVI was best , The plot turning to each other was great but there was no pay off .
I mean the seriousness and tension was gone . Final arc which in I expected that husbands gonna find out the truth and it is their turn because Both Husbands started to dig , So the seriousness and tension was there ,leading towards Climax but once it was cleared that nope , the story just took another turn ,it kind of became stale , no high or low points . Like Flatline , four of them just playing each other . The characters also felt like cardboard .
That is why the ending is so pathetic , and Then you went one step forward and ruined it further .
Why did you even introduce VIKRAM ? One phone call from ROHAN and that character just vanished ?
The setup towards the end was great but it is the pay off which ruined the whole story and left bitter taste in mouth .
At least it ended . PREM and NITIN two brain dead zombie husbands . Just even reading their part hurts my brain . So much stupidity . It would have been better if they were out of equation whole time and wives should have handled the whole thing , and husbands just working in office .
Again , I am not saying the ending is pathetic , It was good but only if you had not set up the plot .
I mean the flow of story disturbed , it scattered everywhere ultimately leads to catastrophic ending . No satisfaction , No closure , I mean nothing No body loose Anything which is good in a way . Every one just get adjusted as equal .
But after reading your comment , I thought why did you choose to end the story this way and I kind of know why . It was great move (Just a hunch )
Well , Now it ends .
But again The story was great , Great Writing , Fast Updates , Eroticism was highlight of the story. Some of the best eroticism i have read specially Aadil and NIVI .
Again Kudos to you . 
( Comments are for fun , Not Criticism of the story or writer )
Absolutely agree.... the bitter taste of No ending feels bad... I mean to be honest, here cheating wives and Rohan/adhil won... the truthful men prem and nitin got played and didnt get any proper closure. For example, after prem learnt the past from Vikram and madhavan, he should have had Absolute doubt that his wife was fked too( know his doubtful nature) because the change in his wife's behavior, no physical or emotion intimacy equals to a 3rd persons presence in a wokens life.
Still, loved the story.. everyone has own perception and fantasies.. so no blame game at all. Just looking forward for more awesome stories ?
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Good story... So far nice..
Any one cuckload just give me pvt msg. We can discuss wife fantacy.
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05-02-2026, 10:24 PM
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(31-01-2026, 01:05 AM)Whyamihere Wrote: Absolutely agree.... the bitter taste of No ending feels bad... I mean to be honest, here cheating wives and Rohan/adhil won... the truthful men prem and nitin got played and didnt get any proper closure. For example, after prem learnt the past from Vikram and madhavan, he should have had Absolute doubt that his wife was fked too( know his doubtful nature) because the change in his wife's behavior, no physical or emotion intimacy equals to a 3rd persons presence in a wokens life.
Still, loved the story.. everyone has own perception and fantasies.. so no blame game at all. Just looking forward for more awesome stories ?
Sure i'm actually planning for part 2 after completing my current story Mirna' Vikram's Innocent housewife. In this part i wiill try to sort the issues audience felt. Lets see
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