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I think the key to the story was how Prem will react when he gets to know...it felt like he won't be cuckold and would leave and move on considering his planning...and also what Nivi might do to either save the marriage or face the consequences of her betrayal... so for me the ending felt unnatural and an escape to not confront any real conflict and emotions...
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(28-01-2026, 11:36 AM)heygiwriter Wrote: Thanks you observed a lot.. I should be cautious in titles so its like setting a different expectations.. yes my initial idea was how the doubts of a husband indirectly pushing his wife to do the exactly the same - affair or cheating he feared. but over the chapters he becomes side character and Nivi become main character. and for writing it does have taken time but i use to work around some slid plot points make separate chapters and build conversation around it so looks like that make it quick.. but id does eat full day of time..
Glad you liked the ending.. for the way i drafted..
Also with encouragements in personal boxes and here open chats.. im planning for Part 2 where Prem will eventually get to know.. i dont know yet bt lets see where it goes
Rather than a sequel you could probably create a different story line. I really liked the way you ended this story giving an open ended conclusion and its for the readers to assume to their thoughts. I for everything liked that you did not unnecessarily created humiliation to the husbands and showed the strength of Nitin & Prem to hold the secrets while knowing that it would ruin the lives. I liked how Aadhil & Rohan were matured not to hurt the family while having pleasure. I liked how you treated the ladies balancing between pleasure and family. This was perfect. Any continuation will actually ruin the story from either side of opinions. Let people assume, the spark would exist for few days and eventually people will be immersed in other stories. They only want a pleasure and will soon be bored if the story line do not fall into their perversion.
Just my thoughts. I respect your opinions but honestly appreciate your efforts and more so in awe for how you wrote a real good story. it had technicalities, pace, thought provoking elements like mirror. It was a perfect screenplay.
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(29-01-2026, 12:36 AM)lakshana Wrote: Rather than a sequel you could probably create a different story line. I really liked the way you ended this story giving an open ended conclusion and its for the readers to assume to their thoughts. I for everything liked that you did not unnecessarily created humiliation to the husbands and showed the strength of Nitin & Prem to hold the secrets while knowing that it would ruin the lives. I liked how Aadhil & Rohan were matured not to hurt the family while having pleasure. I liked how you treated the ladies balancing between pleasure and family. This was perfect. Any continuation will actually ruin the story from either side of opinions. Let people assume, the spark would exist for few days and eventually people will be immersed in other stories. They only want a pleasure and will soon be bored if the story line do not fall into their perversion.
Just my thoughts. I respect your opinions but honestly appreciate your efforts and more so in awe for how you wrote a real good story. it had technicalities, pace, thought provoking elements like mirror. It was a perfect screenplay.
Im very glad to hear this.. finally someone understood my intentions behind giving every characters a better ending -- than a perfect one.
Thanks a lot :) Started writing new story
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30-01-2026, 07:17 AM
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@heygiwriter
Like everyone said - We loved your story telling narration, plots, twists, climax and cliffhanger just AWESOME.
But what is also more surprising is that you checking and replying cautiously to everyone... Dude you are just on another level of awesomeness ?
however, like you wisely said that its not easy to meet everyone's expectations and point of views etc etc...
I also have a advice or request or suggestion. I hope you atleast read my pov and understand what and where am coming from. So lemme begin to explain what I really want to say and hence why I made this account and write my 1st ever comment in my last 20+ yrs of being a active reader on such site
" Cheating, Adultery, Kink, Fetish.... everyone has it and enjoys it in their own way. But as a human and from personal experience being cheated + humiliated + shamed and not being able to do anything against is a very very very bad feeling for a human (from a normal man's perspective) (cucks and simps are different breeds all together) . Any story that shows and portrays that a WOMEN feels empowered being a slut is a stab to human society and to MEN if am being honest. Mens are slut maker, while womens are sluts. Its not easy to make a women slut than a women making themselves slut. If you may have read an amazing story " The Unwanted Houseguest" that story touches every aspect of kinks, shames, simps, ducks, bdsm, subs and doms etc... but in the end rightfullness prevails. Right thing has to prevail... IT MUST PREVAIL....
Am not saying theres always a happy ending... but some conscious rightfull relief of atleast one thing happening right.
For example in my opinion " Prem and nitin should have found out the cheating... the appropriate skut shaming of their wives, the humiliation of their wives defending illogical sense of freedom and control but being nothing more than worse of sluts. The husband's disowning them and divorcing them and give them ultimate freedom on expense of not getting custody of the children or else the husband's will prove thier infidelity in court. The wives have everything now they wanted - freedom, have sex with anyone anywhere, their business and money ..... but no TRUE LOVE and Real Caring / trust from that one person... have one void known as LOVE... the false empowerment of success and smile behind the guilt of destroying family is something every h03 should feel the shame.
Those 2 men's building career and giving better guidance to their children's. Etc seems a rightful ending. Because here no one actually won or lost.... everyone won and everyone lost...
My whole point is let morals and righful consciousness win rather than any gender. The reason I say so is that even if this is just a fiction, it does add up in one's thought and might give birth to something that shouldn't exist in their mind. As a moral code, give flare to the fantasies, but dont give birth to such fantasies as something to be accepted as OKAY.... because u never know when your words may ruin a person's life in real...
There are many cucks stories where the man stays cuck till the end of story because he has to accept the consequences of being cuck... however characters like PREM or any such character in any story is a REAL MAN. He made mistakes, realized his mistakes and made effort to work it out. That's what being a man is and dont shame such man with a ending where such slut cheating women thinks infidelity is success and empowering.
There are people who want to see their partner with someone else once tbh... but they know that the fantasy as 1 thing and the consequences of it is other thing. its jst a fantasy or a thought, but not every cuck would let any other man have dominance over their own manly ego/ authority.. simple.....
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(30-01-2026, 07:17 AM)Whyamihere Wrote: @heygiwriter
Like everyone said - We loved your story telling narration, plots, twists, climax and cliffhanger just AWESOME.
But what is also more surprising is that you checking and replying cautiously to everyone... Dude you are just on another level of awesomeness ?
however, like you wisely said that its not easy to meet everyone's expectations and point of views etc etc...
I also have a advice or request or suggestion. I hope you atleast read my pov and understand what and where am coming from. So lemme begin to explain what I really want to say and hence why I made this account and write my 1st ever comment in my last 20+ yrs of being a active reader on such site
" Cheating, Adultery, Kink, Fetish.... everyone has it and enjoys it in their own way. But as a human and from personal experience being cheated + humiliated + shamed and not being able to do anything against isn't is a very very very bad feeling for a human (from a normal man's perspective) (cucks and simps are different breeds all together) . Any story that shows and portrays that a WOMEN feels empowered being a slut is a stab to human society and to MEN if am being honest. Mens are slut maker, while womens are sluts. Its not easy to make a women slut than a women making themselves slut. If you may have read An amazing story " The Unwanted Houseguest" that story touches every aspect of kinks, shames, simps, ducks, bdsm, subs and doms etc... but in the end rightfullness prevails. Right thing has to prevail... IT MUST PREVAIL....
Am not saying theres always a happy ending... but some conscious rightfull relief of atleast one thing happening right.
For example in my opinion " Prem and nitin should have found out the cheating... the appropriate skut shaming of their wives, the humiliation of their wives defending illogical sense of freedom and control but being nothing more than worse of sluts. The husband's disowning them and divorcing them and give them ultimate freedom on expense of not getting custody of the children or else the husband's will prove thier infidelity in court. The wives have everything now they wanted - freedom, have sex with anyone anywhere, their business and money ..... but no TRUE LOVE and Real Caring / trust from that one person... have one void known as LOVE... the false empowerment of success and smile yet behind the guilt of destroying family for what?
Those 2 men's building career and giving better guidance to their children's. Etc seems a rightful ending. Because here no one actually won or lost.... everyone won and everyone lost...
My whole point is let morals and righful consciousness win rather than any gender. The reason I say so is that even if this is just a fiction, it does add up in one's thought and might give birth to something that shouldn't exist in their mind. As a moral code, give flare to the fantasies, but dont give birth to such fantasies as something to be accepted s OKAY....
There are many cucks stories where the man stays cuck till the end of story because he has to accept the consequences of being cuck... however characters like PREM or any such character in any story is a REAL MAN. He made mistakes, realized his mistakes and made effort to work it out. That's what being a man is and dont shame such man with a ending where such slut cheating women thinks infidelity is success and empowering.
There are people who want to see their partner with someone else once tbh... but they know that the fantasy as 1 thing and the consequences of it is other thing. its jst a fantasy or a thought, but not every cuck would let any other man have dominance over their own manly ego/ authority.. simple.....
So true. I Agree with every single line of yours. This is the reason i ended the story with open ending. The real time consequences are bigger. I even stay with Prem or Nitin on this they are honest but their wives are fucking around. Imagine same in real time.. The mens genrally dnt hide or keep secrets. Nivi or Vani would have got divorce. because the story has this one solid show prem/nitin are never a cuck or wanna be.. They are just worried about the friends and wish their family get back on feet as family.. The proper end would be atleast the least let them have their familes and ladies back to family zone.. I also saw the line fantasy cannot be accpeted as okay. Never.. its just a fantasy withing the fiction within xossipy. :) and inside one personal thoughts.
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(30-01-2026, 10:28 AM)heygiwriter Wrote: So true. I Agree with every single line of yours. This is the reason i ended the story with open ending. The real time consequences are bigger. I even stay with Prem or Nitin on this they are honest but their wives are fucking around. Imagine same in real time.. The mens genrally dnt hide or keep secrets. Nivi or Vani would have got divorce. because the story has this one solid show prem/nitin are never a cuck or wanna be.. They are just worried about the friends and wish their family get back on feet as family.. The proper end would be atleast the least let them have their familes and ladies back to family zone.. I also saw the line fantasy cannot be accpeted as okay. Never.. its just a fantasy withing the fiction within xossipy. :) and inside one personal thoughts.
I am really looking forward for more stories written by you. You are good in writing and very creative too.. I just hope, just hope that in one of your future stories, you ensure that justice and rightful person prevails. It doesnt has to be a happy ending, but a ending which feels right if considered to be a real life experience.
If you ever need help to come up with a plot or have a weiters block, ask us and we will help you with different idea, which you can use it in your own amazing imaginative way. Afterall, you are good story teller ?
Meanwhile, jst to know - are you writing anything ? Can we hope for a new story from you anytime soon ?
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(31-01-2026, 12:58 AM)Whyamihere Wrote: I am really looking forward for more stories written by you. You are good in writing and very creative too.. I just hope, just hope that in one of your future stories, you ensure that justice and rightful person prevails. It doesnt has to be a happy ending, but a ending which feels right if considered to be a real life experience.
If you ever need help to come up with a plot or have a weiters block, ask us and we will help you with different idea, which you can use it in your own amazing imaginative way. Afterall, you are good story teller ?
Meanwhile, jst to know - are you writing anything ? Can we hope for a new story from you anytime soon ?
already started one.. Mirnaa - Vikram's innocent Hotwife
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(27-01-2026, 01:22 AM)DeanWinchester00007 Wrote: Well , This is your story . Yes , You cannot satisfy every one . .
But After that informer introduce , The story tank . The sex was as Usual great no doubt , even better . The chemistry between Aadil and NIVI was best , The plot turning to each other was great but there was no pay off .
I mean the seriousness and tension was gone . Final arc which in I expected that husbands gonna find out the truth and it is their turn because Both Husbands started to dig , So the seriousness and tension was there ,leading towards Climax but once it was cleared that nope , the story just took another turn ,it kind of became stale , no high or low points . Like Flatline , four of them just playing each other . The characters also felt like cardboard .
That is why the ending is so pathetic , and Then you went one step forward and ruined it further .
Why did you even introduce VIKRAM ? One phone call from ROHAN and that character just vanished ?
The setup towards the end was great but it is the pay off which ruined the whole story and left bitter taste in mouth .
At least it ended . PREM and NITIN two brain dead zombie husbands . Just even reading their part hurts my brain . So much stupidity . It would have been better if they were out of equation whole time and wives should have handled the whole thing , and husbands just working in office .
Again , I am not saying the ending is pathetic , It was good but only if you had not set up the plot .
I mean the flow of story disturbed , it scattered everywhere ultimately leads to catastrophic ending . No satisfaction , No closure , I mean nothing No body loose Anything which is good in a way . Every one just get adjusted as equal .
But after reading your comment , I thought why did you choose to end the story this way and I kind of know why . It was great move (Just a hunch )
Well , Now it ends .
But again The story was great , Great Writing , Fast Updates , Eroticism was highlight of the story. Some of the best eroticism i have read specially Aadil and NIVI .
Again Kudos to you . 
( Comments are for fun , Not Criticism of the story or writer )
Absolutely agree.... the bitter taste of No ending feels bad... I mean to be honest, here cheating wives and Rohan/adhil won... the truthful men prem and nitin got played and didnt get any proper closure. For example, after prem learnt the past from Vikram and madhavan, he should have had Absolute doubt that his wife was fked too( know his doubtful nature) because the change in his wife's behavior, no physical or emotion intimacy equals to a 3rd persons presence in a wokens life.
Still, loved the story.. everyone has own perception and fantasies.. so no blame game at all. Just looking forward for more awesome stories ?
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Good story... So far nice..
Any one cuckload just give me pvt msg. We can discuss wife fantacy.
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05-02-2026, 10:24 PM
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(31-01-2026, 01:05 AM)Whyamihere Wrote: Absolutely agree.... the bitter taste of No ending feels bad... I mean to be honest, here cheating wives and Rohan/adhil won... the truthful men prem and nitin got played and didnt get any proper closure. For example, after prem learnt the past from Vikram and madhavan, he should have had Absolute doubt that his wife was fked too( know his doubtful nature) because the change in his wife's behavior, no physical or emotion intimacy equals to a 3rd persons presence in a wokens life.
Still, loved the story.. everyone has own perception and fantasies.. so no blame game at all. Just looking forward for more awesome stories ?
Sure i'm actually planning for part 2 after completing my current story Mirna' Vikram's Innocent housewife. In this part i wiill try to sort the issues audience felt. Lets see
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(24-12-2025, 07:29 PM)Muralimm Wrote: I am eagerly waiting for the next update the drama and the sole delivery on now
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(29-12-2025, 01:28 AM)Simply superb. Awesome narrationheygiwriter Wrote: Chapter 42 – The Dark Fantasy
Aadhil got the missed call from Rohan — a single ring, deliberate and unmistakable.
He glanced at his phone, then nodded to his men in the VapsoftNue conference room.
"Turn off the jammers."
The tech flipped the switch — the invisible network block vanished instantly, signals flooding back.
The foreign clients — two sharp-suited executives from European firms, ties crisp, accents thick — wrapped up the demo.
Impressed with Prem's ideas, his pitch sharp and confident, diagrams on the screen making perfect sense.
"We have another meeting now," one said, standing with a briefcase snap. "But good work. We'll call back soon."
Prem beamed — handshake firm, adrenaline still pumping through his veins.
The manager who had called him that morning — Aadhil's trusted aide, suit tailored, smile professional — offered a drop.
"Sir, let me take you back to your hotel."
Prem glanced at the clock — past 8 PM, the room now dim with evening shadows.
Heart sank like a stone.
Nivi... so many plans. Disappointed her again. How could I lose track of time?
Called her — urgent, thumb shaky on the screen.
In the hotel, Rohan lifted Nivi in his arms — strong, effortless, her legs wrapping instinctively around his waist as they stayed locked in the deep kiss, bodies pressed tight, her softness yielding to his hardness.
Dropped her on the bed — bounce soft, sheets rumpling under her weight, her hair fanning out like a halo.
Pulled her saree pallu — silk sliding away slowly, whispering against skin, exposing the blouse that hugged her curves, nipples hardening under the fabric from the cool air and his gaze.
Nivi's phone rang — Prem.
Rohan looked at her — eyes dark, mid-kiss pause, lips swollen and glistening.
He asked, voice rough with desire, "Going to leave me again for him?"
Nivi shook her head — breath fast, chest heaving.
"No.. but let me pick this... we need to give chance for him..."
She picked the call — voice steady as she could manage, hand trembling slightly.
Nivi: "Hello."
Prem: "Sorry... met business person. Took long. I'm sorry." Im on the way now
Nivi: "How long it will take for you to reach here?"
Prem: You are in same spot ? or back to hotel
Nivi: Do you think i will stand for hours there? I came back to hotel
She controlled her irritation.
Prem sorry i'm really sorry let me explain you in person
Prem asked the nearby person — "How long, sir?"
Person: "Just 20 KM... but Bangalore traffic — gonna be 2 hours."
Rohan typed something quick on his phone — showed her the screen.
Ask share Google Maps live location.
She did — voice casual, but heart racing.
"Send me live location.."
Prem: "Sure, darling. dont be mad at me... i have reasons"
Cuts call.
Nivi murmurs him and his reasons..
Rohan smirked.. looking at her.. she knew the meaning.. her face turned even more naughty expecting the heat... she said 2 hours...
Rohan threw his shirt off — chest bare, muscles taut, skin glistening with light sweat from the heat between them.
Removed his pants — boxer brief V-cut, hardness outlined prominently, straining the fabric.
Came on top of her — weight pinning her down, heat immediate, bodies aligning perfectly.
Hungrily unhooked her blouse buttons — one by one, fingers deft but trembling with urgency, fabric parting to reveal lace bra, breasts heaving with each breath.
He kissed her — deep, urgent, tongue invading, tasting her fully.
In no time her saree thrown from bed — silk pooling on the floor in a heap.
Also her blouse — discarded carelessly, landing beside.
Now she in bra and petticoat — fair skin flushed pink, nipples visible through lace, body arching slightly under his gaze.
Rohans arms nerves running through when he is in mood — veins bulging like thick cords under his taut skin, forearms flexing as he hovered over her, every muscle defined in the low light, power and control radiating from his body.
She missed noticing last time — too lost in darkness and haze, but now, eyes wide, she drank him in: the way his biceps tensed, shoulders broad and shadowed, chest rising with heavy breaths, a light sheen of sweat making his skin gleam.
Their lips sealed again in hungry and passion — mouths crashing, tongues battling wet and desperate, moans vibrating between them, her hands clutching his back, nails digging into muscle.
He quickly decided to take her in full control — flipped her gently but firmly onto her back, pinning wrists above head with one hand, the other roaming.
Pushed on her weak spot — the neck — lips latching, tongue licking slow, deliberate trails along the sensitive curve.
Causing tinglings — electric shivers racing down her spine, straight to her core.
She moaned in pleasure — low, throaty, "Ahhh..." head falling back, exposing more.
He ripped her bra apart, her breast bouncing.. she smiled at his action..
Rohan declared your body is mine..
mmm the only word Nivi mouth uttered
Rohan started playing with her breast properly, pressing it circling her nipple with his tounge, biting the nipple..
he tries to fit entire breast left side into his mouth..
Nivi hands carres his hair in the attempt..
he started sucking each breast and playing it
then he moved up for a lip to lip kisss. his bare chest crushes her breast it was hot feeling for him
The mobile showing GMap — notification ping, screen lighting: He is 12km away.
He took her petticoat away — fingers hooking waist string, pulling down slow, fabric sliding over hips, thighs, revealing lace panty already soaked.
Now she was just in panty — body flushed, breasts heaving, nipples hard.
While he was in inner — boxer brief tented obscenely.
He broke the kiss — breath hot, eyes locked. He moved near her making his hip face her face...
"Asked Nivi undress me."
She saw his eyes — dark, commanding, desire burning.
Pulled his boxer brief — hands trembling excitement.
The thick hard long penis struck on her face — springing free, heavy slap against cheek, hot skin, vein-ridged length throbbing, tip glistening pre-cum.
She gasped — surprise, arousal.
He came down hugged her again — pulling close, making his penis touch her spot above panties — grinding slow, fabric barrier teasing clit.
He teases her entry — rubbing head along wet lace, pressing but not entering, until it soaked through, her arousal dripping.
And he removed it in a go — fingers hooking sides, yanking down, panty tossed aside.
Now they are completely naked — skin on skin, heat merging.
when his thick dick touches her entry spot... Nivi sensed a heat she just moaned could not contain.. her body shivered with heat leaks of contact
They were kissing again — frantic, tongues swirling, moans louder.
And he now inserted his penis — pushed slowly inside — thick head parting folds, stretching her inch by inch.
She moaned — loud, drawn out "Ohhh god..." as he filled her completely, walls clenching around length.
He started making movements — slow at first, deep thrusts, wet sounds filling room.
While the map says 6 kms away.. she saw it — glance at phone, heart racing irony.
After almost an hour teases, kisses, making her heat now playing on her spot — fingers on clit, circling, pinching, her body writhing, sweat-slick, breasts bouncing with rhythm.
Slaps — his hand coming down on ass cheek sharp, stinging pleasure, red mark blooming, her cry sharp "Ah!"
Rohan said let me show who properly take care of your needs
Nivi closed her eyes and said show me..
Visual — bodies glistening sweat, her fair skin flushed deep rose, his darker tone contrasting, muscles flexing with every thrust.
He suddenly stopped — pulled away, leaving her empty, aching.
She panicked — "What why you stopped. What happen."
Body trembling edge.
Rohan came near her — face close, eyes intense.
"Nivi.. I don't want you to be in dilemma again if I enter now.. I want you to fully embrace our sexual relationship.. are you okay with it..."
Nivi looking at him — breath ragged, body screaming need, internal conflict raging
"Tell me you want me in you...want to feel me in you"
Nivi — lost, surrendered.
"I want you in me..please" she almost begged - The complete surrender that cannot be undone...
He pushed one big push — full length slamming deep, bottoming out.
Making her make a loud noise — scream-moan "Ahhh fuck!"
He didn't look back — pounded intense, hips snapping, wet slaps echoing, bed creaking.
As every km reduced — thrusts harder, faster, hand slapping ass again, red prints.
She begged in heat — "More... deeper... please..."
He flipped her —
Thrusts brutal pleasure.
Then — breath ragged.
Nivi — lost, "Yes... take me... all..."
20 minutes into as he keep thrusting her slaps sounds heavy ....
"Nivi... I have big fantasy.... my dark one.. will you make me accomplish, baby?"
"Sure, baby... what it is..." Her voice breathless, hands clutching his back, nails digging lightly.
"I want to fuck you when Prem around... make him invisible cuckold for neglecting you.."
Nivi lost in heat — body arching up, mind hazy from pleasure, internal conflict flashing, words spilling without thought.
"Ahhhh mmmmm yessss lets do it.. yeah baby..."
He growled in ear, "Fill you everywhere... put my baby in you... mark you mine..."
She — "Yes... fill me... baby..."
Rohan hearing all these he increased his force.. the app shows 1M away, Prem nearing them gives his ultimate high..
Thud thud thud thud
Thud thud thud thud
Thud thud thud thud
Nivi feared he is turning like a beast but she loved,, it was something very new for her..
he is taking her to different pleasure... she realisd she is getting an orgasm...but Rohan seemed still heavy unshaken.. she closed her eyes in ecstasy
Climax built — bodies slapping, moans loud, sweat dripping.
Orgasm crashed — her screaming, clenching, him flooding deep.
Collapsed.
Breathless.
Nivi looked at him, prem might arrive anytime now
Rohan said yes.. Its time for you to go to his room.
Dont forget the words you agreed with me
and this is just the start.. going forward you will see a new world of happiness, love, joy and pleasure.. remember this too baby
Nivi breathing asked what ?. she collects every words...
as she was about to process..
Prem reached the hotel... The app showed 0KM...
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(23-12-2025, 05:16 PM)heygiwriter Wrote: Chapter 33 - The plan in unfolds.
As he released her hand, she kept it there — fingers curling instinctively around the thick heat of him through the fabric, feeling the pulse, the urgency.
A small, unconscious squeeze.
Rohan's breath hitched.
He looked at her — eyes dark, pleading.
"I need this, Nivi. Please... make my birthday memorable."
His voice was husky, raw with want, but still gentle — asking, not demanding.
She whispered, voice trembling with the weight of her decision — guilt, desire, care all tangled.
"This is the best I can do for you..."
As Rohan was about to remove his night pant, fingers hooking the waistband...
Nivi said softly, "Let me turn away and just give my hand — you place it."
Rohan exhaled, voice husky with relief and restraint.
"Okay..."
Nivi turned opposite way — back to him, heart pounding.
Rohan front pressing her back now — warm skin on skin as he quickly shed the last barrier.
He was stark nude.
He placed his thick, throbbing penis in her waiting hand — hot, velvet over steel, veins pulsing under her fingers.
She was stroking in bare hands… without looking at it — slow at first, tentative, exploring the length, the girth, the way it jumped at her touch.
Learning the heat, the pulse, the slick bead at the tip that she spread with her thumb.
Firm grip now — up and down, rhythm building.
Rohan's breath ragged against her neck, hot puffs sending shivers down her spine.
His hips shifted slightly — instinctive thrusts into her fist.
Five minutes — her hand moving steady, twisting lightly at the head, squeezing base.
His groans low, muffled against her shoulder.
But not enough to unleash his deeper plan…
He whispered, voice pleading, lips brushing her ear.
“Nivi… maybe I should first treat you well..”
She broke into laughter — surprised, light, the sound cutting the tension like a spark in the dark.
“What? What are you going to do?”
He lifted her nighty slowly — fabric bunching at her waist.
Brought his hand between her thighs — warm palm sliding up smooth skin.
Under the nighty. Panty pushed aside gently.
Nivi jerked — body tensing, "No.. I just..."
Rohan said firmly but soft, "NO Nivi we need this… let's do this for each other.. Every time I kiss you I know you miss this heat… don't cheat yourself…"
He gasped as his fingers met slick folds — warm, soaked, betraying her want.
“Nivi… you’re so wet.”
He circled her clit — slow, teasing strokes, feather-light at first, watching her reaction.
Watched her face — every flutter of eyelids, every parted lip, every small gasp.
Learned her — pressure here made her hips twitch, speed there made her breath hitch.
One finger slipped inside — gentle, deep, curling to explore.
Then two — stretching, filling.
Curled perfectly.
Nivi surrendered to the pleasure — body relaxing into him, back arching slightly.
She stopped complaining — her grip on his penis slowly losing strength as waves built, pleasure taking over what she missed for years.
He slowly asked, lips at her ear, "When did you have satisfying sex last.."
Nivi didn't reply — just moaned softly, head falling back against his shoulder.
He found the spot that made her back arch sharp — fingers pressing, rubbing.
Thumb on clit — steady pressure, circles tightening.
Building her slowly. Higher.
Her moans soft — muffled against his neck as she buried her face there, hiding the sounds.
Breaths coming in gasps — short, desperate.
He kissed her ear, whispered.
“Let go for me. I want to feel you come.”
He lifted from the bed slightly and quickly went under the bedsheet — movement fluid, determined.
He pulled panties completely down — slowly, reverently — letting the cool air hit her wetness, making her shiver.
She was soaked — glistening in the low light.
He groaned softly at the sight — low, hungry.
Then lowered his mouth.
The first touch of his tongue — warm, flat, slow — made her gasp loud, body jolting.
He tasted her like she was the only thing that mattered — long, deliberate licks from entrance to clit.
Circles around her clit — tight, focused.
Then gentle sucking — pulling the sensitive bud between lips.
She arched off the bed — hands fisting the sheets, knuckles white.
Under the thin bedsheet, her body moved like a wave — hips rolling, thighs trembling.
He held her thighs open — gentle but firm, not letting her close.
Tongue dipping inside her — fucking her with it slow.
Then back to her clit — relentless, perfect pressure, speed varying to keep her on edge.
She moaned — soft at first, then louder, broken, desperate.
“Rohan…”
He didn’t stop.
He knew this was the right moment.
He crawled back up.
Body over hers.
Skin on skin — sweat-slick, hot.
His cock — hard again, aching — slid along her slick folds.
Pressed at her entrance.
Both wet.
Ready.
He looked into her eyes — pleading, loving, asking without words.
She felt him there — thick, hot, wanting to fill her.
Her breath hitched.
The moment stretched — charged, inevitable.
Super writting bro. Yours story writting made me mad. I really divine into your story
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Please continue part 2, such a beautiful narrative. Love to see part 2
Thank you for such an erotic story
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Awesome story but I did not like the way it ended. The way nivi chose aadi over rohan. Baby fantasy lost in between. Nivi still living unsatisfied life with prem.was thinking Rohan as hero till climax. You made him like cruel villain
Thanks for the story
Start second part of you have any idea.
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Nivi should get pregnant with aadhil and Vani with rohan. The children will be memory for life. DP with vani and nivi in same bed
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Please start season 2 from epilogue 1
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