Adultery The Husband’s Doubt [Completed]

[Ankita b]

THANK YOU ALL 

Thank you everyone who appreciated me — you've been a huge motivation to complete the story.


Some may like it, some may not. Some may have expected the story to travel along their own preferred path… but this is how I envisioned it.

Given the long story format, sometimes after writing a few chapters the direction might naturally change based on character evolution — but even then, it still went in the way I ultimately wanted to envision. Sometimes it depended on my mood, like considering the aftermath for the characters or feeling personal sympathy toward them.


For example: 
Initially, I planned to pair Rohan and Nivi, even rohan marrying nivi was a plan... but midway through, I wanted Prem to get something too. He hadn’t done anything wrong. Though in real life no one has control over others’ feelings, as an author I had that control… so I gave him Nivi back, even though she’s flawed.

To give her back to Prem, I needed Nivi to cut her emotional attachment to Rohan. So I introduced Aadhil — with him, Nivi shared a much deeper connection, which gave me a believable reason for the shift. Which become another challenge for me t o break the bond... so as a reaosn... I had to punish them through Nivi and Vani…

I learned a lot from you guys.

One thing I realised is that no author can satisfy every kind of audience.

With that said, I’ve come up with a few more story ideas and will start on them as soon as possible.


Regarding the open ending: I don’t have any plans for a Part 2 right now, but I wanted to at least leave it open-ended so people who wish can imagine the lead’s future from here.

It would be great if you pair rohan and nivi because cucky  prem want nivi to be happy. Do not make Nivi slut by gangbang or fucking other instead get married anf fucked by rohan only. Ad cucky part

[heygiwriter]

Thanks for the invitation to the end

More over the world In the story plot is perfect pitch

Waiting for the next story line

My Next Story line

Next storyline: My next story is about a couple who got married after falling in love. They have a rags-to-riches journey. As the husband’s power and status increase, the number of women he gets involved with also goes up. Out of guilt and necessity, he decides to throw his wife into the adultery world.

The trick is: she is not sharp like Nivi, or even in the range of Vani. She is completely innocent and naive. Training her into a hotwife requires constant push and manipulation. But when she finally awakens, that’s when the story gets complicated.

This is the story of Mirna, the innocent, beautiful, lovely wife who loves her husband Vikram more than anything. Vikram’s cop friend Bharath and Manya coming into the picture complicates the aftermath. The story will be journey of Vikram.. it covers from his childhood to adulthood.. hence a lot characters travel with him.. those characters are important as story progress.

Will Mirna’s innocence be saved? Or will she rise above her fear? Will their love survive after all the tides hit?

The story will fall under Mature, Adultery, Cheating, Voyeur, manipulation, Love, and Romance. Also Thriller..

[heygiwriter]

It would be great if you pair rohan and nivi because cucky  prem want nivi to be happy. Do not make Nivi slut by gangbang or fucking other instead get married anf fucked by rohan only. Ad cucky part

Personally I'm not into Rohan and Nivi anymore .. as they lost it in middle. May be aadhli and nivi. They have natural connection .. i loved the angle prem doing it to maker her happy .. 

should he make it open like open relationship or he orchestrates it from back to make her fall again in affair.. in that case its like Epilogue 2 keys taken but broken.. Prem who wants to see her happy , orchestrates things that brings aadhil close to her for one full affair.

[heygiwriter]

Busness ia growing Niting and pream jad touched the skh limit one day while takinv drinks Pream vomint some thing which changed life of Nitin and Vani but there was new story started Nitin decided he will return same medicene to vani which she had. Forced him to take and Nitin decided to do same thing with non other then Vani own small sister let see if you can give a new shape to this stpry now its ball on your court

Interesting... basically Nitin revenging Vani.. Nice idea..

[DeanWinchester00007]

Well , This is your story . Yes , You cannot satisfy every one . .


But After that informer introduce , The story tank . The sex was as Usual great no doubt , even better . The chemistry between Aadil and NIVI was best , The plot turning to each other was great but there was no pay off .

I mean the seriousness and tension was gone . Final arc which in I expected that husbands gonna find out the truth and it is their turn because Both Husbands started to dig , So the seriousness and tension was there ,leading towards Climax but once it was cleared that nope , the story just took another turn ,it kind of became stale , no high or low points . Like Flatline , four of them just playing each other . The characters also felt like cardboard . 

That is why the ending is so pathetic , and Then you went one step forward and ruined it further . 

Why did you even introduce VIKRAM ? One phone call from ROHAN and that character just vanished ?

The setup towards the end was great but it is the pay off which ruined the whole story and left bitter taste in mouth . 

At least it ended . PREM and NITIN two brain dead zombie husbands . Just even reading their part hurts my brain . So much stupidity .  It would have been better if they were out of equation whole time and wives should have handled the whole thing , and husbands just working in office . 

Again , I am not saying the ending is pathetic , It was good but only if you had not set up the plot . 

I mean the flow of story disturbed , it scattered everywhere ultimately leads to catastrophic ending . No satisfaction , No closure , I mean nothing No body loose Anything which is good in a way . Every one just get adjusted as equal . 

But after reading your comment , I thought why did you choose to end the story this way and I kind of know why . It was great move   (Just a hunch )

Well , Now it ends .




But again The story was great , Great Writing , Fast Updates , Eroticism was highlight of the story. Some of the best eroticism i have read specially Aadil and NIVI . 


Again Kudos to you .   

( Comments are for fun , Not Criticism of the story or writer )

[Muralimm]

Interesting story plot

Waiting for the update

[heygiwriter]

Well , This is your story . Yes , You cannot satisfy every one . .


But After that informer introduce , The story tank . The sex was as Usual great no doubt , even better . The chemistry between Aadil and NIVI was best , The plot turning to each other was great but there was no pay off .

I mean the seriousness and tension was gone . Final arc which in I expected that husbands gonna find out the truth and it is their turn because Both Husbands started to dig , So the seriousness and tension was there ,leading towards Climax but once it was cleared that nope , the story just took another turn ,it kind of became stale , no high or low points . Like Flatline , four of them just playing each other . The characters also felt like cardboard . 

That is why the ending is so pathetic , and Then you went one step forward and ruined it further . 

Why did you even introduce VIKRAM ? One phone call from ROHAN and that character just vanished ?

The setup towards the end was great but it is the pay off which ruined the whole story and left bitter taste in mouth . 

At least it ended . PREM and NITIN two brain dead zombie husbands . Just even reading their part hurts my brain . So much stupidity .  It would have been better if they were out of equation whole time and wives should have handled the whole thing , and husbands just working in office . 

Again , I am not saying the ending is pathetic , It was good but only if you had not set up the plot . 

I mean the flow of story disturbed , it scattered everywhere ultimately leads to catastrophic ending . No satisfaction , No closure , I mean nothing No body loose Anything which is good in a way . Every one just get adjusted as equal . 

But after reading your comment , I thought why did you choose to end the story this way and I kind of know why . It was great move   (Just a hunch )

Well , Now it ends .




But again The story was great , Great Writing , Fast Updates , Eroticism was highlight of the story. Some of the best eroticism i have read specially Aadil and NIVI . 


Again Kudos to you .   

( Comments are for fun , Not Criticism of the story or writer )

Thanks for the honest feedback. The pay off is little uncertain.. As for Vikram character i guess he cannot do much as he didn't do anything when Aashika got affected he detached himself from Aashika after he knows about her affair. Him revenging for Aashika doesn't make sense. May be he was just satisfying his ego. But once he realize ladies are contested he know his limit and gets back.. he was just in better position because of his friendship to Rohan's wife family who can unplug him. As for the ladies they  crossed every boundaries.. painting them saint or turning them as good is joke after a point. The balanced way can be them taking back control. So i turned it like. Its a win between flaw vs Flaw.. Rohan & Aadhil Winning or  Nivi & Vani Winning.. Imagine Rohan and aadil winning it means the affair continues.. Prem and Nitin kept in cheating loop. Them splitting up with ladies are only way.. or them playing along with ladies and become a willing cuck.. As the characters are really good i didnt wanted them to face the humiliation and tweaked it.. i just don't want Prem and Nitin to face it at least in this  first part.. When the sex between ladies and Rohan-Aadhil increases the redemption arc gets decreases. It would again look overly dramatic or unreal.. Worst part in Rohan and Adhil winning is they wont even marry them..  So i made Nivi and Vani winning which will keep Prem and Nitin honors undisturbed.. They got their pride atleast to their husbands. And they have a measure finale in sex with their alter partners. This is most balanced ending i can give without disturbing any one.. and yes for one wishing more open ending will open up :)

[Manwithlove]

They got their pride for the husband's?? After dp ing and constantly having sex with other 2 men....nah I don't think so, there are so many questions unanswered for the husband's and the 2 husband's already know about the other wife's cheatings.. and that is not a small thing to know about you know.. like it's a small thing to those who are cuckold so I think you should make them cuckold and that will make sense..

[Manwithlove]

They got their pride for the husband's?? After dp ing and constantly having sex with other 2 men....nah I don't think so, there are so many questions unanswered for the husband's and the 2 husband's already know about the other wife's cheatings.. and that is not a small thing to know about you know.. like it's a small thing to those who are cuckold so I think you should make them cuckold and that will make sense.. 

Btw keeping all the opinions aside the story is great...and it is great to see a story end here in xossipy yk what I mean.. nice writings and buildups it's just that some characters lost its credibility throughout the story and it's fine maybe that was writers plan all along so congratulations on your great story.

Ciao!

[heygiwriter]

Thanks

[thesubhunk]

Involve daughter of nivi

[heygiwriter]

Involve daughter of nivi

Strictly no :) no space for kids in adult world

[heygiwriter]

To people who have send private message and here :)

Plan for Part 2 is on :) once the sketch is done may be when i get some space i will try to start it

[Givemeextra]

Epilogue 1: Possible outcome of Open ending  No 1

6 hours after the door lock..

The camera zoomed out slowly — cinematic, deliberate — revealing the full scene.
She was naked — body glistening with sweat, legs spread wide.
Aadhil was above her — missionary, his long cock buried deep inside her pussy, hips pressed flush against hers.
He had been still during the call — but now, he thrust once — slow, deep.
They lip-locked hungrily — tongues devouring, her hands tangling in his hair.
“Miss me, baby?” he asked, voice rough against her mouth.
She smiled — breathless — “I just said I miss you… inside me.”
He grinned — thrust again, harder.
She smirked between the Umma was for you.. dont mistake it for him
She moaned — loud now, unrestrained.




Cut to Vani Room – Same Time

Nitin — warm, tired — “Hey. We’re on the ground. How’s everything back home?”
Vani — voice gentle — “Sleepy… no, I miisse you…”
Nitin — chuckling — “You sound gone. What are you doing?”
“Baby is crying… so I’m feeding him. Hear his slurps.”
She brought the phone closer to her breast — letting Nitin hear the quiet, wet sounds of Nivas nursing.
Nitin — smiling through the phone — “Aw… give him a kiss from me. Miss you both. We’ll be back soon.”
“Miss you too…” She trailed off — a soft, tired sigh escaping.
Click.
The phones went dark.
The camera zoomed out — slow, revealing.
Vani was naked — lying on her back, one breast exposed.
Rohan was sucking hungrily — lips sealed around her nipple, tongue swirling, drawing those soft slurps.
They shared a smile — wicked, intimate.
Phone cut.


(End of Epilogue 1 – Keys Taken – The back door remains open forever)

Now - this is the ideal endin....in fact,  the only ending needed.

Yes - The backdoor remains open forever.

[heygiwriter]

Now - this is the ideal endin....in fact,  the only ending needed.

Yes - The backdoor remains open forever.

I would instead go with Epilogue 2 and still this happens but now through husbands.. an idea not sure how it will goes yet to sketch.. planning to go to this strech

[Givemeextra]

I would instead go with Epilogue 2 and still this happens but now through husbands.. an idea not sure how it will goes yet to sketch.. planning to go to this strech

All reconcile and a Happily ever after ending..Noooooooo

[Ayush01111]

I would instead go with Epilogue 2 and still this happens but now through husbands.. an idea not sure how it will goes yet to sketch.. planning to go to this strech

Waiting for husbands turn now  and let wife know

[heygiwriter]

All reconcile and a Happily ever after ending..Noooooooo

It could be happy for prem being happy about nivi need getting fullilled. 
Nivi she plays as per wish of Prem
Aadhil finally reconcile for affair.. 

This could be may be?

[DeanWinchester00007]

Thanks for the honest feedback. The pay off is little uncertain.. As for Vikram character i guess he cannot do much as he didn't do anything when Aashika got affected he detached himself from Aashika after he knows about her affair. Him revenging for Aashika doesn't make sense. May be he was just satisfying his ego. But once he realize ladies are contested he know his limit and gets back.. he was just in better position because of his friendship to Rohan's wife family who can unplug him. As for the ladies they  crossed every boundaries.. painting them saint or turning them as good is joke after a point. The balanced way can be them taking back control. So i turned it like. Its a win between flaw vs Flaw.. Rohan & Aadhil Winning or  Nivi & Vani Winning.. Imagine Rohan and aadil winning it means the affair continues.. Prem and Nitin kept in cheating loop. Them splitting up with ladies are only way.. or them playing along with ladies and become a willing cuck.. As the characters are really good i didnt wanted them to face the humiliation and tweaked it.. i just don't want Prem and Nitin to face it at least in this  first part.. When the sex between ladies and Rohan-Aadhil increases the redemption arc gets decreases. It would again look overly dramatic or unreal.. Worst part in Rohan and Adhil winning is they wont even marry them..  So i made Nivi and Vani winning which will keep Prem and Nitin honors undisturbed.. They got their pride atleast to their husbands. And they have a measure finale in sex with their alter partners. This is most balanced ending i can give without disturbing any one.. and yes for one wishing more open ending will open up :)

I get it , Your explanation is fine for the story and ending . 

But , again , I dont agree with balanced ending thing . It would be much better Prem turning into willing cuckold than live his life under a lie . If Prem character was based on abusive husband or something bad characteristic , then this ending would have been  some what acceptable but this is overly dramatic or unreal   . You went to extreme at the end . .They knew the truth , You took us too close even when they were fighting inside the secret room , you pulled back hard . Complete 180 hahaha . 

Again I was not saying that I expected a good ending , The ending i expected based on written material , not on your mood hahaha which of course We as reader wont get to  know  what were going on in your mind at that time when you were writing . 

First I was thinking your were too sympathetic Towards Rohan character but nope I was wrong , You were sympathetic towards NIVI character , Whatever Rohan did , He did it for NIVI . Even at the end you turned the whole situation which was going against NIVI completely in her favor . She won at both front , Her family and Her affair . She won her husband trust , Her economic independency , and satisfied her sexual curiosity and found herself a lover . 

The title is wrong ( which i think you had said in your first story) . lol . The Mention of husband in the title made me think Prem as a central character, the way his character fleshed out at the starting the ending was pretty much expected but nope IT WAS NIVI , It's her story . So ending was in her favor is completely understandable , Prem is irrelevant here . So I think It does not matter if he lives rest of his life under complete lie with who does not even love him . He was a side character which settled most of things .

And again , When both of them finally got what they wanted , Why they did not leave ?, NIVI even confessed that she does not love Prem any more , Why did not she just leave ? She has her business , She found herself , Empowered then why stay in marriage ? 

This is will not be seen as redemption arc but NIVI's getting evolved .


So i made Nivi and Vani winning which will keep Prem and Nitin honors undisturbed.. They got their pride atleast to their husbands.

....... in their eyes .   

 but here Why  A happy ending for PREM expected  , which means PREM finds about the betrayal . Prem got the house on his name, sent her daughter to hostel and He was talking about some business plan or idea  . So I thought when the battle starts between Prem and NIVI , Prem would eventually get most of their assets . A house and then A new business plan for his new life . Why would you even drop these crumbs if you dont want readers to follow it then He went to Kerala,  . So you changed the direction of the plot from here or it was always the plan ? 

Few things that i wanted to say earlier . 

But the story ends , I mean not . KEY IS STILL WORKING . 

But Ending is really good , something unexpected. 

I just wonder , How do you write so fast ? and you already shared the teaser of your new story 

I am excited and waiting to read your next story . 





( Comments are for fun , and not the criticism of the story or writer )

[heygiwriter]

I get it , Your explanation is fine for the story and ending . 

But , again , I dont agree with balanced ending thing . It would be much better Prem turning into willing cuckold than live his life under a lie . If Prem character was based on abusive husband or something bad characteristic , then this ending would have been  some what acceptable but this is overly dramatic or unreal   . You went to extreme at the end . .They knew the truth , You took us too close even when they were fighting inside the secret room , you pulled back hard . Complete 180 hahaha . 

Again I was not saying that I expected a good ending , The ending i expected based on written material , not on your mood hahaha which of course We as reader wont get to  know  what were going on in your mind at that time when you were writing . 

First I was thinking your were too sympathetic Towards Rohan character but nope I was wrong , You were sympathetic towards NIVI character , Whatever Rohan did , He did it for NIVI . Even at the end you turned the whole situation which was going against NIVI completely in her favor . She won at both front , Her family and Her affair . She won her husband trust , Her economic independency , and satisfied her sexual curiosity and found herself a lover . 

The title is wrong ( which i think you had said in your first story) . lol . The Mention of husband in the title made me think Prem as a central character, the way his character fleshed out at the starting the ending was pretty much expected but nope IT WAS NIVI , It's her story . So ending was in her favor is completely understandable , Prem is irrelevant here . So I think It does not matter if he lives rest of his life under complete lie with who does not even love him . He was a side character which settled most of things .

And again , When both of them finally got what they wanted , Why they did not leave ?, NIVI even confessed that she does not love Prem any more , Why did not she just leave ? She has her business , She found herself , Empowered then why stay in marriage ? 

This is will not be seen as redemption arc but NIVI's getting evolved .


So i made Nivi and Vani winning which will keep Prem and Nitin honors undisturbed.. They got their pride atleast to their husbands.

....... in their eyes .   

 but here Why  A happy ending for PREM expected  , which means PREM finds about the betrayal . Prem got the house on his name, sent her daughter to hostel and He was talking about some business plan or idea  . So I thought when the battle starts between Prem and NIVI , Prem would eventually get most of their assets . A house and then A new business plan for his new life . Why would you even drop these crumbs if you dont want readers to follow it then He went to Kerala,  . So you changed the direction of the plot from here or it was always the plan ? 

Few things that i wanted to say earlier . 

But the story ends , I mean not . KEY IS STILL WORKING . 

But Ending is really good , something unexpected. 

I just wonder , How do you write so fast ? and you already shared the teaser of your new story 

I am excited and waiting to read your next story . 





( Comments are for fun , and not the criticism of the story or writer )

Thanks you observed a lot.. I should be cautious in titles so its like setting a different expectations.. yes my initial idea was how the doubts of a husband indirectly pushing his wife to do the exactly the same - affair or cheating he feared. but over the chapters he becomes side character and Nivi become main character.   and for writing it does have taken time but i use to work around some slid plot points make separate chapters and build conversation around it so looks like that make it quick.. but id does eat full day of time.. 


Glad you liked the ending.. for the way i drafted.. 

Also with encouragements in personal boxes and here open chats.. im  planning for Part 2 where Prem will eventually get to know.. i dont know yet bt lets see where it goes