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Adultery Dost Ki Teacher Ammi Ko Pataya ..
Bahut badhiya update. Bahut hi mast kahaani
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Awesome and amazing update. Sexy and spicy narrations. Hats off.
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Yaar, this story will be more exciting and erotic if Asma narrates the story. If it's possible, please consider.
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Bahut bahut exciting update
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Bahut badhiya update. Very nice build up.
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(23-10-2025, 03:30 PM)Lalu Mastan Wrote: Yaar, this story will be more exciting and erotic if Asma narrates the story. If it's possible, please consider.

Yes
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Bahut bahut mast update
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(23-10-2025, 03:30 PM)Lalu Mastan Wrote: Yaar, this story will be more exciting and erotic if Asma narrates the story. If it's possible, please consider.

Agree
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Exciting update
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Guy's do you all really want me to write story from Asma's prospective
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(23-10-2025, 05:28 PM)Milfloverravii(Sid kidoo) Wrote: Guy's do you all really want me to write story from Asma's prospective

You can keep switching the perspectives between Saurabh and Asma. As I had pointed out earlier, without highlighting whats going on inside Asma's head, one can not really justify the way she is slipping. Check out your updates 13-14. From that point, she has suddenly reached a situation where they are just about to have intercourse. There are reasons for sure, but they need to be highlighted more strongly and that will happen when Asma's inner monologue is presented. Also, there is definitely a need to develop her struggles with her husband a lot more. Let the husband come across as a villain which throws Asma into the arms of Saurabh, only for her to realise that he has been playing a triple game with 3 women in parallel.

On the other issue, you should not stop writing. There is a nice flow to the story as of now and the story itself is at a critical point. I fully understand the apparent delays in you posting the updates. But any one can see that you definitely post over the weekend. You have highlighted your work related time pressures and people understand. The best way to answer criticism is to keep posting as and when you can. Even your worst critics are not complaining about the content and you should take solace in that.This story is very promising. I can see a lot of possibilities ahead.You can have Saurabh end up with a harem of Asma, her daughter and her student, have him have threesomes and foursomes. Its all beautifully set up. Dont stop writing. Let it flow. Try to improve the backdrop even more.
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(23-10-2025, 09:17 AM)Milfloverravii(Sid kidoo) Wrote: Bhai main likhne ko Mana nahi Kar raha. Lekin Kuch chutiye hote hai. Jo mere har update ko padke unki 2" ki lulli ko hilate hai. Aur bhag jate hai. Na koi like. Na comments. Na hi koi appreciation. Lekin update me jarasa late hojaye toh backchodi Karne AA jate hai. samaj hi Gaye hoge Kis 2 chutiyon ki baat Kar Raha hun. Hai Koi abhijeet aur devil karke 2 chutiye.

Sale tum dono chutiyon se kon keh Raha hai Meri story pado. Gand me itni hi dam hai toh khud likhke Bata. 

Yaar Maine plot ke liye kuch alag Socha tha. Isliye thoda break lene ki Soch Raha tha. Lekin in dono chutiyon ki pata nahi Kon maa chod Gaya. Jo gand me itni Mirchi lag rahi hai. Aur kamsekam Mera ek fan toh samne Aya. DarkLordLover2 thanks Mere liye un dono chutiyon ke khilaf stand Lene ke liye. Guy's Mera AP logon se bhi yahi umeed hai . Aise chutiyon ki taraf Mera stand le. Jo mere loyal fans hai unke liye main story jarur agge likhunga. Kabhi band nahi Karunga. Lekin ye chutiye Jara se delay me backchodi Karne AA jate hai. Isliye mood kharab ho jata hai. Agar aise hi chutiye ate rahe toh Mera khud maan nahi Hoga likhne kaa. 

Main saaf kardun dubara. Main sirf kuch chutiyon ki wajahse ye story band nahi Karunga. Bas update delay hojaye toh patient rahe. Aur aise chutiyon ke khilaf mere liye stand le. Main bohot sensitive hun. Aise ladai wagarah se dur rehta hun. Isliye muskil se mere muh se galiyan nikalti hai. Story ki baat alag hai. Real life me main kabhi kisise galat nahi bolta. Lekin agar aise chutiye akke backchodi karte rahe toh Mera khud confidence down ho jayega. Phir main is site pe bhi na dikhun. Isliye AP logon se sirf itni request hai. Aise chutiyon ke against Mera stand le. Unhe yaha se bhaga de..

Thanks for all my loyal readers. For their patience. And understanding.. soon I will start posting again. Thank you

I understand writer's block. It happens to the best of the best. Keep writing till you see the quality of your output suffer. That, trust me, has not happened at all. Do your best, everyone understands the time constraints. You should ignore the one liners which in the name of feedback just demand a quick update. Concentrate on your output, post as and when possible, stay calm and you will be fine. This story has the potential to be the best one on the site. Keep writing. The more you develop it, the better it will become and the problems with respect to feed backs, views and ratings will sort themselves out. All the best!
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Ekdum super duper hit update
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Fantastic and awesome update
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Just brilliant and highly appreciated writing performance.
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Marvelous and absolutely master blaster writing.
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Amazing and beautiful update ❤️
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Bahut bahut exciting aur fataka update
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Exciting and sensual update
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(23-10-2025, 05:28 PM)No sir  Milfloverravii(Sid kidoo) Wrote: Guy's do you all really want me to write story from Asma's prospective
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