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Well done Sriya Vikram ko side kar diya, ab Iqbal and Supriya ki Suhaagraat bhi to hogi jab Supriya ne khud bol diya wo hina ki Chachi!! hai, and ghar wale bhi force karege jab Shaadi hui hai to ab Shuaagraat hona bhi to jaruri hai wonderful update
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wow, great, you made a realistic scenario, super update
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Thanks for the update, Sriya ji hope you are well and healthy now.
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Eagerly Waiting for the next updates
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Absolutely Really Fantastic Update!!! Sriya You are Super Awesome
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@Sriya ab theek ho to please next update thoda jaldi dena
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(19-08-2025, 12:37 PM)Morbius Wrote: Hii mai ek silent reader tha khas aapki iss kahani pe comment karne ke liye ID banayi hai
Last 2-3 week se ye kahani suru ki thi aur jo 2 kahani ka refrence diya tha starting mai uss mai se ek kahani "The Innocent wife" se maine xossip par kahani padha suru ki thi aur wo kahani mere dil ke kafi kareeb thi aur aapki iss kahani mai uske jaisa hi maza aa raha aur Recently mai ye meri Fav kahani hai.
Apke likhne ka andaz kafi reality ke karib hai aur jaisa apne kaha aur maine baki logo ke comment mai dekha Supriya ek massum ladki hai par ye kahani padh ke uske liye gaye faisle se logo ko uske prati nafarat paida karti hai jaisa ussne apne pati ke sath kiya wo sab padh ke mujhe bhi kafi dukh hota hai
But aapne character devlopment bhi kafi ache se kiya ki kaise Atul aur uske beech Sab dheere dheere khatam hone laga aur supriya phle mazbur hui aur ab wo maze le rahi kisi aur ke pyar mai. Lekin ab wo apne hi faisle mai uljhi hui hai.
Last Update meri umeed se kafi alag aur intresting tha Abdul ka character apne bataya tha ki grey hai so sab confirm nahi thhe ki uske aur Supriya ke beech kuch hoga ki nahi.
Meri req hai ki Apni health ka dhyan rakhiye ga aur iss kahani ko puri zaroor kariyega
Bohot bohot dhanyavaad aapka… aur aapne khaaskar comment karne ke liye id banayi uske liye bhi..
Hopefully main ye kahani poori kar payu… main is kahani se jude kuch aur patro ke baare mein bhi kahani likhna chahungi… kuch kahani hai mere mind mein… sochungi ki unhe isi mein likh du ya baad mein alag se shuru karu…
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Sriya ji kabhi hum jaise readera ke coment par bhi reply dede to hum dhany ho jayge hum mante hai ki hume atul ke caracter se ahanbhuti hai par iska matlab nahi ki sriya se nafrat ye to apka likha hua aisa hi ki real lagta hai asha karta hu ap Atul ko insaf or supriya ko sadbudhi denge kyu ki ab yaha se mujhe supriya ka atul ki taraf se wapsi ka rasta to nahi dikh raha please ho skae to atul ka point of view ek baar hi sahi par dikhaey . I am waiting he should get answeres now and get releif from pain hope ap reply karengi mere is coment par kabhi.
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19-08-2025, 09:30 PM
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Eagerly waiting for next update...
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(19-08-2025, 11:56 AM)आयुष01111 Wrote: लेखक आप एक ऐसे आदमी को कैसे परेशान कर सकते हैं जिसने कुछ नहीं किया, उसे क्यों निशाना बनाया जा रहा है, कृपया मुझे अगला अपडेट दें अतुल को सुप्रिया जैसी गिरी हुई औरत से मुक्ति दिल ईशा k gunde to atul ki mila -mila k mar rahe honge.aur randi supriya yha ikbal se mila mila kr legi
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20-08-2025, 12:16 AM
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(19-08-2025, 06:04 PM)Sriya2 Wrote: Bohot bohot dhanyavaad aapka… aur aapne khaaskar comment karne ke liye id banayi uske liye bhi..
Hopefully main ye kahani poori kar payu… main is kahani se jude kuch aur patro ke baare mein bhi kahani likhna chahungi… kuch kahani hai mere mind mein… sochungi ki unhe isi mein likh du ya baad mein alag se shuru karu…
Kafi intresting Idea hai and I can see bohot sare characters hai jiski kahani apne aap mai ek nahi story ki shuruwat ban sakti hai like
Jai and arti : arti bhabhi ke sath kya kya hua tha after her marriage who made her like this jo khud Supriya ko itne strong moral values Dene aayi thi uska ye roop kese change hua
Atul ki family : uske papa kese uski Chachi ke sath smbandh banaye kese uski nazar ghar ki dusri ladies par hai aur wo kya kya chal sakte hai
Isha and Vikram: kese undno ki surwat hui aur Isha ko kyu apni marrige ko open karna pada aur usne kaha kaha maze liye, kese wo abhi bhi Vikram se Pyar karti thi ya sirf usko leke possesive thi
Kirti: beside Rahul how she enjoyed her life uske aur Akash ke beech kuch hua tha ya nahi etc etc
Ye sare ek possible story ke liye potential rakhte hai I guess
Aap chahe to dono Stories ka crossover bhi karwa sakte hai timeline mila ke ya character use karke
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Kuch log supriya ko ishara de rahe hai aane wale khatre ke Baare mai jese wo budhiya jo usse baar baar mil jaati hai aur sahil sir jo jante hai in bade logo ke matter mai nahi uljhna chahiye aur Supriya ko warn bhi kiya tha
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20-08-2025, 09:34 AM
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Hina Supriya ko ghar ke andar le aayi thi aur Iqbal, Amma ji aur Rubina abhi bhi bahar ghar ke chauk mein khade behas kar rahe they. Supriya ko andar baithe sab kuch saaf saaf toh nahi sunayi de raha tha par itna toh saaf tha ki woh dono hi kafi naraz they Iqbal par.
Hina ki chehakti hui aawaz ne Supriya ka dhyan apni aur kheecha. Woh uske liye paani ka ek glaas lekar aayi - Ye lijiye chachi jaan... paani peejiye...
Supriya ne ek dabi hui muskurat ke saath uske haath se paani ka glass liye. Steel ka glass pakadte hi use pata chala ki uske haath kitni buri tarah se kaanp rahe they.
Hina ka dhyan bhi uske haathon par gaya - Areee... aapke haath kyu kaanp rahe hai... paani jyada thanda hai kya?
Supriya ne Hina ki aur gaur se dekha, uske chhehre aur shareer ka rang behad hi gora tha. Uske foole foole gaal, aur pyaara sa chhehra, use bilkul apni yaad dila raha they jab woh uski umar ki thi.
Supriya ne hichakte hue kaha - Bahar woh log kya baat kar rahe honge...
Hina ne kandhe uchkate hue kaha - Pata nahi... main bahar gayi toh mujhe bohot daant padegi... par mujhe toh bas ye pata hai ki ab aap meri chachi hai...
Hina ne apni bahein Supriya ke kandho par lapet li. Agar Supriya Hina se kisi aur mahaul mein mili hoti toh woh shayad uski is cute si harkat par uske gaalon ko kheech leti. Par is samay uska mann bahut hi bechain sa ho raha tha. Supriya ne bhi uske haath par apna haath rakhte hue use halke se hug kar liya.
Par bahar toh kuch alag hi ghamasan chal raha tha.
Ammi ji naraaz hote hue boli - Tune fir se ye sab karte hue zara bhi na socha hamare baare mein.... isse toh tu yahan na hi aata toh acha tha... yehi soch lete ki mar gaya hai...
Rubina - Ammi ji kya bol rahi hu aap... roz raat ko toh inka naam lekar roti rehti thi, aur aaj ye wapas aa gaya hai toh ye sab bol rahe ho... kisi ko apni saath hi toh lekar aaya hai na, toh isme kya hai...
Ammi - Chal mujhe toh na hai.... tera hi khasam karega fasaad ghar aakar...
Rubina - Hmmm.... Iqbal kab hua tum logo ka nikah...
Iqbal dheere se bola - Bas abhi 2-3 din pehle hi...
Rubina - Aur usse pehle tum logo ke beech mein...
Ammi ji - Khul ke pooch le na jo poochna chahti hai... ye pooch rahi hai ki tune ab tak us randi ko choda ya nahi...
Iqbal ne gusse mein Ammi ko ghoor mein dekha, par Rubina ne Iqbal ko shaant hone ka ishaara kiya. Itne saal ho gaye they, par shayad abhi bhi is ghar mein sirf wohi thi jo use samajhti thi.
Rubina - Ammi ji… aap bhi gazab karte ho… ab woh aapke ghar ki bahu hai… uske baare mein aise kyu bol rahi ho...
Ammi - Batayo, main apne ghar mein bhi na bol saku… acha ye toh bata isne laal saree kyu pehne hui hai… tune inki rasmo ke hisaab se toh shaadi na kar li… kahin is baar tu toh na…
Iqbal - Ammi nahi… aisa kuch na hai... tum kyu socho ye sab...
Ammi - Tu kar sake aur hum soch bhi na sake…
Rubina ne beech mein ghus kar baat ko sambhalna chaha - Iqbal tum inki baaton ko dil se na lagayo… woh bas janna chahti hai ki poora maamla hai kya... hume jaldi se tumhare bhaiya ke liye tayyar hona padega na…
Iqbal - Abhi bhi unka waisa hi mizaaj hai kya?
Rubina - Haan aur kya… ab toh unki umar bhi hone lagi hai... waise tumhe bohot yaad karte hai par bolte nahi… aur hai bhi kaun unka haath batane ko… Zeenat aur Saba ki shaadi ka saara kaam bhi akele hi karna pada tha…
Iqbal ne sawal poocha, par shayad use iska jawab pehle se hi pata tha - Un dono ki shaadi ho gayi?
Rubina - Aur kya, tumhara toh koi ata pata tha nahi ki tumhe khabar kar dete… aur kab tak rukte... un dono ki umar ho chali thi... ab toh bas Hina hi bachi hai…
Iqbal - Haan... main samajh raha hoon...
Rubina fusfusate hue boli - Waise umar mein toh ye tumse kafi chhoti lag rahi hai… kahan mili ye tumhe… bhaga ke laaye ho na pichli baar ko tarah…
Iqbal ne apni aankhen neeche kar li, woh ab kya hi bolta.
Rubina use jhepte hua dekh haste hue boli - Koi masla thodi na hai… mujhe toh isme koi burai nahi lagti… agar tum dono ek doosre ke saath khush ho toh isme kisi ko kya dikkat honi chahiye…
Iqbal halke se bola - Jee…
Rubina - Aur Ammi ji jo chahe kahe, main jaanti hu tumhare bhai jaan ko bhi isse koi dikkat nahi hogi. Aakhir hamare ghar aayi hai, humne kisi aur ke yahan bheji toh nahi na… aur fir tum bhi aa gaye ho, toh unko acha lagega, unhe bhi sahara mil jayega…
Iqbal - Aapko lagta hai...
Rubina - Pakki tarah se toh nahi... par unhe manaya toh jaa hi sakta hai...
Iqbal - Kaise?
Rubina ne apna muh Iqbal ke kaan ke paas kiya aur kuch bolne lagi. Iqbal jaise jaise unki baat sun raha tha uski aankhen badi hoti jaa rahi thi, aur woh zor zor se apna sir na mein hila raha tha.
Ghar ke andar Hina Supriya se dosti karne mein lagi hui thi. Woh usse sawal par sawal kar rahi thi aur Supriya jitna kam ho sake utna bata rahi thi.
Hina masoomiyat se boli - Aapka naam bohot hi pyaara hai…
Supriya ne halke se sir hila ke kaha - Shukriya…
Hina - Aap thank you bhi bol sakti hai mujhe, itni achi nahi par thodi bohot english toh aati hi hai mujhe…
Supriya - Acha… tum padai karti ho kya? College mein ho?
Supriya ka sawaal sun kar Hina ko toh jaise apne baare mein bolne ka mauka hi mil gaya - Yahan bilkul paas toh koi college hai nahi, aur abbu door jaane nahi dete… toh abhi bas correspondence se padai kar rahi hoon… aap meri madad karengi padai mein… main abhi apni kitabe lekar aati hoon…
Isse pehle ki Supriya use rokti, Hina bijli ki speed se wahan se bhaagti hui gayi. Supriya ne socha ki woh bhi shayad bilkul aisi hi chulbuli si thi jab uski bhabhi shaadi karke ghar aayi thi.
Tabhi use saamne se Iqbal aata dikha, uske chhehre par tension dikhayi de rahi thi. Usne paas aakar dheere se kaha - Madamji, ye aapne kya bol diya bahar…
Supriya - Shhhh… maine kaha na mujhe madamji na bulayo ab… mujhe bas ek ye hi raasta soojha toh maine bol diya, aur fir kuch hi dino ki toh baat hai…
Iqbal - Par… hum kuch aur bhi toh bol sakte they na…
Supriya thoda sa gussa hote hue boli - Aap toh bilkul chup chap khade they wahan… toh mujhe hi bolna pada na… agar aapko kuch aur samajh raha tha toh aap bol dete...
Iqbal - Par ab unki nazro mein toh aap meri biwi hai na...
Supriya - Hamare paas aur koi raasta tha kya? Mujhe aap par poora bharosa hai, tabhi toh aapke saath yahan aa gayi, aur ye sab bolne ki himmat bhi kar di...
Iqbal - Aap samajh nahi rahi hain…
Supriya - Toh samjhaiye na…
Iqbal - Yahan sab gaanv wale mere bade bhai ki bohot ijjat karte hai… bahut rutba hai unka… unki bohot chalti hai yahan...
Supriya - Shayad isiliye Vikram se mujhe yahan aapke saath bheja hai na…
Iqbal - Haan par, is tarah aapke hamare ghar mein aana, isse bahut baatein banengi, unki bohot badnaami hogi, unhe bilkul acha nahi lagega...
Supriya pareshaan hote hue boli - Oh… toh fir…
Iqbal - Pata nahi bas ab kya hoga unke aane par... kya bolenge woh... kahin jyada bhadak gaye aur kuch ulta seedha kar diya toh...
Supriya - Aise kaise bhadak jayenge... aur kya ulta seedha karenge...
Iqbal ne Supriya ke muh par haath rakh diya - Shhhh dheere boliye… maine aapko kaha tha na… hume yahan aana hi nahi chahiye tha...
Supriya panic mein aa rahi thi, Iqbal ke rookhi ungliyaan uske honthon par lagti hui unhe kuchal si rahi thi. Iqbal ne ekdam se Supriya ki shakal par use ho rahi takleef ko pad liya aur apne haath uske honthon se hata liye.
Supriya - Ab aap hi bataiye... kya kare hum log...
Iqbal - Main koshish karunga baat sambhalne ki... bhabhi bhi koshish karengi... par...
Supriya - Par kya?
Iqbal - Mere khayal se hume aaj raat hi yahan se nikal jaana chahiye. Par tab tak aap sabki haan mein haan milate rehna… kisi ko nahi lagna chahiye ki kuch gadbad hai...
Supriya ko kuch samajh nahi aa raha tha ki Iqbal itna dara hua kyu tha. Usne apne honth apne muh mein dabate hue apna sir haan mein hilaya.
Use door se ammi ji aati hui dikhi. Ammi un dono ko behad paas baitha dekh boli - Aisa kar… god mein baith jaa iske… koi lihaaz toh hai nahi isko…
Itne mein Rubina bhi andar aa gayi aur usne ishaaron mein Iqbal se pooch liya ki un dono ki baat ho gayi thi ya nahi. Rubina ne Hina ko aawaz lagayi - Hinaaaa….. Hinaaaa… apni chachi ko andar lekar jayo aur apne ek jodi kapde de do… thode ache se dena…
Hina daudi daudi aayi aur Supriya ka haath pakad kar use neeche hi ke ek kamre ki aur le gayi. Kamre ki deewaron par purana paint ho rakha tha jo kayi jagah se papdi ban kar utar raha tha. Saara furniture bhi purana sa tha.
Hina - Chachi jaan ye hai mera kamra… kaisa laga?
Supriya ne kisi tarah se jhoothi muskurahat late hue kaha - Bahut acha hai… tumhe poora kamra mila hua hai?
Hina - Jee… meri didi logo ke jaane ke baad mujhe bhi kamra mil hi gaya…
Supriya - Hmmm… acha...
Hina bole jaa rahi thi - Chachu ka kamra upar hai… saalon se band pada hai… abhi aapko dikhane le chalti hoon… aur meri dost hai Naaz, usse bhi milwayungi aapko…
Hina bas bole hi jaa rahi thi ki Rubina dandanati hui kamre mein ghusi - Aree zahil ladki, tune ab tak kapde nahi nikale… jaldi kar…
Hina chhidte hue boli - Nikaal toh rahi hu ammi…
Rubina ne khud hi almari khol li aur usme kapde dekhne lagi. Usne ek sundar sa salwaar suit nikaal kar Supriya ke saamne lagaya.
Hina ekdam se bol padi - Ammi woh wala nahi, woh mera…
Par fir uski nazar Supriya ke chhehre par padi aur woh apni nayi chachi ko mana kaise kar deti - Nahi nahi... koi nahi.. aap de do…
Rubina - Apni nayi chachi ko bhi kapde dene mein dikkat ho rahi hai tujhe... waise bhi ye tere thoda dheela aata hai na, isiliye maine isliye chuna hai…
Hina apne mammo par haath rakh kar dabate hue boli - Aapka matlab mere abhi bhi chhote hai… ab toh pehle se thode bade ho gaye hain… dekho
Rubina ne gehri saans li - Ya khuda, kya karu is ladki ka… Kaan khol kar sun le… jab Abbu aayenge na tu unse kuch nahi kahegi… balki andar hi rahiyo chachi ke saath... bade logo ki baaton mein na padiyo…
Hina - Haan theek hai… itni bhi nasamajh nahi hu main… par aisa kyu bol rahi ho…
Rubina ne apni aankh nachate hue kaha - Tujhe shaadi mein jaane ka bada shauk hai na… ab tere chacha chachi ki shaadi hogi yahan… toh kiske maze aane wale hai?
Hina ye sun kar behad hi khush ho gayi - Areee wahhh… main toh naye naye kapde banwayungi… aur apni saari saheliyon ko bulayungi… sab dekhe toh meri haseen si chachi ko…
Supriya ko Hina ki nasamajh baaton par hasi bhi aa rahi thi aur thodi chhid bhi ho rahi thi. Kaash woh apne is bachpane wale pal mein wapas jaa paati. Toh woh kabhi bhi woh galtiyan na dohrati jo usse hui thi. Ye sochte hi uske dil mein ek tees si uthi, pata nahi woh aaj kaise yahan tak pahuch gayi thi.
Rubina ne meethi si aawaz mein kaha - Supriya.. yehi naam hai na tumhara…
Supriya ne halke se sir jhuka ke kaha - Jee…
Rubina - Ye ladki toh tumhe pagal bana degi… par abhi tum jaldi se kapde badal lo aur haan ye apni laal saree mujhe de dena.. main sambhal ke rakh lungi…
Supriya ne fir se sir hila kar haan kahan.
Rubina ne Hina ka haath pakadte hue use apni aur kheecha - Chal ab chachi ko kapde badalne de… tu mere saath chal...
Rubina Hina ko lekar kamre se nikal gayi aur Supriya us kamre mein akele reh gayi thi. Usne kamre ki kundi lagayi aur kuch pal ke liye apna sir pakad kar bed par baith gayi. Woh foot foot kar rona chahti thi par ab jaise uske aansu bhi sookhne lage they.
Woh bed par do pal ke liye peeth ke bal let gayi. Upar pankha ghoom raha tha aur uske sir ko aur jyada chakra raha tha. Kaash uske paas uska phone hota, toh woh Vikram ko call kar leti. Par shayad Vikram ne theek hi kiya tha usse phone lekar.
Supriya ne apne aap ko sambhala aur apni saree utaarne lagi. Is anjaan se ghar mein, kitna ajeeb sa lag raha tha apne kapde utaarna. Woh kal subah se nahayi nahi thi aur use apne andar se badboo aa rahi thi, par is samay uske andar himmat nahi thi ki woh iske baare mein pooche.
Usne Hina ke suit ko hangar se nikala aur apna petticoat utaarne ke baad uski pajami pehen li. Pajami lambayi mein uske bilkul sahi naam ki thi, aur dheeli bhi thi toh use pehenne mein koi khaas dikkat nahi hui.
Supriya ne apna blouse utaara aur Hina ki kurti ko upar se pehenna shuru kiya. Kurti uske boobs par aa kar atak gayi. Hina ke boobs uske boobs se shayad thode se chhote they. Supriya kurti ko pakde usse jhoojhti rahi aur use dam laga kar neeche kheechtne ki koshish karti rahi.
Aakhir kurti neeche ho hi gayi. Supriya ne kamre mein rakhe dressing ke aine mein apne aap ko dekha, kurti uske shareer par ek dam fasi hui thi aur uski wajah se uski kamar aur patli lag rahi thi aur mamme bade. Supriya ne bistar par rakhi ek chunni lete hue apne mamme dhakne ki koshish kari.
Supriya ne apne haath hilane ki koshish kari aur aisa lag raha tha ki woh is kurti mein jakad si gayi thi. Uske zara sa chalne par uske mamme upar neeche uchal rahe they. Ufff, use aaj thoda dheere hi chalna padega.
Tabhi darwaza par kisi ke haath maarne ki aawaz aayi. Supriya jaldi se boli - 2 minute dijiye…
Woh jaldi se bed par padi apni saree, blouse aur petticoat sametne lagi, aur fir unhe fold karke utha liya. Supriya ne kundi kholi, toh saamne Rubina hi thi.
Rubina ne use upar se neeche dekha aur muskurayi - Mash,.'… gazab lag rahi ho…
Supriya ne sharam ke maare apni aankhen jhuka li.
Rubina ne Supriya ka dupatta peeche se utha kar uska sir dhak diya - Bas ye zara sir dhak lo, kahin kisi ki nazar na lag jaye… aayo chalo khana kha lete hai…
Rubina Supriya ko saath lekar rasoi ghar ke paas le aayi aur bahar se aawaz lagayi - Ammi ji.. iska khana laga diya kya…
Ammi budbudate hue bahar aayi - Haan ab tere elawa iski bhi naukrani ban gayi hoon na main… aayi badi ye maharani banne is ghar mein…
Ammi gusse mein wahan se bahar ki aur chali gayi aur Supriya unki baatein sunkar thoda hil si gayi thi.
Rubina ne Supriya ke kandhe ko halke se thapthapaya jaise use shaant kar rahi ho - Tum baitho yahan, main laati hoon…
Supriya wahin zameen par bichi ek dari par badi mushkil si baith gayi. Baithne se jaise suit aur bhi fas gaya tha. Rubina jald hi apne saath do thali le aayi.
Rubina ne ek thaali Supriya ke aage rakhi - Ye lo…
Supriya ne steel ki thaali ko ghoora, usme do roti thi, sabji aur dahi. Pata nahi sabji veg thi ya non veg…
Woh ye soch hi rahi thi ki Rubina fusfusa kar boli - Iqbal ne mujhe bata diya tha… befikr raho… shakahari hi hai… kafi sochta hai tumhare baare mein woh… waise tumhare chhehre ka noor dekh kar dikh raha hai kyu.
Supriya Rubina ki aur dekh kar muskurayi aur apni aankhen fir se jhuka li.
Rubina - Tum sharmati bohot ho… hum dono ko toh aapas mein kafi khulna padega… chalo dheere dheere ho jayega…
Supriya idhar udhar dekhte hue boli - Hina nahi dikh rahi… use khana nahi khana?
Rubina - Uske toh par hi nikal aaye hai… apni saheliyon ko batane gayi hai apni nayi chachi ke baare mein… bach ke rehna usse, tumhare kaan kutar degi…
Supriya ne muskura ke khana khana shuru kiya. Baingan ki sabji thi aur kafi achi bani thi. Par is samay toh use kuch bhi milta toh acha hi lagta.
Rubina ne chhupi ko todte hue poocha - Kahan se ho waise tum?
Supriya ek-do pal socha, jo use sabse pehle sooja usne wohi bol diya - Kanpur ke paas se…
Rubina ne uski aur teekhi nazro se dekha, jaise uske andar jhaank rahi ho - Acha… acha hai…
Supriya ne bhi himmat karke poocha - Hina aapki ek lauti beti hai?
Rubina - Nahi uski do aur badi behne hai, unki shaadi ho gayi…
Supriya - Acha… bas ab Hina reh gayi…
Rubina - Haan uski bhi kar denge… isse pehle ki us par jawani ka bhoot sawar ho…
Supriya uski is baat se thoda sharminda si ho gayi, jaise Rubina use hi taana maar rahi ho.
Rubina samajh gayi ki Supriya ko uski baat achi nahi lagi toh woh haste hue boli - Tab tak tum use sambhalo… tum waise toh umar mein uski bhabhi ya badi behen jaisi ho, toh woh tumhari sun legi.
Supriya dheere se boli - Waise aap kahin se teen baccho ki maa toh nahi lagti hain…
Rubina haste hue boli - Ab toh ye badan har taraf se fail sa gaya hai, par haan jawani mein dekhti tum mujhe, tumse bhi jyada sundar thi main…
Supriya - Abhi bhi mujhse jyada hi sundar ho… abhi aapki umar hi kya hogi… 35-36…
Rubina ko aur tez hasi aa gayi - Kaash… tum mazaaq acha kar leti ho… ab toh chalees paar ho chuki hoon… banzar zameen ho gayi hu… par tum toh abhi hariyali banno ho... waise tumhari umar kitni hai...
Supriya Rubina ke saamne ghabra si rahi thi aur usne jhat se bol diya - Main bas kal hi 26 ki hui hoon...
Ye bolte hi Supriya ne socha ki woh kaisi manhoos si raat this birthday wali Kriti ke ghar par. Ek din hi hua tha, par itna kuch ho gaya tha us ek din mein.
Rubina ne haath hawa mein matkate hue kaha - Waahh jee... tum 26, tumhare miyan ji 42... maloom hota hai tumhe apne se badi umar ke mardo ko rijhana acha lagta hai... waise tumhare logo mein nahi mila tha koi fasane ke liye...
Supriya ne ghoor kar Rubina ki aur dekha, woh ye kya bole jaa rahi thi. Woh shayad utni meethi bhi nahi thi jitni use lag raha tha. Supriya unhe kya hi safai deti, Vikram bhi toh usse kam se kam 10 saal bada they umar mein.
Rubina uska utra hua chhehra dekh kar boli - Meri baaton ko dil se na lagayo... tum toh meri beti ki umar ki hi ho...
Isse pehle ki Supriya kuch aur bolti, bahar se Ammi tez kadmo se chalte hue aayi - Haaye... haaye... Rubbu... poore mohalle mein khabar fail gayi dikhe hai...
Rubina - Kya kar rahi ho Ammi ji...
Ammi - Haan.... abhi toh baat hui meri barabar mein... palli paar wale logo ko bhi pata hai... tu tayyar ho jaa... Abbas aata hi hoga... aaj toh fasad ho kar hi rahega...
Rubina ne jaldi se khane ki plate sameti aur rasoi mein jaldi se rakhi aur bahar aa kar Supriya ko kaha - Tum jayo... Hina ke kamre mein baitho... aur bahar nahi aana jab tak main na bulayu...
Supriya buri tarah ghabra rahi thi, par usne Rubina ki baat jhat se maani aur Hina ke kamre mein jaldi se ghus gayi aur darwaza band kar liya. Supriya ka dil zor zor se dhadak raha tha, pata nahi sab log itna kyu dare hue they.
Aur kuch hi minute baad ek aadmi ke zor se chillane ki aawaz aayi. Is bhaari lakdi se bane darwaze ke band hone ke bawajood ye kadak aawaz andar tak pahuch rahi thi. Ye jaroor Iqbal ke bade bhai Abbas ki aawaz thi. Supriya khidki ke darwaze se ot lekar bahar ki aur dekhne lagi.
Abbas - Rubinaaaa.... Ammiiii..... kahan mar gaye sab....
Ek aadmi tez chalta hua unke ghar mein ghusa. Uski lambayi Iqbal se thodi si chhoti thi, par uska shareer hatta katta tha. Uske chhehre par chhote chhote gadde se ho rakhe they aur woh umar mein 50-55 ka toh kam se kam tha hi.
Abbas fir se chillaya - Rubinaaaa.....
Rubina - Haan ji.... aayi...
Abbas - Main ye kya sun raha hoon... Iqbal ghar wapas aa gaya hai....
Rubina apna sir jhukate hue boli - Jee... woh...
Abbas - Aur tum logo ne mujhe phone karne ki bhi zehmat nahi uthayi... gairo se pata chal raha hai mujhe ki mere ghar mein kya tamasha ho raha hai...
Ammi bhi wahan aa gayi thi, aur usne aag mein ghee lagate hue kaha - Maine toh bola tha ise... par ye hi hamdard ban rahi thi uski....
Abbas - Kahan hai woh.... aur uske saath koi aurat bhi aayi hai?? Ye kya buchadkhana bana rakha hai ghar ko... Iqbal...
Iqbal bhi ek kamre se nikalta hua bahar nikla, uski nazar neeche jhuki hui thi - Bhai jaan...
Abbas - Ek toh tum saalo baad yahan wapas aaye ho... aur itne jyada begairat ho ki khandaan ka naam fir se kharab kar diya...
Iqbal safai dete hue bola - Bhai jaan maine aisa kuch nahi...
Abbas - Ek lafz nahi nikalo muh se...
Rubina beech mein boli - Ab woh bolega nahi toh batayega kaise...
Abbas gusse mein Rubina par bhadka - Tum kyu uski vakalat kar rahi ho...
Rubina - Nahi bas itna kehna chahti hoon ki aapka bhai aaya hai das saal baad... fir se woh galti na dohraye... aur abki baar gaya toh shayad aap dono ek doosre ko fir se dekh bhi na paayo...
Rubina ki baat sun kar Abbas ka gussa toh kam nahi hua par uski aawaz kuch pal ke liye ruk gayi. Iqbal kuch bolne ko hua tha par Rubina ne use ishaare se chhup kara diya, jaise woh Abbas ko sochne ka mauka de rahi ho.
Ammi bhi ab Rubina ki taraf ho li - Haan beta... aaya toh das saal baad hai...
Abbas ne Rubina ki aur dekha - Bulayo zara us ladki ko jise ye saath laaya hai...
Rubina - Main laati hu use...
Iqbal bolne ko hua - Bhabhi....
Par fir chhup ho gaya. Rubina ne halke se kamre ka darwaza kholte hue Supriya ko kaha - Suno... aa jayo bahar...
Supriya apna sir jhukaye Rubina ke saath bahar aa gayi. Abbas tab tak ek khaat par baith gaya tha. Woh dono jakar Abbas ke saamne khadi ho gayi, aur Abbas un dono ko ghoore jaa raha tha.
Rubina - Jee... ye hai... Supriya....
Ye naam sunkar Abbas ne apna muh bichkaya aur Iqbal ki aur dekha. Woh shayad apne dil mein aa rahe alfaz andar daba ke reh gaya.
Kuch der sochne ke baad usne Rubina ki aur dekha aur bola - Main Imam sahab se aaj hi baat karta hoon... tum in dono ke nikah ki tayyari shuru karo... par tab tak ye dono bilkul alag rahenge...
Uske ye bolte hi Supriya ne buri tarah chaunkte hue Iqbal ki aur dekha aur fir Rubina ki aur. Us dono ke hi sir jhuke hue they. Abbas ye kya bol rahe they, Nikaah! Aur woh bhi uska aur Iqbal ka!
Supriya ne Abbas ki aur dekha par woh tab tak khada ho kar, apne haath peeche baandh kar ghar ke bahar ki aur chalne laga tha.
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Is jnam me story ka end hota nzer nhi aa rha, is new turn se Manzil door tak dikhao na de rhi
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Nikah ki kya jarurat hai supriya randi ko bs use chudwa kr waleema krwa de ghar wale
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(20-08-2025, 11:21 AM)Anum sheikh Wrote: Is jnam me story ka end hota nzer nhi aa rha, is new turn se Manzil door tak dikhao na de rhi
Agar tumko story pasand nahin aa rahi toh padhna band kardo and move on...
Learn to respect the writer and his/her imagination. We don't get paid to write here so always remember/respect that...We do it purely out of our own free will and motivation...
Aur agar tumko already patah hai ki story kiss taraf aur kaise jaani chaiye toh tum khud hi apni story likhlo
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So much drama !!! Almost like a movie...very entertaining and realistic too....U can very well turn this into a novel,its that good.
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