31-07-2025, 10:15 PM
Keep going !!! It's tense out there!!!
Adultery Priya Didi
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31-07-2025, 10:24 PM
2 balls to go 5 runs needed was the situation....but don't you think this much escalation needs a bit of background...first day Ravi comes to their house for his official work it leads to this much...Ravi must be a 007 james Bond....?...well the way you though must be the best....i cannot say much...but your writing is very amazing...my best wishes ?
31-07-2025, 10:27 PM
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“Bhabhi! Bhayya! What’s taking so long?”
“I thought I was supposed to be in the living room with you both. Why the delay, huh?” “If you both are playing any fun game, I also want to join. Open the door... ” Sirisha's voice was light and teasing, Unmistakable as she jiggled the door handle from the outside. Ravi and Neetu looked at each other. “See, she wants to join us in our fun game... ” “Do you want me to invite her for our game?” Neetu whispered to him with a wink. “Can you play that game with both of us?” a mischievous smile on her face Ravi laughed even with all the tension. Neetu took a deep breath, made sure everything was in place, And walked over to open the door, Doing her best to appear casual, As if nothing unusual had just happened. When she swung the door open..., Sirisha was standing there, grinning broadly, her bubbly energy lighting up the room. “Finally!” Sirisha exclaimed with exaggerated exasperation, her eyes scanning Neetu and Ravi. She was dressed casually, with her college bag slung over one shoulder. “I thought you two were in the hall, not taking a nap or something. What’s the delay? Did I interrupt something?” Neetu quickly stepped aside, letting Sirisha in, all while managing a smooth smile, The back of her mind still racing. “No, no... just tidying up a little,” Neetu said, Her tone nonchalant but with a slight edge of nervousness she couldn’t quite hide. Sirisha raised an eyebrow playfully. .
01-08-2025, 12:28 AM
“Tidying up? Looks like someone had a little too much fun cleaning up. What’s that about?” she teased,
Taking in the slightly disheveled cushions and the faint traces of Rasmalai on the coffee table. Ravi, standing nearby, adjusted his shirt one last time, doing his best to appear relaxed, even though his pulse was still quickening. He shot Neetu a quick, silent look, and she met his gaze, Offering a barely noticeable nod as they both silently agreed to keep everything under wraps. Sirisha, as usual, didn’t notice a thing. She bounced into the living room, looking around the space with a satisfied smile. “I thought I was gonna be bored alone, but here you two are... I thought you’d be in the kitchen, or at least getting some tea. But I walk in and find the living room still not set up. What were you two up to?” She winked at them, her mischievous grin never faltering. Neetu laughed, trying to keep things light. “Nothing at all, Sirisha. Just... catching up. But you’re right, we should have set things up earlier. You know how it is,” She said quickly, her voice warm but slightly forced. Ravi chuckled, playing along, though he couldn’t completely shake the tension still lingering in the room. “Yeah, we were just getting everything in order. You know how it is.” Sirisha shrugged, still smiling. “Well, I’m here now. And I expect some fun. I was expecting you two to be all chatty, but looks like I’m late for the party.” She plopped down on the couch, unceremoniously throwing her bag aside and making herself comfortable. Neetu quickly moved to adjust the couch cushions again, Doing her best to cover the slight mess they’d made, while Ravi stood at the edge, still adjusting to the sudden shift in energy. .
01-08-2025, 12:34 AM
Sirisha, however, didn’t seem to notice anything unusual.
She glanced over at Neetu. “So,” Sirisha continued, her tone playful but with a touch of curiosity, “where were you both? You know, I thought we had plans for a fun evening, no napping, no distractions!” Neetu chuckled, still trying to hide her nerves. “Just... getting ready for that,” she said, trying to sound as nonchalant as possible, Even though her heart was still pounding in her chest. Sirisha raised an eyebrow again, but didn’t push further. “Alright, alright,” she said, throwing her hands up in mock surrender. “No need to get all secretive.” Sirisha leaned back, looking between the two of them. “Mmm,” she said, giving a dramatic sigh. “I’m not buying it. But I’ll let it slide for now. I’ll figure it out eventually.” She winked playfully and continued her interrogation with a grin. “But seriously, you’re hiding something, aren’t you? It’s just us here—no need for secrets!” Ravi, now fully dressed, shot Neetu a quick glance, Both of them sharing a brief, amused look at Sirisha’s teasing. They had to keep things cool for now. Before Neetu could reply, Sirisha stood up with a light chuckle. “Alright, I’m gonna refresh, get changed, and then I’ll be back,” she said, Shrugging off her bag. “I can’t wait to eat the Rasmalai you made Bhabhi. I have been thinking of eating that with Bhayya and feeding him a little from my bowl. That was my favorite, remember?” She grinned at Neetu. “Bhayya will love it too. I’ll eat it with him after I get refreshed, okay?” .
01-08-2025, 12:36 AM
Neetu smiled, her nerves easing a little. “Of course, Sirisha. I know it is your favorite”
She replied quickly. “Go get changed, we’ll catch up later.” Sirisha gave a dramatic sigh, but smiled widely as she headed toward her room. “You better! And don’t keep me waiting too long, I’m starving. See you in a bit, Bhabhi, Bhayya.” Neetu waved her off, watching as Sirisha disappeared down the hallway toward her room, still humming to herself. Once Sirisha was out of sight, Neetu let out a breath she hadn’t realized she was holding, Her hands shaking slightly as she turned to Ravi. She gave him a nervous but playful smile. “Well, that was close,” she whispered, A small laugh escaping her lips. “She’s a handful, isn’t she?” Ravi chuckled, his heart rate still slightly elevated from the earlier moment, But the energy had shifted. “Definitely a handful,” he replied, His eyes still lingering on Neetu, though his tone was light. “But I think we handled it.” Neetu smirked. “We did. But I’m going to need a minute to gather myself before Sirisha comes back in here.” Ravi nodded, his hands resting on his hips as he glanced around the room. “Same here. Let’s just… keep our distance until she’s gone. But we’ll figure this out.” Neetu smiled, a playful twinkle in her eye as she adjusted her hair. “Of course. But for now, let’s just enjoy the calm while it lasts.” The atmosphere between them had lightened The earlier intensity fading away as the sound of Sirisha rummaging in her room reached them both. With a shared look, they knew they’d have time to reset before Sirisha came back, Still unaware of what had just transpired. But for now, everything felt under control—at least, for the moment. -- oOo --
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01-08-2025, 12:43 AM
(31-07-2025, 10:24 PM)Raj087 Wrote: 2 balls to go 5 runs needed was the situation....but don't you think this much escalation needs a bit of background...first day Ravi comes to their house for his official work it leads to this much...Ravi must be a 007 james Bond....?...well the way you though must be the best....i cannot say much...but your writing is very amazing...my best wishes ? Hi, I’ll admit, I messed up. But when I asked you if I should rewrite that scene, you told me it was fine and to go with my flow. So, why are we revisiting this part again? How many times do you need to beat a dead horse? Yes, I agree, I’m a dumbo. I don’t know how to write, and I make mistakes. I’ll own that. But I’m also going to correct myself going forward. I understand that some people can’t seem to move past a mistake, and it just keeps replaying in their minds. Fine, I’ll write a scene specifically for those people. You’ll be able to read it too. Hopefully, it’ll help you digest what’s happened so far. -- Shailu
01-08-2025, 01:00 AM
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This scene is intended for those who may have had difficulty getting past the intimate scenes I previously wrote, where I failed to give enough time or background between the characters. I acknowledge that this was a mistake on my part. However, if you find it hard to enjoy the story because of this, please feel free to read this scene. If not, you’re welcome to skip it. For those who understand that we all make mistakes and can look beyond them, this scene isn’t necessary to appreciate the story as it stands. I appreciate your understanding and continued support. --- This scene is optional and can be skipped if you’re satisfied with the story so far --- The Memory That Changed Everything Looking at the current events, Ravi thoughts went to his past It was a quiet evening in the outskirts of their remote village. The sun had dipped low behind the tamarind trees, spreading a golden glow across the red earth and the tiled roof of the old farmhouse. Ravi, then just turning eighteen, sat on the edge of the stone well, wiping sweat from his brow after a long day of helping with the crops. His hands were rough with work, his skin tanned deep by the sun, but his eyes still held that eerie, unnatural glow that even he didn’t notice. Sumathi called him from the verandah. Her voice wasn’t her usual sing-song warmth—it was heavier, more deliberate. “Ravi… come sit. I need to tell you something.” He looked up. His mother’s face was tired, older than usual, but there was something else, something clouded and weighted in her eyes. He walked over silently and sat beside her on the wooden bench. Sumathi didn’t speak immediately. She held his hand, soft fingers brushing against his hardened palms. Then she began. “Do you remember asking me when you were ten… why people always stared at you strangely when we came into town?” He nodded slowly. “They looked… nervous. Or too interested,” Ravi said. She smiled faintly. “Not just interested. Ravi… people don’t know what they’re seeing when they look at you. But they feel something. A pull.” There was silence again. Even the birds had gone still in the neem tree. “Because you’re not like them,” she continued. “Not like us either.” He frowned. “What do you mean?” Sumathi drew a long breath. “You were barely a month old when we found you. It was a rainy night. Your father and I heard a massive crash in the forest behind our land. Not thunder. Not wind. Something else. Something heavy had fallen from the sky.” Ravi’s eyes narrowed. “Fallen?” “Yes.” She looked up at the darkening sky as if trying to see back into the past. “We ran to see. What we found was fire, metal, and wreckage—parts of something that didn’t belong to this world. And in the center, a small capsule. Burnt, but still intact. Inside… you.” Ravi’s heart began to pound. “You’re saying…” “Your real parents were inside that ship. We never found their bodies completely. Just fragments… technology… things we couldn’t understand. But the capsule, your capsule, had instructions. In a language I… I don’t even know how I could read. It was like it spoke directly to my thoughts. Telling me how to take care of you. Warning me that Earth was not your origin. That time itself had bent to bring you here.” Ravi felt the world shift beneath him. “So… I’m not from Earth?” Sumathi nodded. “You’re not. Your ship entered a time portal, it was probably accidental. It flung you across space and time. Into our world. Into our lives.” Tears filled her eyes. “Ravi, we had prayed for a child for years. When we found you, I didn’t care where you came from. You were a miracle. And you were ours from that day.” He sat there stunned, his thoughts racing through every strange thing he’d experienced, the way people reacted to him, how girls in the village whispered about him after just one glance, how animals never feared him, how sometimes… he could sense people’s emotions like a pulse. “Your body looks like ours,” Sumathi said. “But I’ve seen what you don’t realize yet. People, especially women… they don’t just like you. They’re drawn to you. Compelled. It’s something in your presence. A kind of resonance.” Ravi’s breath caught. “Why didn’t you tell me earlier?” “We wanted you to live like a normal boy. To grow without fear. Without feeling like you didn’t belong. But… the time has come now. Soon you’ll feel it even more. The power inside you. The way people react to it. You must learn to control it, Ravi. It is a gift, but it can also be dangerous.” He looked down at his hands, then up at the stars just beginning to appear. Somewhere out there, beyond time and space, was a home he would never know. And here, beside him, were the only parents he had ever needed. Raghav came out of the house just then, quietly placing his hand on Ravi’s shoulder. “No matter where you came from,” his father said, “you’re our son. Always.” That night, Ravi couldn’t sleep. He stared out the window, mind swirling with questions. Who were his real parents? What planet did they come from? Why did he survive when they didn’t? And most of all… what was his purpose here? He didn’t know yet. But from that day, something in him began to awaken. He started to feel things more deeply. The effect he had on others intensified, especially on women. Teachers, classmates, strangers in towns—all seemed pulled to him by an invisible thread. At first, it terrified him. But slowly, he learned to mask it. To contain it. To respect it. He was no ordinary boy. He was something else entirely. And though his origin lay beyond the stars, his heart beat here, on Earth, with the ones who chose him. His journey was just beginning. -- oOo --
I believe this answers your doubts and make you enjoy the rest of the story. But those who are already enjoying the story without this scene, please don't read this or wipe it off your memory, this was not originally planned for the story. .
01-08-2025, 11:36 AM
Nice twist Shailu. Nicely written. Thank you
01-08-2025, 03:24 PM
01-08-2025, 03:26 PM
01-08-2025, 04:49 PM
Sweet Suspicion
Sirisha emerged from her room ten minutes later, Freshly changed into a comfy kurti and pyjamas, her hair tied up in a messy bun. She looked energized, cheerful—and clearly hungry. “Okay, I’m all refreshed!” she announced, plopping onto the couch with a bounce. “Now, Bhabhi… Rasmalai time! Bhayya and I have been waiting all day, na?” Ravi, who was pretending to scroll on his phone, glanced up and shot a brief, silent look at Neetu. She was standing in the kitchen corner, rearranging plates just to keep her hands busy. Neetu paused a beat too long before responding. “Uhh… Sirisha… actually—Rasmalai…” “Hmm?” Sirisha’s eyebrows arched. “What happened to it? Don’t tell me you forgot!” “No, no. I didn’t forget,” Neetu said quickly, trying to smile. “We just… there’s none left.” Sirisha blinked. She looked from Neetu to Ravi. Then back again. “None left?” she asked slowly, voice loaded with disbelief. “But… Bhabhi, you made an entire bowl. I saw it in the fridge this morning. You said Vamsi bhaiyya likes it. You made it for all of us.” Neetu tucked a strand of hair behind her ear and gave a sheepish shrug. “Well… umm… Ravi really liked it, so… we just… finished it after lunch.” Sirisha’s mouth opened slightly. Her gaze swung to Ravi, narrowing with mock suspicion. “Bhayya… you finished all the Rasmalai? You don’t even have that much of a sweet tooth!” .
01-08-2025, 05:02 PM
Ravi chuckled nervously
Rubbing the back of his neck. “I was… hungry?” “HUNGRY?” Sirisha’s eyes widened as she leaned forward. “You both finished the entire Rasmalai bowl in one afternoon? What did you do? Bathe in it...?!” Neetu’s face flushed instantly. Ravi coughed and tried to stifle a grin, but it came out as an awkward laugh. But their eyes met. And just for a flicker of a moment, The room seemed to throb with that sweet, lingering memory, Neetu lying on the couch, Rasmalai dripping from her collarbone, his lips tracing the mess. Their silence was just a beat too long. Sirisha caught it. Her jaw dropped dramatically. “OH. MY. GOD. Wait… wait-wait-wait… WHAT DID I JUST SAY?!” Neetu quickly snapped out of it. “Stop being filmi, Sirisha…” Ravi covered his mouth, laughing nervously. “It’s not what you think.” “Wait a minute…” she said, drawing her words out dramatically. “You two were gone for ages. The door wasn’t opened for like five full minutes. There was no sound. No clanging from the kitchen. No plates. Just silence.” Neetu tried to maintain composure. “Sirisha… don’t overthink—” “Oh no no no,” Sirisha cut her off, waving a finger. .
01-08-2025, 05:20 PM
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“Now I have to know what happened. This is too suspicious. You guys were acting weird even before I left. Now suddenly all the Rasmalai is gone, you’re pretending like it evaporated, And you took forever to open the door. I want answers, Bhabhi.” She leaned closer, dramatically crossing her arms. “Spill. Everything.” Ravi covered his mouth, laughing nervously. “It’s not what you think.” “It totally is what I think!” Sirisha jumped onto the couch, Grinning like she’d just uncovered a scandal. “Now I’m convinced something naughty happened with that Rasmalai!” “Arrey yaar,” Ravi said, holding up his hands. “We were just having fun…” Sirisha leaned in, eyes gleaming. “Fun? What kind of fun needs an entire bowl of Rasmalai? And a five-minute delay in opening the door?” “Sweet fun?” Neetu tried to say innocently, biting her smile. Sirisha dramatically crossed her arms. “I KNEW IT! And you two didn’t even invite me! At least if you had told me, I’d have happily joined the feast. We could’ve made it a threesome Rasmalai party!” Ravi choked on his own breath. Neetu let out a full laugh, covering her mouth. “Pagli!” Ravi jumped in, trying to rescue the situation with a crooked grin. “Arrey, Sirisha… what are you, CID?” “Better than CID,” she retorted. “I live here. I know all the patterns. You both broke the pattern. Something’s fishy. Or should I say… milky?” Ravi laughed. “Come on, now you’re just making dairy jokes.” “I’m making truth jokes,” she shot back with a grin. “Bhabhi, you’re not even defending yourself. Are you guilty or just full of Rasmalai?” Neetu exhaled, her shoulders relaxing as she played along. “None.” .
01-08-2025, 06:09 PM
Wow first of all hats of to you you are putting soo much efforts and hard work into the story and giving regular updates awesome story buildup Shailu ;)
01-08-2025, 06:10 PM
Sirisha gasped. “I don't agree!”
Neetu walked over, placing a hand on Sirisha’s head. “Pagli. You went to college, and we thought we’d enjoy some sweets. What’s the big deal?” “The big deal is,” Sirisha said, play-pouting, “I rushed back early just to eat Rasmalai with Bhayya, and you two didn’t even leave me a drop!” Ravi raised a hand dramatically. “I was forced. She fed it to me.” Sirisha turned to Neetu, narrowing her eyes. “Fed? Like hand-fed?” Ravi instantly backtracked. “No, no! I meant... like… you know, she game me in a small bowl.” Neetu rolled her eyes and laughed. “Sirisha, do you want me to make Rasmalai again tonight to make up for it?” Sirisha squinted. “Only if Bhayya promises not to steal it again. And this time, I’ll be watching. I’ll eat it right here on this couch. With both of you.” Ravi held up his hands in surrender. “Deal. But only if you don’t interrogate us again like a detective.” “I make no promises,” Sirisha said smugly, finally relaxing as she flopped back onto the couch. Neetu looked at Ravi and smiled quietly. The tension that had briefly spiked now melted into a shared, silent relief. Sirisha stretched her arms. “I knew something was going on… but fine. I’ll let it go… for now. But I swear Bhabhi, one of these days, I’ll find out the real reason that Rasmalai disappeared.” Ravi leaned back with a grin. “You wouldn’t believe it even if we told you.” Sirisha raised a brow. “Try me.” Neetu winked, her voice playful. “Some things are better left… unsaid.” Sirisha clutched her chest with mock drama. “Wah! Now it sounds like a full romantic suspense serial, Bhabhi!” “Arrey yaar,” Ravi said, holding up his hands. “We were just having fun…” Sirisha leaned in, eyes gleaming. “Fun? What kind of fun needs an entire bowl of Rasmalai? And a five-minute delay in opening the door?” “Sweet fun?” Neetu tried to say innocently, biting her smile. Sirisha dramatically crossed her arms. “I KNEW IT! And you two didn’t even invite me! At least if you had told me, I’d have happily joined the feast. We could’ve made it a threesome Rasmalai party!” Ravi choked on his own breath. Neetu let out a full laugh, covering her mouth. “Pagli!” Sirisha chuckled, then pulled out her phone as it vibrated. “Hold that scolding, Bhabhi. I have a call from Keerti. I’ll be right back!” She stood up and stepped into the balcony, chatting and giggling. The second the door slid shut, Ravi looked at Neetu, eyebrows raised. “That was close.” Neetu exhaled, then smiled mischievously. “Threesome Rasmalai party, huh?” Ravi chuckled under his breath. “If only she knew…” Neetu leaned slightly closer. “She does know something. Not everything. But something.” Their eyes locked. And for a quiet, unspoken moment, The memory of earlier lingered between them like the sweetness on their tongues. -- oOo --
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01-08-2025, 06:19 PM
(01-08-2025, 05:56 PM)readersp Wrote: Interesting!!! What's going to happen? Hi readersp Glad you think it’s interesting! Without giving too much away, let’s just say things are about to get more interesting. There are some twists coming not immediately and in a few days that’ll really shake things up! With warm regards -- Shailu
01-08-2025, 06:23 PM
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(01-08-2025, 06:09 PM)Hotyyhard Wrote: Wow first of all hats of to you you are putting soo much efforts and hard work into the story and giving regular updates awesome story buildup Shailu ;) Hi Hottyhard Thank you so much! That really means a lot to me. I’m glad the effort is showing. It’s been a lot of fun bringing this story to life! I’m always excited to share updates and keep the momentum going. Your support really helps keep the creative energy flowing! It will be great if you give likes to the updates you like as an appreciation. Thank you for your continued support. Warm regards -- Shailu
01-08-2025, 07:19 PM
The Quiet Conspirators
The moment Sirisha’s footsteps faded down the balcony, the apartment grew calm again. Ravi leaned in slightly, his breath warm against Neetu’s neck. His eyes flickered down to the small, creamy smudge of Rasmalai just behind her ear. There was no hesitation now, only the playful confidence of someone who knew the game well. His lips brushed softly against her skin, His mouth gently moving over the spot where the dessert had left its mark. Neetu’s breath hitched just slightly at the touch, Her fingers curling into the fabric of her kurti as he cleaned the mess with slow, deliberate movements. The sensation of his lips against her skin made the air between them heavier, More intimate, charged with an electricity that neither could deny. “Mmmm…” Neetu’s voice was a soft murmur, a small sound of appreciation, “That feels good.” He murmured, voice low and warm, “you’ve got a bit of Rasmalai here.” Ravi looked up at her, his lips still hovering near the spot, His eyes dark with playful desire. “I couldn’t let that go to waste.” His breath warmed her neck once again as he moved his lips just a fraction lower, Savoring the sensation, the taste. Neetu smiling with a slow, secretive smile. “I know.” She tilted her head to the side, giving him more access, but her voice was teasing. “Careful, Ravi. Sirisha will notice if you keep giving me private cleaning services.” .
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