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Great going with the level of Depravity in your story.
But try n bring it together and clarify the key goals of each character as its all getting very muddled, atleast for me.
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Awesome update
Amazing ✍️writing skills..
Love ❤your work
Keep updating
Waiting for next update
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02-05-2025, 09:12 PM
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Episode #32
Bheema molesting Raashi
Bheema raashi ke saath chhote kamre me jaane se pehle usko bahaar bitha wahin ek taraf mutne lagta hai...
Bheema jaan bujhkar aise khada hokar moot raha tha jisse uske moot ki dhaar aur lund raashi ko bhi dikhe...
Raashi bhi kuch kam nahi thi wo bhi jaanbujhkar bheema ko mootra visarjit karte huye dekh rahi thi... wo toh aaj bheema se milne saj dhaj kar aai thi aur bahut sundar dikh rahi thi... Raashi ko uske bade lund aur moot ko dekhkar kuch hone lagta hai... Bheema ka mootna khatam hone par wo raashi ko ishaara karke apne paas bulata hai... Raashi uske paas aati hai toh wo uska haath pakad kar lund par rakh deta hai aur mutth maarne lagta hai... Raashi ke haatho ke asar se jaldi hi bheema ke lund me bacha hua peshaab baahar nikal jaata hai... Phir wo raashi ko kuch ishara karta hai...
Raashi mana karti hai toh bheema uske kandho par haath rakh jabardasti usko neeche bitha deta hai aur uske baal pakad chehra lund ke kareeb kheenchta hai...
Bheema- muh khol aur mere peshaab ki bunde chaat raashi...
Raashi thoda jhijak rahi thi par bheema thoda aur jor lagakar uske honthon par lund laga deta hai... Lund ka sparsh hote hi raashi khanna ke hont khud be khud khul jaate hai aur ab raashi apni jeebh nikaal lund ke ched par chalati hai aur wahan lagi do chaar peshaab ki boondon ko chaat jaati hai... Uske baad wo supade ke ek hisse ko apne honton ke beech jakad leti hai...
Bheema- aaahhhhhh.... saali raand bahut majedaar item hai tu bhi.. sirf peshaab chaatna tha, lund nahi...
Raashi ab bheema ka lund muh se alag karti hai, phir dono ek dusre ko dekh muskurane lagte hain aur bheema apna lund kapdo ke andar daal raashi ka haath pakadkar us chhote kamre me le jaata hai...
Raashi aur bheema ko us kamre me jaate huye tailor birju dekh leta hai aur langdata hua udhar hi jaane lagta hai...
Shipra jain tailor birju ke jaane ke baad apne molester ka pata lagane baahar aati hai, usko ek langdaata hua vyakti chhote kamre ki taraf jaata dikhta hai, wo samajh jaati hai ke wahi uska molester hai aur uske peeche peeche chal padti hai...
Kamre ke andar pahunchte hi bheema andar se kadi lagakar raashi ko apni baaho me bharkar uske honth choosne lagta hai...
Raashi usko dhakka maar peeche hatati hai...
Raashi- arre arre ruko toh... Abhi toh tum apni nai raand se chipke the aur ab andar aate hi mere saath shuru ho gaye...
Bheema kutilta pooravak muskurane lagta hai...
Raashi- tumne aur us puliciye ne milkar meri chut ki band baja rakhi hai... Mujhe toh aisa lagta hai ke apne pati ke liye nahi balki tum dono se chudne ke liye bani hu...
Ab tak birju us kamre ke baahar tak aa chuka tha aur wahan bani khidki ke parde hata andar ka nazaara dekhne lagta hai, khidki me sheesha naa hone ke chalte baatein sunne lagta hai...
Bheema- bakwas mat chod raand aur mere lund ki khujli mita...
Raashi- apni us raand se jaakar kara kutte jiske saath abhi chipka tha, main teri koi rakhail nahi hu jo ye sab karu... Mujhe yahan kyun bulaya tha jaldi se bak, aur aise baar baar tapodi ko bol kar mat bulaya kar mujhe, usko shak ho jaayega...
Bheema- wo moorakh kya tujh par shak karega...
Raashi- itna bhi moorakh nahi hai woh jitna tu samajhta hai, ab jaldi se bak kyun bulaya hai...
Bheema- tujhse ek jaroori baat karni hai...
Ab tak kamre ke baahar shipra bhi aa chuki thi, wo birju ke theek peeche khadi thi aur uske lund par phirse waar karne hi wali thi tabhi usko andar se ek aawaz aati hai...
Raashi- bol bheema kya baat karni hai...
Bheema- mujhe ek kaam me teri madad chahiye...
Andar ki awaaz shipra ko jaani pehchaani lagti hai... ab wo bhi khidki ke andar jhaankne lagti hai par birju ki height jyada hone se usko kuch nahi dikh raha tha... Ab tak birju ko kuch andazaa nahi tha ke uske peeche bhi koi hai...
Raashi- haan toh bak kis kaam mein madad karni hai...
Bheema- saali raand, pehle toh tu zara tamiz se baat kar mere saath...
Raashi- tameez gai teri gaand me, ab jaldi bak warna main jaati hu...
Shipra ne ab thoda aage ho kar dekhna chhaha toh uska badan birju ki kamar se takra gaya... Birju achaanak se peeche muda aur shipra ko dekh kar chaunk gaya... Abhi wo kuch bolta uske pehle hi uska dhyaan andar se aa rahi baat par chala gaya aur wo baat sunkar shipra bhi chounk gai...
Bheema- toh sunn, main chhahta hu tu us tapodi ko talaak de de aur meri biwi ban jaa... Phir main tujhe roz jannat ki sair karaunga...
Ab shipra ke andar raashi ka jawaab sunne ki utsukta jaagne lagi, wo bhool gai ke wo yahan birju ka peecha karte huye uski phir se dhulai karne aai thi... Shipra ka andar ki baaton me interest dekhkar birju thoda side ko hata jisse shipra ko window par khade hone ki jagah mil gai, ab wo andar ka nazara bhi dekh paa rahi thi...
Birju chalaki se uske peeche halka sa space banakar khada ho gaya...
Raashi- main apne pati ko dhoka nahi dungi...
Shipra ko ye sun thodi khushi hui ke ye ladki ranjitji ko dhoka nahi degi par tabhi raashi ke aage ke shabd sunkar wo hairaan reh gai...
Raashi- parrrr main usko emotional toh kar hi sakti hu aur wo behan ka loda maan bhi jaayega...
Raashi's sexy mischievous smile...
Shipra mann me- ranjitji sahi bol rahe the iss ladki ne unki zindagi barbaad kar rakhi hai aur ab usko tabaah karne ka plan kar rahi hai... main aaj hi jaakar unke saamne iski pol khol dungi...
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PRECAP
Bheema apne aur Raashi khanna ke beech huye fuckfest ke baad us kamre ki kadi kholne ke waaste darwaaze ki taraf badhta hai...
Khidki ke baahar chipke khade shipra jain and birju wahan se hat kar side me chup jaate hai...
side me kam jagah hone ke chalte pajame se baahar jhaank raha birju ka khada lund shipra jain ki gaand se sat jaata hai... Shipra ki gaand par sirf panty thi, wo aage hona chhahi toh birju apne dono haath aage le gaya aur shipra ki chuchiyan dabochkar usko peeche kheencha jisse birju ka lauda shipra ki panty samet uski gaand ke ched me ghusne laga... Shipra kuch aur karti tabhi andar se bheema darwazza kholta hai...
Tabhi shipra ke muh se aaaahhhhh nikalti hai jo bheema bhi sun leta hai...
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(02-05-2025, 05:27 PM)qazmlp Wrote: Great going with the level of Depravity in your story.
But try n bring it together and clarify the key goals of each character as its all getting very muddled, atleast for me.
Thank you for reading and liking the story. I am trying to make it a suspense thriller along with erotica. Keep reading it and you will find the answer of your question very soon.
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Good suspense thriller erotica. Let's hope more revelation will be in next updates.
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06-05-2025, 03:50 AM
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Story par bahut kam response and views se aisa lag raha hai maano main story jaan bujh kar likh raha hu ya phir story bahut kam readers ko pasand aa rahi hai. So, I am stopping this story right now.
Thank you to all readers for being a part of this story. I have a lot of upcoming tracks in my mind but lack of readers interest ke chalte "Shipra ki Aapbeeti" yahin par samapt hoti hai.
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Don't stop bro. It's really interesting story. Please conclude in good way. I don't know much Hindi. I translate page to English for reading this story. Please continue
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(06-05-2025, 03:50 AM)Devilnew Wrote: Story par bahut kam response and views se aisa lag raha hai maano main story jaan bujh kar likh raha hu ya phir story bahut kam readers ko pasand aa rahi hai. So, I am stopping this story right now.
Thank you to all readers for being a part of this story. I have a lot of upcoming tracks in my mind but lack of readers interest ke chalte "Shipra ki Aapbeeti" yahin par samapt hoti hai.
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Bhai aisa mat karo yaar, Itni jabardast kahani hai aapki...
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18-05-2025, 12:31 AM
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(08-05-2025, 10:56 PM)K MD THABREZ Wrote: Witting next update
(09-05-2025, 01:36 AM)drlund Wrote: Plz continue
(09-05-2025, 02:44 AM)Xafar_BD Wrote: Please continue
(09-05-2025, 05:26 PM)rajeev13 Wrote: Bhai aisa mat karo yaar, Itni jabardast kahani hai aapki...
Thank you for your posts and liking the thread. I came here with a thought of restarting the story but did not find enough likes and comments which could motivate me to restart the story. So, I am signing off from this thread forever. This is my last post here.
Good Bye Everyone!!!!!!!!
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