[Nishi.]

ekdom damaka aur sur mast update! yr):

[Abbu ki jaan Ayisha]

ekdom super hot update! bahut bahut mazab aya is kahaani padhke

[gaytri_mom]

nice update

[gaytri_mom]

Anita Hariya ki harkatein yaad kar k apne bistar me hi garam hoti hui

[Mayur5555]

Severely disappointing story

[shdas]

i think jab Rahul ji desh ke PM banege tab yeh story main kuch aage hoga ... extremely boring updates ..keep building a situation in multiple updates and then  nothing gonna ever happen...sorry this is not erotica this is chewing gum ..repetitive and boring.. 
Hariya at one point literally grabbed her naked ass and touched her...dry humped her...but Real mard hain so bas thap thap raha hain 2024 se ... Peace

[Sahab]

i think jab Rahul ji desh ke PM banege tab yeh story main kuch aage hoga ... extremely boring updates ..keep building a situation in multiple updates and then  nothing gonna ever happen...sorry this is not erotica this is chewing gum ..repetitive and boring.. 
Hariya at one point literally grabbed her naked ass and touched her...dry humped her...but Real mard hain so bas thap thap raha hain 2024 se ... Peace

Bhai tumne sahi kaha kab se wait kar rahe hai kuchh hoga lekin abhi tak kuchh hua hi nhi kab se story chal Rahi hai

[seansean007]

Some of the old readers are not putting any comment at all. Let me know if the story is getting boring. Just staying silent won't help. I believe the build up makes sense because Hariya doesn't want to force himself on Anita and even Anita though shameless to the core is not a slut that she will all of a sudden spread her legs. Do let me know your thoughts as well. Open for constructive criticism (keep in mind that I have already mentioned that this is more like a narration of erotic events in a beautiful hotwife's daily life, not just a sex story). Thanks.

[seansean007]

i think jab Rahul ji desh ke PM banege tab yeh story main kuch aage hoga ... extremely boring updates ..keep building a situation in multiple updates and then  nothing gonna ever happen...sorry this is not erotica this is chewing gum ..repetitive and boring.. 
Hariya at one point literally grabbed her naked ass and touched her...dry humped her...but Real mard hain so bas thap thap raha hain 2024 se ... Peace

No real man will force himself on any woman. He will try to arouse sexual interest in her first before taking her to bed. Hariya is waiting for complete green signal from Anita as even though she doesn't mind teasing, she tries to avoid anything full on sexual. So he is just waiting for the right time. If a story where the female becomes a slut in a few encounters seem interesting to you, then yeah this story is boring as per that standard.

[shdas]

No real man will force himself on any woman. He will try to arouse sexual interest in her first before taking her to bed. Hariya is waiting for complete green signal from Anita as even though she doesn't mind teasing, she tries to avoid anything full on sexual. So he is just waiting for the right time. If a story where the female becomes a slut in a few encounters seem interesting to you, then yeah this story is boring as per that standard.

Agreed. But i guess the point is what is that right time in your opinion ??  None of the Reader here is expecting Anita to open her legs and have wild sex with Hariya ...NO... but story should move forward..perfectly fine if it moves Slowly.... problem here is it is just not moving ... just read your earlier updates ( a long time back ) ..Hariya had gone to a point where he was putting his hand inside her ..dry humped her .from that high it has now again become mundane.. now its just about market , he grabbing her ass , she holding his dick ..and ...  
You set the standard yourself for you Sean and atleast I am just trying to hold you to that ..no bad intent here.. no one is thinking Anita as Slut or want her to become one..but even the ADVANCES Hariya has to make should go to another level ...
Having said that , this is your story ..

[Ssd111]

No real man will force himself on any woman. He will try to arouse sexual interest in her first before taking her to bed. Hariya is waiting for complete green signal from Anita as even though she doesn't mind teasing, she tries to avoid anything full on sexual. So he is just waiting for the right time. If a story where the female becomes a slut in a few encounters seem interesting to you, then yeah this story is boring as per thatni

Nice update sean,,, sean this is ur story,,, yeh tumhari story he,, tum jaisa likhna chaho waisa likho,,, pathako ki seduction erotism sab tum jante ho achhi tarah se,,, bss yeh story kabhi end na ho. Kabhi hariya kabhi ramu aur naye naye parts anita ki life mein aate rahe. Aur erotic ho intresting ho. 
All the best sean

[Rohit]

Very nice! Super hot and erotic update!

[Afsana Mimi]

bahut badiya!bahut khub! bahut achi update! bahut hi shandaar aur jackass writings!

[Ammi jaan ka pyara beta]

wah!wah! bahut hi kamuk aur behad hi hot update

[srider69]

Seansean, i think you see right on dot. Perhaps you can increase the promiscuity of Anita a little more. We feel it can advance further to become more casual about it, like in the bus travel, she went a bit further. Hariya wants complete cooperation and hence he is not coercive but i see the dosage increased in his approach, which is a good sign. But also, by now, Anita should become a lil less hesitant and more advanced in her pursuit of happiness

[dragonslair]

Some of the old readers are not putting any comment at all. Let me know if the story is getting boring. Just staying silent won't help. I believe the build up makes sense because Hariya doesn't want to force himself on Anita and even Anita though shameless to the core is not a slut that she will all of a sudden spread her legs. Do let me know your thoughts as well. Open for constructive criticism (keep in mind that I have already mentioned that this is more like a narration of erotic events in a beautiful hotwife's daily life, not just a sex story). Thanks.

This is exactly how i felt about both the characters and even ramu too. for something to happen hariya or ramu or anyone else has to take the initiative and keep on pushing. anita will always be reluctant to do anything by herself. the best she can do at the moment is allow and enjoy the groping and hariya getting a little more handsy. I get it why anita is reluctant to get into a full blown affair as she has a loving and loyal husband. if i have been in her shoes i would have done the same though i am not an exhibitionist like her. now onto hariya i think he is under the impression that anita will get angry with him if he makes too many quick moves on her even though anita clearly enjoys his groping. These are my personal opinions about the two major characters here.

Now coming to the pace of the story yes its a slow burn and some scenes are bound to be repeated to some it may turn out to be boring as many dont pick up the minor subtle changes in behavior in both the characters which you have in mind but most readers here are not that keen in knit picking (which sometimes have caused anger to the writer). I personally like erotic situations that falls short of sex but if the same situation happens far too often then it slowly but surely decreases the erotic arousal that it should have generated.

I have read a few slow paced stories (there are a few in english on this forum too) and i do enjoy them. these kind of stories take time to grow on you. so most readers will feel that this story is going no where. in the previous edition we had jeetu who was like a wild card who kept casual readers engaged but in his absence the story has becomes more realistic but has also given those readers no alternative. 

about not not giving detailed comments (sometimes even a comment) after every update personally sometimes i dont have anything new to add that i have not previously mentioned. and i know that you dont like generic "good update" type of messages. sometimes i do get busy with my work schedule so that may be the reason i miss a few updates on the bounce. 

lastly i know once the story gathers pace it will be hard to white more and more episodes unless you find a way to take it up another step. I hope I havent ruffled any feathers here. Thanks for keeping the story alive.

[Kinkpinkboy]

The point is not that if the story is becoming boring or not, the main point is, it is moving slowly and repetitive, albeit changing subtly in the action of both main characters. I am one of the readers who have read the previous version of the story and I can sense a lot has changed in this version, the absence of jeetu, a detailed action sequences where even hand movements have been described. It takes a lot to do that. But, what I have in my mind is like you have mentioned that this not a sex story like any other sex story we can find on internet but more like a biography of a woman. And this where I get scared and overthink about this story. The way you are writing is of course a commendable act, but to be realistic when we are living in a reels era where our attention span has drastically decreased and has so many immediate means to satisfy our sexual urges, are we or this place is worthy enough to get the story like this being read or write? What if we couldn't do a justice by giving our views which the authors so dearly wants to keep him go. Will then the story be stopped and our hopes to read a masterpiece will end being shattered? I think the answer to this is yes and I won't be mad tbh with the author because of the reason being he giving his time, painfully giving all has he got to provide the readers a relief in free of cost.


Sean, it's also a request you to understand us that, we are silent because the story is not moving forward and there is not fruitful and new explanation to add to this because of its repetitiveness. We will end commenting "good story" and thank you for keeping and moving this story forward subtly. Albeit unlike you we are helpless because we do not have our original mind and thinking skills to notice subtle changes and give you a detailed feedback, we will be able to do for sure only when something new is coming across as such.


Again the same question I want to ask you Sean, are for sure willing to take the risk of writing a biography here on this forum for free? Or you are just giving it a try before trying to think about getting this publish?

If it is so, why not to try not writing here in so much detailed and save it for your novel work? You just give us what we and this website deserves.

[n976512]

Sean you have built up a great seduction setup....

Keep teasing... Yes Anita is not a slut... but she is in the making...

Just taking a leaf from her dream sequence, get her and Harayia alone in either his or her house... Dont try to be a slut in the open...

Absolutely loving your naration bro...

[Introvert]

Wonderful and lovely update. The story going to the right direction.

[SweetSonali]

Shandar aur ekdum ashadaran update