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The story started well with sneaky wife who love the husband. I thought the conversation of "Healthy" would have some impact on the story line. But, it did not. Neither Manav changed himself to healthy man. or Subha changed her mind to live a healthy life in society. Manav understand that he is no where close to the strong Sethu, but he loves Subha. The changes of mindset from love to hate just after kissing a old lady or mating with her didnt do any justice. The character of Manav is assasinated here. Same in the case of Shilpa too. After taking vengence, what did they achieve is the question comes to mind. Well started story, slipped and ended pathetically imho.
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Good narration, but bad ending.
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Very good.
Now Sethu with his healthy body can give healthy children to subha.
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The ending is more realistic....I think....
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Hi Krish, I am disappointed with the ending. Its like moral policing. This is an erotic forum. Satisfying the readers needs is much important. Anyhow you are the creator and you have your way. ALL THE BEST for future works.
-Pickup, drop, escape.
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Author should write an epilogue to clarify on the comments.
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Author has not commented yet. If he is not interested, with his permission someone can continue this in a new thread probably. It has lot more scope.
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I deleted my stuff here. because it will be immature for me to write continuation.
All pics and videos posted by me are copied from g**gle only
Please inform me to remove if you don't like them
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Good, but he has breaked up already. why again?
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The love birds Subha and Sethu are now free birds and ready to be together. The ugly old wife of Sethu and wimp manav are fallen in love and they can marry and manav can father the child born to sethu.
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Divorce is the best option as Manav cannot satisfy Subha hereafter. She is accustomed to big cock. Manav can give only disappointment to her. Let her choose her own life.
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This was the last and final update from Krish for this story. Why are you asking for next update??
If anybody wants to continue with a different ending or approach. They are free to do it(may be in a new thread). Hope Krish will not mind.
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