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Shital ka Samarpan (Alternate Plot)
#21
pls jaldi update do..
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#22
nice plot... bunty hi will be proud of you bro
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#23
Aacha jaa rhe the yaar
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#24
Pls update do
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#25
Buntyji... Aap hi isse aage badhiye
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#26
vontinue plz
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#27
Kyaa Mai is story ko aage bdhau mre pas kch ideas Hain Jo story ko chlaa skte hain
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#28
Hindi font will add to the joy as in the story of Poonam
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#29
(24-04-2019, 12:19 AM)Reema123 Wrote: Kyaa Mai is story ko aage bdhau mre pas kch ideas Hain Jo story ko chlaa skte hain

yes please..samay nahi mil raha hai likhne ka
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#30
(24-04-2019, 12:19 AM)Reema123 Wrote: Kyaa Mai is story ko aage bdhau mre pas kch ideas Hain Jo story ko chlaa skte hain

Yes Reema plz. . It will B great
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#31
Yaar itni shankar story kyu koi aage nhi bada rha
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#32
Jaise hi maqsood ne sheetal ki mkhmali choot pr apna munh rkha sheetal mze se sihar gai uski ankhe bnd ho gai aur munh khul gyaa idhar masood apne khurdre hontho se shital ki choot ko chat rhaa tha udhar sheetal ki sanse tez hone lgi Ayr iski mast gol Gori chuchiya upr niche hone lgi maqsood ne apni zban sheetal ki choot pr rakhi aur choot se niklne Wala safed Pani chatne lgaa sheetal bekabu ho rhi thi usne mqsood ke balo love pkd liyaa aur uska munh apni choot pr ragdne lgi,maqsood smjh gyaa ki shital garam ho chuki h wo ruk gyaa to sheetal khud uska dadhi se bhra chera apni choot pr ragdne lgo sheetal ki choot ka kamras mqsood ke pure chehre pr lgne lgaaa,sheeatal SB kch bhul KR mqsood ka face apni choot pr ragad rhi thi aur usne apni dono tange mqsood ke gle me lpet li aur choot ko uske face pr rgdne lgi aur sath me apni Gand uchkane lgi jaise wo mqsood ka pura Sr apni choot me smart Lena chahti ho,mqsood ko ek shrarat soojhti h wo apni daen hath ki bich ki finger ko sheetal ki Gand ke ched pr rgdne lgta h sheetal thoda ksmsa jati h fr mqsood sheets ke Gand ko hlka sa kholta h aur finger ko jhtke see andr ghusa dta h

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhjhhuchhhhh have maqsood naiiiii

Lekin mqsood fr se uski choot ko chatne lgta h to sheetal fr se mzaa lene lgti h wo apne mze ke aage apna drd bhul jati h aur tez text siskari lene lgti h mqsood bhi mnjha hua khiladi tha wo apni Puri zbsn se sheetal ki choot ko chat rhaa hota h wo danto se choot ki khaal ko kheenchta h,

Ummmmmmahhhhhhhhhhhhh mqsood ahhhhhhhh ahhhhh yesssssss chato kha jaao MRI choot ahhhhhhh ahhhhhh ahhhhhhhhhhhhhjhhuchhhhh

Mqsood smjh jata h ki sheetal jldi jhd jaegi to wo apni ungki Gand see nikaal KR choot me ghusa dta h aur tezi see choot ko apni ungli se chodne lgta h


Sheetal achank see choot me ungli ghusae Jane se chinhuk uthti h aut apni kmr uchka dti h aur uska badan akdne lgta h wo nagin ki trh blkhane lgti h mqsood uski choot see munh nai htata aur lgatar chat ta rehta h


Ahhhhhhhjjjjjjj sheetal ke munh se tez awaz niklti h jise kmre ke baher khdaa wo hotel ka manager sun leta h sheetal ki shitkar see uska louda khdaa ho jata h jisko wo pant ke upr se mslne lgta h

Idhar andr sheetal us ahhh ke sath jhd jati h aur apni choot ka Sara kamras us buddhe mqsood ke munh pr undel dti h aur bstr pr gr jati h aur lmbi lmbi sanse lene lgti h uska shareer paseene see bheega hota h chuchiyo pr paseene ki boonde pdi hoti Hain aur fr mqsood uski choot see apna munh htata h sheetal ashkuli ankho see use dkhti h aur apni ankho pr apna hath rkh leti h
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#33
I think alternative plot means you should start the whole story with new or different perceptive/plot. It does not mean that story should be start by middle of anywhere. This is only my suggestion, you can do as you want but personally i don't like this story if you do not start from scratch. Original story still has been posting with some changes but if you are saying that this is a alternative plot you should write a alternative plot, not the future version of same story.
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#34
(29-04-2019, 03:21 PM)Jyoti Singh Wrote: I think alternative plot means you should start the whole story with new or different perceptive/plot. It does not mean that story should be start by middle of anywhere. This is only my suggestion, you can do as you want but personally i don't like this story if you do not start from scratch. Original story still has been posting with some changes but if you are saying that this is a alternative plot you should write a alternative plot, not the future version of same story.
ALL THE BEST !!!
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jyoti dear.... i am agree with you.... alternative plot means a new twist and different turn... not only in climax ...but for entire storyline... so it must be implied in initial stage... not at the time of climax
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#35
@reema.. Awesome great start ... Plz continue u r doing good ;)
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#36
@jyoti agreed... If u have ideas for alternate plot plz write a new story from scratch we'll support n appreciate u

But now we should appreciate Reema's effort that she's continuing this story who some random dude started.. Reema if possible just ask moderator to change name of this story to sequel of shital's samarpan
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#37
Iss story ka original part post kijiye please..voh mujhe voht ahchi lagii thi..ek post dekhi maine..but voh hindi font me..aap please english font  me post kijiye
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#38
(21-05-2019, 04:07 PM)rimpikhatun Wrote: Iss story ka original part post kijiye please..voh mujhe voht ahchi lagii thi..ek post dekhi maine..but voh hindi font me..aap please english font  me post kijiye
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#39
Bhai hindi font original hai to link send kar de
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#40
Another incomplete story
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