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Misc. Erotica Rupmati (Rupa) : A Rich housewife - Garibo ki khawabo Mallika
#81
Writing are well....
Try to develope the plot....
Take it slow, detailed and seductive....
I am sure that the writing skills you have... This story would be a block bluster if there is continuity and different approach to the story....
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(04-12-2023, 03:16 PM)abcturbine Wrote: Writing are well....
Try to develope the plot....
Take it slow, detailed and seductive....
I am sure that the writing skills you have... This story would be a block bluster if there is continuity and different approach to the story....
Views and comments will eventually follow...



Thank you sir

Bus aap log isss tarah se thoda support kare, me janta hu mera grammar bahot week he, lekin me jarur koshish karunga spellings or plot ko develope karneka,


Bahot bahot dhanyawad sir

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Ek ghante bad Champa apne bete ko sath lekar aai or muje sopker chali gai, vo ek college me padhne wala jesa lag raha tha, uska sarir ekdam patla tha, lambai me bhi mere sine tak ki uchai thi, chahre pe muchho ka namo nishan nahi tha, ekdam quite sa dikhai de raha tha vo, 
Mene use sofe pe baith ne ka ishara kiya to vo turat uss pe baith gaya or idhar udhar kisi pagal ki tarah sab dekh raha tha, kabhi kamre me charo taraf dekhta to kabhi mere chahre ko dekhta,



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, or mene use ke liye tv chalu kar di, kariban rat ko ab 8 bajne vale the, khane ka time ho gaya tha, mene use khana diya or khud bhi kha liya, khane ke time bhi vo tv dekh raha tha kabhi kabhi pagalo jesa harkate karta rahta tha firbhi utna  pareshan nahi kiya muje,

Vo khana khatam karke vapas sofe pe baith gaya or tv dekhne laga, me bartan vagera sab rakh dene ke bad table saaf kar rahi thi ki tabhi mere bacche ki rone ki aawaj aai or me uper bedroom me chali gai, usko doodh pilaya to vo khelne laga, vo soke utha tha to usko neend nahi aa rahi thi, thodi garmi lag rahi thi to mene bachhe ke dono taraf takiya lagaya or nahane liye bathroom me chali gai, jese hi me kapde utarna start kiya th ke darwaje pe ek aahat hui mene vapas bathroom se bahar aai to vo pagal ladka tha, vo mere bacche ke pass jake uske sath khel raha tha, 


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Muje thoda dar laga kahi ye mere bachhe ko koi nuksan na pahochaye to accha he ? lekin vo bade pyar se uske sath khel raha tha, mene rahat ki sas lete huve jaldi jaldi nahke aane ka faisla kiya, lekin me riksh nahi le sakti thi to mene bathroom ka darwaja thoda sa khula rakha jitna me unn dono ko dekh saku, mene apni panty ko chodkar sare kapde utar diye or jake bath tab me baith ke fatafat nahna chalu kar diya,  


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Me nahane me vyast thi  ki tabhi darwaja takraneka  damam aawaj aaya or me ekdam se dar gai samne dekha to pagal tha mene apna dono stan ko apne hatho se dhak diye or usko bahar jane ke liye bolne ke sath ishara karne lagi, usne meri or dekha haste huve pagal ki tarah idhar udhar dekhkar vapas chala gaya,

Darwaja takrane ki aavaj se mera bachha rone laga tha, mene apne badan ko pochhkar jaldi se sirf nighty jo kamar me les badhkar kar uske pass chali gai, nighty ke niche bra or panty dono hi nahi pahne the, muje iss ghatna se itna to pata chal gaya tha ki pagal se darne ki koi jarurat nahi he,


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Apne ro rahe bachhe ke pass jakar doodh pilane lagi, vo pagal kabhi idhar to kabhi udhar tahal raha th, tabhi uski najar ek bade football jese boll pe padi or uske sath khelne laga, or kahi se bet jesa kuch utha laya or ball ke sath khelne laga, uska aakar bhi muje uss gandi nale ke kide land jesa dikhai nene lag, vo kahi bhi kisi bhi raste se meri najaro ke samne aaneka jaise bahana dhund raha tha, vo meri pati per ki vafadari ko todne ki koshish kar raha tha, vo mere mathe ke sindoor pe apna hak jamana chahta ho esa lag raha tha, uske sath mera bharpur yovan or chut ko lutna chahta ho ese bar bar mere ankho ke samne kisi bhi roop me aa jata he.

Kahi sach me esa huva to ?  
Kya vo sach me mere badan ko lutega ?  
meri komal or kamsin najuk si chut ko lutega. ?
kya vakai me itna bada vo meri chut me ja payega. ?


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Ye sab soch ke meri chut me khalbali mach gai, meri chut uske land ko nimantaran dene ko aatur ho rahi thi, muje ab under gilapan mahsus ho raha tha, tabhi ball mere uper age gira to hos sambhal te huve vapas apna dyan dusri taraf kiya, 

 ball uchalkar mere pass aake gira to vapas mene use pass kiya, ab vo bar bar meri taraf ball fek kar mere sath khelne laga, muje bhi nind nahi aa rahi thi to me bhi apne bache ko doodh pilate huve khel rahi thi, me uske sath me ghulmil gai thi, vo ek pyara sa agya kari ladka tha, bhale hi vo ek pagal tha, ball uchalkar mere pair ke pass ake gira to mene ek lat mari ball ko or uske pass bhej diya, mere pairo me jo payal pahne the uski aavaj ne usko akarshan kiya, vo aake mere pair ke pass baith gaya or payal ke googhroo ke sath khene laga, kabhi kabhi vo gud gudi bhi karne laga tha, muje isse hasi aa rahi thi, vo dhire se mere bachhe ke baju me aake lait gaya, khelne ke karan garmi lag rahi thi to mene AC on kar diya, 


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Mera ek stan se bachha dood pi raha tha iski vajah se dusra stan thoda aadha dikhai de raha tha, vo bade hi kutuhal se usko or mere bachhe ko dekh raha tha, me bhi uss pagal ki harkato ka muaayana kar rahi thi, muje bhi utne hi  kutuhal hui ke chalo ye pagal kya karta he dekhti hu, usne apni ek ungli sidhi karke dhire dhire mere adhe dikhai de rahe satan ke golai ke or lake dhire se ungli se dabaya or turant hath ko vapas khich liya, uski iss harkat se muje thodi hasi aai vo bhi jor jor se hasne laga, tabhi usne apne hath or muh se mere dusre stan se dood pine ka ishara kiya, muje bada tajub or ajeeb laga to mene ishare me hi mana kar diya, lekin vo to apne hath pair ko jatke marke hilake rone or jeed karne laga, me ekdum dar gai or nighty sidhi karke baith gai, ab kya karu kese isko sambhalu kuch samj me nahi aa raha tha, idhar pagal ki rone ki aawaj se mera bachha bhi vapas jag gaya. Mere liye dono ko sambhal pana muskil ho raha tha,


To be continue.......
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#85
Ek tum hi ho......
Yaraaaaa...... Dildaraaa....
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Tabhi ek fasla kiya kyo na ishko bhi apna doodh pilake usko sant kar do ye to gunga bahra or uper se aadha pagal he, kisiko bata bhi nahi payega or pagal ki kon bat sunega, kal to bhul bhi jayega vapas, or dhood pine se boobs ka bhar bhi kam ho jayega, or bechara googa bahra uper se pagal he muje daya aa gai, chote se ladke ki roni surat  jara bhi achhi nahi lag rahi thi,  turant let gayi mere bache ke muh me ek stan dal diya or usee mere pass ane ka ishara kiya, vo turat sant hoke pass aaya to usee meri pith ke pise bethne ko ishara kiya, dusra boob ko uske samne nighty ki les ko bina chode se side se bahar nikala or usee pine ka ishara kiya,


 usne turat der na laga ke uss per tut pada,  doodh se bhara huva stan ke samne uske najuk hath ki hatheli ekdam choti najar aa rahi thi, vo dono hatho ki choti hatheli me boobs ko bharne ki chesta karta tha, lekin ye boobs bada aakar ke karan sambhav nahi tha,



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 mere bachhe ko sone me 2 se 3 minute lage honge, or  bacche ke muh me se nipple ko nikalakar pagal ki taraf gum gai, vo bhi ab apne pairo ko lamba karke sidha meri or muh karke so gaya, ab position ye thi ki vo mere samne tha or mera baccha mere pise hone ki vajah se mene usee dusri taraf khishak ka ishara. Kiya lekin vo nahi mana ya uske ishara samajh me nahi aaya hoga sayad ,


boob pe daat se thoda kat diya to useke chahre ko door kar diya or puchhhh ki aawaj ke sath nipple uske muh se bahar nikal aaya or meri taraf apna chehra utha ker sawaliya najar se dekhne laga, hum dono aapas me ekdusre se najare mili, uske pyare se chahre ke ankho me dekha to me khud hi uski sawaliya khubsurat jeel jaisi akho me dub gai, or uske komal galo pe pyar se chapat laga ke vapas apni or khich te huve apne bharavdar boob uske muh me dal diya lekin usne apni ankhe meri aankho me milaye rakhi, uska masoom sa  chahre ki ankho se me bhi apni najar ko door nahi kar saki, mera hath apne aap uske sir ke balo ko pyar se sahlana chalu kar diya,


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kuch ajeeb sa lagne laga tha, ek ajeeb sa sarir me khumar sa chane laga tha.  boob me tanav ane laga tha, nipple ab khade hokar tan gaye the, sarir me ek alag sa anand ki anubhuti ho rahi thi,  dil jor jor se dadkane laga tha, sarir ke naso me khun ki raftar apne aap bad gai thi, AC ki thandi hava bhi  sarir ki garmi ko thanda nahi kar pa raha tha,  pairo ki naso me ek tanav aa gaya tha. Uske pair jo dood pine ke bavjud uski height kam hone ke vajah se mere pair tak hi saman antar me the,  uski ankho me dube huve hi uske sir ke balo ko kas kar uske chahre ko apne boobs per jor jor se dabane lagi, vo gu gu ki aawaj karne laga,




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or jor se uska daat vapas boob me lag gaye, to dusra boob uske muh me dal diya, mere  under ab sex ka saya havi ho gaya tha jo uss pagal pe bhukha Sher ki tarah japat marnene ko taiyar tha. chut ab vapas se ekdam garam ho gai thi, vo apni garmi se pani chodne lagi thi, chut me dher sara chikna dravy paida ho gaya tha. 

Bar bar uss kale gatar ke kide ke land ki vajah se me rasta bhatkne lagi thi, bar bar mera sarir sex ki bukhar me tap raha tha, na chahte huve bhi me apne aapko uss raste se rok nahi pa tahi thi, 

Sex ka saya esa tha ki samne kon he, kesa he, kis jat ka he, use kuch bhi dikhay nahi de raha tha, na to use apni man maryada ka se kuch matalab tha na hi apne pati ka vafadar ka nishan sindoor se, na hi apne Sanskaro se, vo ab iss sex sagar ki gahrayo me uthar jana chahta tha, badan ab aag ki solo me tap raha tha, 



Me apne kabu me nahi thi, hath apne aap uss pagal ke badan ko sahlane lage.  uski tshirt or short ko payar se sahlate huve dhire se nikal diya, vo ab madar jat nanga tha, Tabhi us pagal ko AC ki adat na hone ke karan use thandi lagne lagi, AC adaat hoti bhi kese bichara garib jo tha. nighty kamar me jo gath badi thi vo mene khol di or ab nighty ka upervala sira pakad kar usne apna sarir ko dhakne ke liye jor se khicha to dusra sira bhi sine se dusri taraf niche gir gaya, or  sarir bhi aage se bilkul nanga ho gaya, or thandi ki vajah se vo mere sarir se chipak gaya, uska nanga patla sa sarir mere sarir se chapka to mere muh se aahhh nikal gai, or mene apni ankhe bandh kar di, 



 Uska sarir mere bharavdar sarir ke samne kuch bhi nahi tha, mene apna ek pair ko uthake uske pairon ke uper dal ke apni or khichne lagi, tabhi uska murjaya huva chota sa land meri chut ke balo ke ass pas chubhne ka ehsas huva to  sarir me ek sansani si hone lagi,   ek hath niche le jake uske murjaye land ko tatolne lagi,  uske chote se land ko apni angliyo me pakad kar age pise karne lagi,  lekin kuch der tak esa karne per bhi khada nahi huva, hota bhi to kese bichara pahli bar esi paristhiti ka samna kar raha tha,  upar se adha pagal or nasamaj he. 


Tabhi mene apne sarir ko thoda pise karke apne chahre ko uske chahre ke pass le jake usko puchkarte huve uske hotho pe ek pappi kar di, vo abb bhi muje savaliya najro se dekha raha tha. Me iss khel ko kisi bhi tarah se aaj anjam tak le jana chahti thi, is khel ke madhyam se hi apni jawala sant karna chahti thi, me ekdam dhre se sab apne dav pech khel rahi thi. Vapas mene ese hi ek do bar uske hotho per kiss kiye badme apne honth ko uske hantho ke sath dhire dhire chpka kar chumna chatna chalu kar diya, usako bhi khel me maja aane laga to vo bhi mere sath ese hi karne laga. Mene ek ek karke uske uper or niche vale labo ko chusna chalu kar diya, or apni juban ko kabhi kabhi uske muh me ghusa dethi thi, vo bhi ab mere iss khel me barabar sath dene laga tha, vo bhi apni juban mere muh me dalne laga to vasna se apne ankhe nandh karke uski juban ko chusne lagi, uske sath sath uske murjaye chote land ko bhi age pise karne ka kam chalu rakha, firbhi koi fayda na dekhkar mene chut uske lad pe rakhkar ragdne lagi, chut ke pani se uska land bhi bhig gaya tha, ab kuch kuch halchal uske land me mehsus ho rahi thi,



kuch hi der me iska fal muje mil gaya, uske land me ab dhire dire tanav aane laga tha, me pyar se dhire dhire uske lad ko sahla rahi thi, kyonki use ish khel ke khatam hone tak le jana tha, uske land me ab jan aa gai thi, uski nuni ab land ban gaya tha firbhi kariban vo sirf char se sade char Inch ka lamba or sayad ek se dedh Inch ka choda hi huva tha, meri hath ki mithi me hi vo sama gaya tha,


jo bhi ho loha garam he to hathoda mar dene ka faisla kiya,  uske land ko chodker hath uske sir ke balo ko kas kar pakda or dusre hath ko uski kamar ke niche se le jake uski gand ko jor se utha ke pura ka pura pairo ki madad se apni uper khich ke liya or pith ke bal ho gai, ab me niche thi or vo mere uper, mene position banane ke liye sir or dhad ko thoda uper karke do takiya niche rakh diye, or dono nage pairo ko uper hava me uske kamar ke ird gird utha ke lapet liya,




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uska chota sa land meri chut ke ass pass takra raha tha, me ekdam aavesh me aa gai thi, ab ruk pana muskil ho gaya tha, lekin muje pura khel khelna tha to har ek kadam dhire dhire bada rahi thi,  



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 ek hath ko niche le jake uske chote se land ko ungliyo se pakad kar dire se chut ke drwar se lagaya or uski gand ko pairo ki madad se apni or dhire dhire khicha, uska land ka chota sa supara meri chut ke dwar ko kholte huve dhire se chut ki chiknai ke karan under sarak gaya, under sarkne me der nahi lagi kyoki ek to chut me pani ke karan pahle se chiknahat ho gai thi or uper se uska land ekdam chota tha or ese hi mene kuch der pade rahne ka faisla kiya kyoki me khel ko bigadna nahi chahti thi, uske sir ko sahlate huve mene ek jordar kiss uske hontho pe ki,  mere aanand ki koi seema nahi thi, mera man khusi ke mare ufan per tha,  kyonki ki ek pagal ko sahla fushla kar vo bhi ek nadan dimag ke ladke pe khel me jeet hasil kar li thi, or usse bhi jyada khusi ye thi ki uska kuwara pan bhogne me mene kamyabi hasil kar li thi. Haaaa Uske sath uska pahela sex karke uska kuwara pan bhogne ke liye me apne app ko nasib dar manne lagi thi,

Isi anand ki anubhuti ke sath mene uske sir ko apne sine per dabaya or vo ek agyakari bachhe ki tarah uska dood pite huve chusne laga, me bhi kabhi kabhi uske mathe per pyar se chumban karti to kabhi kabhi komal mulayam gal ko dono hatho ki madad se sahalati or chumti rahti thi, vo meri esi harkato ko savaliya najro se dekhta rahta he, uski masumiyat pe muje hasi aa jati he, uske dimag me aa rahe vichar ko me achhe se janti thi, sayad vo ye sochta hoga ki ye aunty mere sath konsa khel khel rahi he ? Or muje is vichar se me khud under hi under haste huve khus ho rahi thi, tabhi usne mere boob ko chodkar mere hotho ko chume chusne laga, mene bhi uska fayda uthate huve uske hotho ko chusne lagi, meri chut mese se pani ki dhara bahne lagi thi, mene ab aage badhne ka faisla kiya,


Lekin muje khayal aaya ke ye pagal ko sex ke bareme kuch pata nahi he to dhakka kaha se marega? Mene use apne sine se chipake huve side me dire se palat gaye ab vo mere niche tha or me uske uper, uska patla sa chota sa sarir mere bharavdar or gadrayi kaya ke niche dab gaya,




vo ye sab dekhkar mere chahre ko dekhne laga mene usse pyare smile di or muskan ke sath uske hotho ko chumna chalu kar diya ab vo bhi mera khel me sath dene laga tha, ab mene or aage badhte huve meri kamr or gand ko dhire se land ke supare thak uthaye or puchhh ki aawaj ke sath vapas dhire se land ke uper baith gai, land ekdam chota sa tha fibhi ek naya anubhav ke karan meri chut ki diwaro mese pani ki dhara bahne lagi thi, me ekdum garam ho gai thi, ab akhri dav khelna chalu kar diya mene, dono hatho ko palang pe tikaya apni gand ko hava me land supare tak lake ekdam jorse gand ko vapas land pe patak diya, uske land ko chut ki gahrayo me utarna chahti thi,  tabad tod bichare pagal ke chote se lad ko chodna chalu kar diya,  mere dobo boobs ab havame mere sath sath jul rahe the, jabhi me land baithti thi to uski patli si gand mere badi badi gand ke ubhar ke niche gayab ho jati he, uske sarir ka mere sarir se koi tal mel nahi tha,




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lekin ek naya anubhav se me uss pagal ke sath me bhi ab pagal hone vali thi, mene ab apni raftar me teji ladi or jor jor se uper niche hone lagi, mene uske haddi vale  jese baju ko dono hatho se dabake chut ko uske land pe tapatap marne lagi, mere pair ab ethne lage the, meri chut ne apni manzil pe pahoch ne ke liye top gair laga diya tha, meri chahre ke bhav badal gaya the, vo bhi mera ye roop dekhakar gabharahat or sex ka mila jula asar uske chahre pe dikhai de raha tha, vo bechain hoke idhar udhar apne sarir ko hilane laga,



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lekin mene use baju  ko kas pakad rakha tha or mere vajan se to bilkul bhi hil nahi pa raha tha. Vo gu gu ki aavaj se muje esa na karne karne ke liye bol raha tha sayad, me bhukhi Sherni ki tarah uss pe tut padi, or uske hotho ko jor jor se kiss karana chalu kar diya. Or uski aawaz dab gai, me meri gand ko uske land pe age pise pagolo ki tarag ragad rahi thi, 


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Gand ko patak patak uske land pe dhakko ki bochhar chalu kar di,  jese uska balatkar kar rahi thi,   itni besharam ho gai thi ki uss bechare pagal ko chut se chod chod ke apni havas mita rahi thi, mere boob ke dono nipple tan gaye the,  me vasna me esi doobi ke uske chote se land ko bhitar or bhitar sama dena chahti thi, usse pura ka pura kha jana chahti thi, uska chota sa land meri chut ki diwalo se ragad te huve mahsus kar rahi thi,  land chota hone  ke karan  chut me kabhi idhar to kabhi udhar chubh raha tha, meri uchal ne ki gati badh gai thi, meri chut ki diwalo se behta huva pani uske land ko bhigo kar uske uper gir raha tha,  meri ankho me andhera sane laga tha or AC chalu hone ke bavjud pasine se bhig gai thi, sarir me akdan si hone lagi tabhi achanak satve asman pe pahunch ki anubhuti hui or sarir me ek esa dhamal machaya ke meri kamar or pith dhanus ke aakar ka ho gayi or sir pichhe ki aur jhuk gaya or uske land pe sidhi baithe baithe ek hath uske gardan ke pise le jake jorse meri or khich ke dono badi badi chati ke bich me uska chahra bheech diya,   aaaaaiiiii ...........  or ek jordar fuwaraaaa chut se futta or bahne laga or uske sath hi me jadne lagi, or uske chote se sarir se lipat gai,



Aaj esa sukh mila tha ke mere pass use sabdo me byan kar pana muskil tha,  sarir param anand me dubki laga kar halka ho gaya tha,  dhire se baju me ludhak gayi or kab aankh lag gai pata hi nahi chala,



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Brilliant....
Bahut hi bhadiyaa....
Thoda emotional introspection add karo....
Sex scene ko detail. Me likhiye.....
Choti choti feelings wagerah ko detail mein bataye....
Likhte accha hai....
Thoda spellings per dhyan dijiye or
Dialogue form mein likho....
Lambi jaayegi story....
Agge ka intezaar hai....
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(15-12-2023, 02:01 PM)abcturbine Wrote: Brilliant....
Bahut hi bhadiyaa....
Thoda emotional introspection add karo....
Sex scene ko detail. Me likhiye.....
Choti choti feelings wagerah ko detail mein bataye....
Likhte accha hai....
Thoda spellings per dhyan dijiye or
Dialogue form mein likho....
Lambi jaayegi story....
Agge ka intezaar hai....

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Mera grammar thoda week he, or hindi muje aati nahi he, lekin jyada se jyada Hindi sab log padhate he isliye mene hindi me likhne ka faisla kiya,

Story me plot  story ke mutabik thoda idhar udhar aayenge, kyoki ki samay ke anusar story ke mutabik  kirdar ko rakh raha hu, me nahi chahta ek kiradar ek hi bar me apna role khatam kar de, agar ek bar me role khatam ho jayega to erotic stories likhne ka koi matlab nahi he, ye aapko story jab khatam hogi tab ye sab pata chalega, bus aap har ek plot ko dhyan se padhyega, ek plot likhta hu to samaj jana ke aage ishka jarur kuch na kuch lena dena hoga,


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#89
Koi batayega


gif jab post karta hu to chalta he lekin kuch samay bad band ho jata he ?


Pls koi solution batavo meri Puri mahnat pani me ja rahi he,
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Me jarur koshish karunga dost
Mera grammar thoda week he, or hindi muje aati nahi he, lekin jyada se jyada Hindi sab log padhate he isliye mene hindi me likhne ka faisla kiya,

Story me plot  story ke mutabik thoda idhar udhar aayenge, kyoki ki samay ke anusar story ke mutabik  kirdar ko rakh raha hu, me nahi chahta ek kiradar ek hi bar me apna role khatam kar de, agar ek bar me role khatam ho jayega to erotic stories likhne ka koi matlab nahi he, ye aapko story jab khatam hogi tab ye sab pata chalega, bus aap har ek plot ko dhyan se padhyega, ek plot likhta hu to samaj jana ke aage ishka jarur kuch na kuch lena dena hoga,


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(14-12-2023, 11:48 PM)abcturbine Wrote: Ek tum hi ho......
Yaraaaaa...... Dildaraaa....



Thank you dost ek tum ho jo ek naye writer ka hosla badhate ho, 
Bahot bahot dhanyawad mere dost

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(15-12-2023, 07:29 PM)Black shadow Wrote: Koi batayega


gif jab post karta hu to chalta he lekin kuch samay bad band ho jata he ?


Pls koi solution batavo meri Puri mahnat pani me ja rahi he,



Dosto kisi ke pass he iska solution pls ...
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Aap likhne per dhyan do.....
You are great at writing......
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(16-12-2023, 02:37 PM)abcturbine Wrote: Aap likhne per dhyan do.....
You are great at writing......

Thank you sir

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Subhah me jab aankh khuli to 



mera munna so raha tha lekin pagal kahi dikhai nahi de raha tha, me ekdum gabhara gai aakhir ye pagal kaha chala gaya. Mene bedroom me se bahar nikalkar pure ghar, gardrn, chat or balkani har jagah dekha vo dikhay nahi diya. Ab kya karu kuch samaj me nahi aa raha tha me vapas bedroom jake soch rahi thi ki tabhi mere bathroom me aavaj aai me bhagkar dekha to vo bathtab me pani ke sath khel or naha raha tha, mene use dekhakar rahat ki sans li,


mathe pe aye huve pasine ko saf karte huve me vapas munna ke pass ja rahi thi ki tabhi meri nazar aaine me meri padshai per padi or vahi ruk gai, mere mathe per pativarta ki gawahi de rahi sindur or gale me mangalsutra astvayst ho gaye the, aaj mene sari had par kar di thi, mera man glani or parshyatap se bhar aaya tha, ye mene kya kar diya, ek taraf mene apne pati ko dhokha diya or dusri taraf uss bichare garib pagal bachhe ka najayaz fayda uthake uske shath balatkar kiya. Kya me itni giri huvi aurat hu, ye sub uss jungli do kodi ke ishan ki vajah se mere daman me aaj dag laga diya mene, uske hi vajah se me aaj bahak gayi, aakhir me uss juggi me gai hi kyo ?  Uss harami badsurat inshan ki vajah se mere Sanskar  aaj tar+tar ho gaye, me kisiko mu dikhane ke kabil nahi rahi, ab kya karu? Bus jo bhi ho mene aaj jo galti ki he uski saja to muje milni chahiye,  Me........ me aaj sabkuch DK ko bata dungi, chahe vo muje ghar se nikal de, ya mujse door ho jaye,  lekin itna bada boj me apne sir per nahi rakh sakti, busss ajj samko DK aayege to kese bhi karke me sab sach unhe bata dungi, mere parshyatap ka bus yahi ek rasta he,


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Samko DK or nokrani dono aa gaye, samko darwaje ki ghanti sunte hi me dodte huve darwaja kholker unki bahome simat gai or meri ankho aansu ki dhara bahne lagi,
DK : aree kya huva dear, bus do din hi to me bahar tha, 

Me unhe koi jawab nahi de paa rahi thi, meri aankho se lagatar aansu bah rahe the, 

DK : ohhhhh dear muje maaf kar do aaj ke bad me kabhi bhi tumhe akele nahi rakhunga busssss, vo kahete huve muje shofe pe bitha ke dilaasa dene lage,

Me :  siskyaa bharte huve tutafuti aawaaj me kaha, nnnn nahi nahi mmm mafi to muje magni chahiye tum kyon maafi mag rahe ho,


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DK : nahi darling ab kabhi bhi me tumhe akele rakhakar nahi javunga bus,

tum apne anshu pochho or muje bukh lagi he baba,

tum iss nasamajh pati ko khana khilavogi, bhukh ke mare ab raha nahi jata, tumhare pyare komal hatho se bana khana khane ke liye taras raha hu dear,


unke pyar  or masoom chahre ko dekhekar unhe kuch bhi batane ki himmat nahi juta paa rahi thi, buss unhe gale lagakar haa me sir hila diya, unke chahere pe pyar se dher sari pappi karke kitchan ki or chal di, ese hi do teen din nikal gaye lekin unhe batane ki himmat nahi hi nahi hui, unke pyar ke samne me haar gai. Unka dil dukhane ki meri himmat nahi ho rahi thi, 

Dhire dhire samay ke saath sub thik ho gaya, me bhi apne ghar parivaar me kho gai, ek din jab cupboard DK kuch dhund rahe the ke tabhi usme purane mobile jo chalu condition me the vo mil gaye, or muje dikhate huve bole

DK : janu ek kaam karo ye mobile chalu he bas isme sim Card dalna he, in mese ek mobile dada ko de de to kesa rahega. Mobile pe baat hoti rahegi to apko bhi udhar jane ki jarurat nahi padegi, or haa yaha aake kholi me rahne ke liye maan jaye to or bhi achhaa he, han aur ek kam aur karna ek SIM  lekar Jana aur recharge kara kar hi Dena,  kya bolti ho.......?

Me : aaaaa hhhhhhaaaa thik he, achanak puchhe jane per muje sochne ka time nahi mila or ha kahna pada, 

Ha to kahna tha to kah diya, lekin uss juggi ki taraf janeke bareme  sochkar hi me tention me aa gai thi. Ek hapte tak bahana banati rahi, lekin kab tak bahana banati, ek din me jab gallery me khadi thi tab raste pe uss jungle gawar badsurat aadmi ko cycle pe sawar hoke city me jate huve dekha, me turant chhupte huve usse dekh rahi thi, ek kala badsurat  bheisa jo cycle ki jaan nikalne ke liye tula tha,  cycle ke tyre uske vajan se dab rahe the, uski badi badi bheise jesi  gand ke niche cycle ki sit  gayab ho gai thi, tabhi muje mobile ke bareme khayal aaya ke mauka achha he ye harami bahar he tab tak usse dada ko de aati hu, or turant taiyar hoke uss raste pe gadi leke chal padi,

Rupmati (Rupa)
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Vaha pahochkar fatafat sidhe gali me jake juggi ke pass gadi khadi kar di or foran darwaje ke pass chali gai, Mene dhire dhire darwaze ke khatkhtaya, koi awaj nahi aai to mene wapas do+teen thoda jorse thoka tab jake under su ek bujurg jesi aawaaj aai, kon heeeyy?

Me : muje dhiraj kumar ne bheja he, apse milne ke liye,

Kuch der bad jab darwaza khula tho ek 80 ke uper dikhane wala budha  hath me lakdi ke sahare se khada tha, usne gandi si badbudar  fati huvi dhoti or kandhe pe ek rumal jaisa fata huva gamcha dala huva tha, budhape ki vajah se  uska sarir age ki aour juk gaya tha, jiska sarir puri tarah gal gaya tha, jagah jagah pe chamdi bhi latak rai thai, sarir ke naam pe to bus ek haddiyo ka dhacha bacha tha,



DADA - umer 80 year 

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 usse dekhakar esa lag raha tha ke uska ek pair kabr me tha, vo jivan antim padav pe tha, uske chahre pe halki dhadhi or musse thi, uske  muh me to danto ka nam nishan nahi tha, ankho pe chasma tha jo dhaage se beech or side me banda huva tha,  uss bechare ko dekhakar mere dil me vakai me bahot daya aa rahi thi, ye sab dekh rahi thi ki mere kano me ek aawaj sunai di,

Vo mera chahera dekhte huva bola, ki ki kisne bheja heeeyy ?

Me : ji muje vo dhiraj kumar ne bheja he, jaha aap kam karte the unke bete ne bheja he,

Dhi Dhiraj bete ne bheja he, vo turat pahchan gaya or adar purvak avo avo  bitiya kahne laga, or mudke dhire dhire lakdi ke sahare under jane laga, me bhi unka adar karte huve unke pise pise under gai, under 10x10 ki chhoti jagah thi, usme hi ek kone me nahane ke liye batharoom tha, ek side charpai thi jispe gande badbu dar patla sa gadda or uper fati hui chaddar dali hui thi jo dekhar hi pata chal raha tha ki barso se dhuli huvi nahi thi, pure room me ek ajib si badbu aa rahi thi, kabhi kabhi to pesab ki bhi badbu merre nak me gus jati thi, me samaj gai ke vo budhape ki vajah se batharoom me hi pasab karte honge, charpai ke samni ki diwal pe ek rassi badhi huvi thi jispe gane mele kapde tange huve the, me sab dekh rahi thi unhone pusha or aaap ki taaariff ?

Me : Ji Dada me unki dharam patni hu, me aapko dada keh sakti hu na?

Dada : ji ji voooo  to apka baddpan he bitiya. Aap to hamare malik hi bahurani nui, khub khub jiyo bityarani,

Tabhi betho+betho kahte huve unhone muje bethne ke liye apne astvayst charpai sidhe karne lage to mene unka maan rakhne liye khud chaddar thik kar ke dhanyawad karte huve beth gai, or unko bhi mene side pe jaga dete huve bethne ko bola lekin vo nahi mane or vo bhi darwaje ke or apni peeth kaeke hatho or lakdi ko tikate huve se niche jamin per baith gaye, mera mu darwaje ki or tha, hamne batcheet chalu ki,

Bitiya yaha iss garib ke ghar kese aana huva ? sab thik to hena?

Me : Are dada sub thik he. Hum to aapko yaha se lene ke liye aaye he,

Dada : ji hame lene ?

Me : ha dada,

Dada : lekin hum vaha ake ab kya karege, ham ab kuch kam ke nahi rahe,

Me : Are dadaji puri duniya sub log kam ki vajah se riste nahi banate koi koi rista khoon  ka  nahi hone ke bavjud khoon ke riste se bhi adhik hota he,

Dada : nahi nahi bitya apki bat to sahi he, lekin ab bakika jivan yaha hi gujar jane do, vaha aake apko taklif nahi dena chahta or mera pota bhi he padhai ke liye City me college ke hostel me rahta he, 

Me : usme taklif ki kya bat he dadaji, apnose bhi bhala koi taklif hoti he, or ha aap to bhul gaye lekin aapka ladla nahi bhula aapko, uske Najar me to abhi bhi aap dadaji hi he, unho ne hi muje aapko lene bheja he,

Dada : nahin nahin bitiya Rani aapane Jo hamen ijjat Di uske liye dhanyvad, esi ijjat bhi ham jaise is Garib ke liye kafi hai,

Me : please dadaji man jaaiye, ab hamara kartavya hai ki ham aapki seva Karen, hamen bhi mauka de aapke hi seva ke liye, 

Lekin dadaji manne ke liye taiyar nahin the, vo to bus ek hi baat per atke hue the,  bus apna baki ka jivan yahi hai bitane ka nirnay kiya tha,  unka aadar karte huve Maine bhi jyada Jeed nahin ki, kyun ki kafi der yahan Ho gai thi, aur vah jungali Insan ke aane se pahle main yahan se chali jana chahti thi, 

Me : theek hai Dada Ji agar aapka kabhi bhi Dil mein Aisa Ho ki mujhe vahan jana hai to aap bus yah mobile se ek phone kar dijiyega, ham aapko Lene a jaenge,
Aur unki taraf mobile kar diya,  mobile Lene se bhi Na nukkar rahe the lekin Maine kaise bhi karke unhen Mana liya, kuchh der bad main vahan se nikal gai,

Vahase apne ghar per aane ke liye nikal gai, Jaise hi ghar pe pahunchi to gate  pe Buddha Bhikari baitha hua tha,  uske kapde bhi bilkul Dada ke jaise hi the, jagah jagah se fat gaye the, Unke kapde aur sharir per जगह-जगह gandgi ka samrajya  faila hua tha, unhen dekhkar Aisa pratit ho raha tha ki vah kafi dinon se bhukha hoga, chehra aur sharir bhukh ki vajah se murzaya hua dikh raha tha, chehre per jagah jagah umra ki dhalan ki vajah se juriya ho gai thi, dadhi aur mujhe safed Ho gai thi,



Bhikhari baba - umer 72 year

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  uska sharir sirf haddiyon aur chamdi se tika hua tha, use dekh kar mera dil daya ki bhavna se pighal gaya, vaise bhi main seva ke karyon se Judi thi,  gate ke undar gai to munne ki rone ki aawaj aa rahi thi to gadi lagakar champa se munne ko lekar uske shath kuchh khana panni dene ke liye bhej diya, kuch samay bad munna khelne laga to gate pe jake dekha to budha bhikhari vahase jaa chuka tha, me vapas aake apne munne ke sath khelne lagi.  Ek do din bad vo vapas budha bhikhari aaya to usse me khud khana pani dene gai. Or khana khake dhanyawad bolke chala gaya,   uski halat dekh kar muje bahot daya aa rahi thi,  man hi man me socha ki kahi vrudha ashram me uske rahneka bandobast kar du to uss bichare ka bakika jivan aram se katega.........





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Dosto kya usse vrudha ashram me bheju. ?


Ya



Ghar me rakhu ?
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Ghar me rakho
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Ghar mein.....
Lajawab....
Erotic scene thoda detail mein likho....
Extremely well narrated....
Thanks for writing.....
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Super Hot..
Too good.. yourock
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Mere hisaab se starting ke kuch din Ghar me or fir vrudha ashram me.....
Starting me ghar pe isliye so that Rupa or buddhe me thoda connection Bane but fir vrudha ashram me bhejne ke do benefits hai....
Ek to vrudha ashram me Rupa ko or bhi buddhe or gareeb log milenge maze lene ka liye Jo usko tadenge or story aage badh sakti hai, naye characters aa sakte hai.....
Dusra agar kabhi aapka mann hua ki kisi character se Rupa ko ghar me chudwane ka to fir ghar khaali hi rahega nahi pehle ek update buddhe ko kahi bahar bhejne ka likhna padega
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Buddhe log jo garib aur badsurat ho wohi Rupa ke hero bane to maza aayega. Story superhit hogi
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