08-10-2022, 04:54 PM
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Adultery A Wife's Aerola (Pinjre Mein Band Chidya ) Saga
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08-10-2022, 04:54 PM
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23-10-2022, 01:55 AM
(07-09-2022, 02:16 AM)wolfy Wrote:Best Story. I have some suggestions. Uzra ko abhi slut mat banao. Uzra ko apni izzat kuch time aur bacahe rehne do. Jo Uzra ne Balraj ke saath kiya use Uzra ka khwab (dream) bata do. Uzra ko dheere dheere kholo. Jis aurat ne apni saari zindagi apna chehra kisi ko nahi dikhaya wo ek baar me hi sex kaise kar legi. Jab bhi ghar me kaam hota hai Uzra apne kamre me hi band rehti hai. Pehle doosre logo ke samne Uzra ka chehra kholo, phir baal and so on. Aise hi dheere dheere character build karo to ye story unbeatable ho jaegi. Jab koi character kuch daring kare to uska thought process bhi bata diya karo to bht accha rahega. Jaise jab Akma, Uzra se mafi maang leti hai. Phir agle din molvi ke samne bina chehra (face) cover liye jati hai to Uzra notice karti hai. Isme agar Akmas ka thought process bhi bataya gaya hota to bht accha hota. Kuch naye characters introduce ho sakte hain, jaise molvi ki wife etc. Aur last ye ke jo images lagate ho usme character us time pr jo kapde pehni hui hai image me bhi wahi kapde houn. Ye character ki us time pe figure dikhane se behtar hoga. Thank-you.
23-10-2022, 05:47 AM
Waiting
05-01-2023, 03:53 PM
Waiting for season 2
05-01-2023, 05:28 PM
We are missing your writings....
21-02-2023, 06:19 AM
Great story
04-03-2023, 12:53 PM
Namaste padako,,
Is thread ko jitna Pyaar mila shayad ee meine kalpana ki thi, ,Meine update dena band isliye ki thi, kyon ke mein jiss taraf thread ko leh Jana chahti thi Kuch readers k chalte mein USS taraf leh ja nahen payi,, , phir ayista ayista Meri interest katam o gyi, aur Apne kudd ki masrofiyat k chalte meine update dena band kardi, mujhe bohot se readers ne request ki likne ki aur meine Koshish b ki leken sai desha nahen deh payi, isliye yeh thread Kuch mahinon k Liye band kardi,
Abb mein apse pochna chahti hun aur apko 2 option dongi jiss k Liye comment zyada ayenge ussi taraf Apne esaab Kahani ko leh jahongi ,,
1.. Uzra ki death aur aage sirf akmas society mein ,,,
2.. Akmas ko kahin aur shift kardon Matlab kesi aur jaga Jahan log nahe hun ,
Intezaar rahega apke comments k,,,
04-03-2023, 02:31 PM
You are best in writing erotica.....
Welcome back..... Continue as thought best..... 1st option is better....As plot has developed....
04-03-2023, 03:11 PM
Option 1. This was such a good story but I stopped reading after the story completely diverted towards Uzra. It’s just that seeing an old woman get fucked isn’t something believable but 90% of the time not possible.
Akmas was such a solid character and she should have been fucked and used the way Uzra did. I still believe that you are a gifted writer who can turn this story around Akmas again and she should have been the main character of this story. We all are eagerly waiting for your return and see Akmas getting besharm and becoming gashti of the plumber and and the watchman. Can’t wait!!!!
04-03-2023, 07:26 PM
Super story wonderful writing
04-03-2023, 11:34 PM
(04-03-2023, 03:11 PM)Therocksayys Wrote: Option 1. This was such a good story but I stopped reading after the story completely diverted towards Uzra. It’s just that seeing an old woman get fucked isn’t something believable but 90% of the time not possible. The story was suppose to be akmas's , I wanted akmas to be the lead character of this story, one suggestion after suggestion the story automatically shifted to Uzra which truly speaking I didn't wanted to , that's how I lost my interest in it, I somehow figure in out that lot's of reader's were unhappy for ,,,me bringing Uzra into the story she was a side character from the beginning but what to say,, at last hope you people support the thread more and more to make it big, salute,,
05-03-2023, 06:06 PM
ok,please keep writing
05-03-2023, 09:42 PM
Bhau, 1 aur 2 dono ho jaye toh achha hai..
Aap kisi reader ka dhyan mat do. Jo apka Mann kahe wahi likho sir, bass likhte rahiye..
07-03-2023, 02:38 AM
(04-03-2023, 12:53 PM)wolfy Wrote: Mera suggestion hai ke Akmas ko usi society me rakho lekin Uzra ko bhi continue Karo. Ek extreme se doosre pr baar baar jana accha nahi hai. Pehle sirf Akmas thi, phir last ke sirf Uzra. Ab phir sirf Akmas me mat rakho. Story me diversity khatam ho jaegi. Dono ko rakho, Akmas ke saath Uzra ki bhi story dikhao. Uzra ka bigadna bht slow kardo. Uzra ne apni jawani parde me guzari hai to uska bigadna aasan nahi hai, wo Akmas se bht zyada resist kr skti hai. Agar Uzra nahi rahegi to ek to story ek single line pe chalegi, aur doosra tumne Jo Uzra ki story build-up ki hai wo bekar jaegi gi. Main story Akams ki aur side story Uzra ki.
07-03-2023, 02:57 AM
Bhai dono ko rakho dono ko sath chalao
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