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(17-09-2021, 12:07 PM)Lund12 Wrote: Bhag be musale lakhnow me aa junga teri NRC krne
abey launde, tu kya meri NRC karega, mei teri gpl kar dunga. I am a proud ***** and a member of Yuva Vahini also.. Jai shree raam bol mere sath aur relax kar..
yaha politics karne nahi aaye hain... bas maza le. character ke naam pe dhyan mat de..
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ha ha,matlab yaha bhi relegion ka angle le aaye,yaha har tarah ki stories hai,incest bhi hai jo galat hai lekin sabki apni fantasy hoti hai
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(17-09-2021, 01:30 PM)mohitkumarhot Wrote: ha ha,matlab yaha bhi relegion ka angle le aaye,yaha har tarah ki stories hai,incest bhi hai jo galat hai lekin sabki apni fantasy hoti hai
sahi baat. yahan log sirf maze lene aaye hai apni apni fantasy ke. aap story post karo. we are waiting.
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(17-09-2021, 01:09 PM)longindian_axe Wrote: abey launde, tu kya meri NRC karega, mei teri gpl kar dunga. I am a proud ***** and a member of Yuva Vahini also.. Jai shree raam bol mere sath aur relax kar..
yaha politics karne nahi aaye hain... bas maza le. character ke naam pe dhyan mat de..
Yuva vahini ka hoker tu esi porn zihad ko badawa de rha h tu jhoot bol rha h
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17-09-2021, 04:39 PM
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Bakwas update salim na sunte hi afgjanistan taliban yaad aa gya ye loh insaniyat k dusman h inka naam bhi manusiyat h aaj wakt masaj to door ki baat na inko kitaye pr kamra deta h na inki dukaan se san leta h inki rhedi patdi se koi san nhi leta yaha tak ki chikan mayan khana ho to akram se acha vikaram dalit k hato se kha lege wo apna bhai to h
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jis jis kabhi dikkat hai ,kripya karke is story ko copy kare ,naam badal kar har site par post kar de
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final update likh raha hu,uske baad ek gaon par likhuga
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19-09-2021, 05:45 PM
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first half was awesome... but in second half you rushed the story so much that Sneha ultimately seemed like a slut than a reluctant, shy wife whom you portrayed very well in the first half. It almost felt like I m reading 2 different stories with different women. Sad to see that you wanted to end the story so much.
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(22-09-2021, 11:14 AM)ambirod Wrote: first half was awesome... but in second half you rushed the story so much that Sneha ultimately seemed like a slut than a reluctant, shy wife whom you portrayed very well in the first half. It almost felt like I m reading 2 different stories with different women. Sad to see that you wanted to end the story so much.
sorry for that ,but dont you saw the above conversation
ek baar moond kharab to fir vapas mann nahi lagta,or me un writer me nahi hu jo story ko bich me chodd de,isiliye jaldi baazi me pura kiya ,kabhi mann hua to aage badauga
thanks for reading the story carefully
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Bro bhaut acha laga dubara ye story pad ke
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(22-09-2021, 06:48 PM)fuk_fuk_fukrey Wrote: Bro bhaut acha laga dubara ye story pad ke
padte raho,maje lete raho
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You're good at writing.. Next time, bring something New!
Good Luck.
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(22-09-2021, 02:42 PM)mohitkumarhot Wrote: sorry for that ,but dont you saw the above conversation
ek baar moond kharab to fir vapas mann nahi lagta,or me un writer me nahi hu jo story ko bich me chodd de,isiliye jaldi baazi me pura kiya ,kabhi mann hua to aage badauga
thanks for reading the story carefully
Kepp writing new stories brother... some ppl will like them so will hate. If you dont respond and only keep posting the story... you will hv that creative freedom to write. if you engage the negative readers... then it will take out fun and will make you feel bad about your own writing. Instead.... put the whole story at once and let the ppl read, clap, shout or do whatever,... at least you finished your writing in your own way. Fantasy has no bounds... and should be kept free from any prejudices... Please post the whole story next time in stead of posting in parts and waiting for the response. Your writing and thought process is very good. Please keep it up
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(26-09-2021, 10:18 PM)The_Writer Wrote: You're good at writing.. Next time, bring something New!
Good Luck.
thanks ,im writing a new story ( मेरी मां मधु देवी और अजय)
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(27-09-2021, 12:44 PM)ambirod Wrote: Kepp writing new stories brother... some ppl will like them so will hate. If you dont respond and only keep posting the story... you will hv that creative freedom to write. if you engage the negative readers... then it will take out fun and will make you feel bad about your own writing. Instead.... put the whole story at once and let the ppl read, clap, shout or do whatever,... at least you finished your writing in your own way. Fantasy has no bounds... and should be kept free from any prejudices... Please post the whole story next time in stead of posting in parts and waiting for the response. Your writing and thought process is very good. Please keep ithanks for thanks for the appreciation ,
dont worry i will extend this story,this story was not meant to end here
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बहुत ही मस्त कहानी है भाई, क्या बात है /
और सब से अची बात तो यह है की इस कहानी के अंत में आपने दी एंड लिख दिया है, बहुत अच्चा //
// सुनील पंडित //
मैं तो सिर्फ तेरी दिल की धड़कन महसूस करना चाहता था
बस यही वजह थी तेरे ब्लाउस में मेरा हाथ डालने की…!!!
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(29-09-2021, 07:59 AM)mohitkumarhot Wrote: thanks ,im writing a new story ( मेरी मां मधु देवी और अजय Beautiful story. Story ko aage likho bhai
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