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I hope you and your family are fine Royalkingfire brother.If possible inform us when you going to post next update.
We are eagerly waiting for your next update.
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Well your story is AWESOME, padh kar hum apne gum bhool jate hai. I want you to continue the story with your own imagination. It is your writing skills that we love and that has brought the story to this level. aur bahut sa foreplay rakhna.
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BTW I love the character and exploits of suchita. Also being your first story you have nailed it.
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Hamm sir jii ap kalakar or ham raider ham galtiya bi nikalnge or wah wai bi karnge so ap khud hi apni lqst upadte dekh ke storyy aage bathaooo nddd
Meri khud ki yahi rai he ki story me jyada carectar aad mat karnaa or jo ladaki or maa jo abi chal raha hi men roll me rakhnaa
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@royalkingfire story apki jabardast hai....mere suggestions se tumne story Jha roki thi ...whi se continue kro dost....
Story apki hai yr.....so jaisa tumne socha hai ...waisa likho....kyuki hr reader ki soch alag hoti hai story ko lekar..... So jitna jldi ho sake come back ....and again continue this story....bahit miss kr rha hu apki sory ke update ko.....
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Ab aate hain aapki story pe.
In the beginning of the story we introduced Namrata as sweet,shy,sanskari ,Sharif girl.
Even with the encounter with Birju and savla we always saw innocent face of Namrata.Even in diwali encounter episode we still thought Namrata as sweet sanskari but in safar saga we introduced to new Namrata Jo Sanskari dikhane ka natak karati hain lekin Hain chalak Lombadi.
And in flashback saga now we witnessing how Namrata is transformed into chalakh lombadi Aur iss flashback saga main bahot naye characters introduce hue Abhi,Karan,Dube sir ,raga etc.Ab story bahot intresting mode pe aa gayi Hain.Ab mujhe kya lagata Hain ya meri suggestions main aapko bata hoon.
1.iss flashback saga main bhi flashback aa gaya jab Namrata ne dance performance Kiya aur usse ek aadami ka message aaya jisane use khandar main bulaya jise namra pehele se hi jaanati hain.kyunki uss aadami ne message main likha tha ke us jagah aana jaha aana tumhe pasand hain aur jaha tumne apni andar aur baher ki khubsurati ko jana tha so Mera guess Hain ye ki wo buddha aadami Shayad das sir hoga.jisake bare main abhi ne bataya tha,kala buddha 58 saal ka.
2.Agar wo aadami das Hain to ye dekhana intersting hoga ke usane namrata ko peheli baar seduce kaise kiya hoga.kyunki Namrata pehele se to aisi hogi nahi wo pehele sanskari,shy,sweet rahi hogi.fir das ne use kaise dheere dheere seduce kiya ye janana interesting hoga.Aur sunsan khandar jaise jagah main usane Namrata ke sath kya kya kiya hoga ye sochte hi uttejana aa jati Hain.
3.Agar wo aadami das nahi to kaun ho sakta hain ye aap hi bata sakte ho wo koi buddha college peon,Fake pujari ya baba koi bhi ho sakta hain.
4.Aur Namrata ne uss addami ke sath college main bhi enjoy Kiya Hain ye hume abhi Namrata ke scene se pata chalta Hain kyunki college ki wo jagah bas Namrata ko pata thi.aur use wo jagah kuch kiye bina nahi pata hogi.
5.Aur story main jo baaki character Hain like dube sir,Karan,raga,abhi inhe supporting character hi rakho.Aur blackmailing angle bilkul mat dalo.
6.Story jaise pehele thi waise hi rakho more foreplay and seduction.koi force sex mat add karo.
Aapne last update Jo Diya tha usise aage kahani badhao Baki aap to master Hain story likhane ke jaisa aapko lage waise likho.kyunki aapki writing ke hum kayal Hain.
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Wellcome back bhai.......
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Welcome Royalking Bhai..??
apke laut aane se is platform me ek nayi jaan daldi hai..??
namrata ki journey jo aapne abhi tak twist and turn se likhi hai wo abhi tak kamaal hai..muze malum hai ki uski aage ki journey bhi aisi hi kamaal ki hogi..
kuch suggestions:
story jaisi likhi hai waisi hi continue karo..abhi ke namrata ke saath relation sirf casual hi rakho..Karan ki blackmailing jada mat badao..Karan ka character kam kardo..RAGA ya Das Sir character interesting rahega..muze lag raha hai ki RAGA aur das sir dono ko bhi barabar chance milna chahiye..lekin end mein dono me se ek namrata ko pura pata hai ye likh sakhte ho...
side by side namrata ke flashback me Birju, Savla comparative roll mein kidhar the ye bhi dikha sakthe ho..
hope ye journey surwaat se end tak apni sima tak pohochegi..???
royalking bhai apko fir se ek baar shubh kamanaye aapke story ke liye..?✌✌ hum apke follower apka hamesh saath denge..??