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Zeenat aur Rukhsar ko hi veili slut Bnao. Zeenat 15 sin Rukhsar ke Ghar par rukne jaye Kyo ki farman vapish videsh yatra pe gya he aur Rukhsar ki sas sasur huj yatra pe Aur uske husband ko Out of station ya Bimar kar do yahi carecater ke sath DUSRA PART likho.
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Iram wali kahani shuru karo bhai
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[quote pid='3384618' dateline='1623386460']
To ap batana sab last mai kis kahani ko ek novel ke tor par pesh karo....Mai ek sasti rundi yaha ab kisi ko nahi bana sakta ha aage koi kahani shuru karonga to woh iram ya intzar kab tak karenge hum bhala ya noorine jaise banaonga
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Bhai please please please HARAMI BALAM or HAWAS OR KHOON ko continue kro
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Bhai ek baat kehni thi aapse..... Aapki ye last story Shazia Ek Khilona ek bohot achi story ho sakti thi..... Par shayad naye characters ko introduce karne ki jaldbaazi me story thodi ajeeb si ho gayi thi...... Story me potential bohot tha or characters bhi bohot ache the...... Unka buildup bhi acha tha...... Par story me ek saath itne characters aa gaye the shayad zada tar readers confuse ho gaye...... Par story me kuch yaadgar scenes bhi the jese Shazia ka shabana,haria or dhobi ke saath foursome or wo baba ki kutia me unka lund chusna or last me bhikari wala....... Aapke sex scenes likhne ka m shuruaat se hi fan hu...... Aap sex ko alag level pe le jaate ho...... maine puraani teen stories Hawas or Khoon, Harami Balam or kubda bhikari padi hai isse pehle..... Hawas or Khoon or Harami Balam me jo story pe aapki pakad thi uska xossipy ki koi story mukabala nahi kar sakti...... Ek ek character ko ache se introduce kiya tha..... Araam se bina jaldbaazi ke...... Or sex to tha hi next level...... kubda bhikari bhi kaafi achi thi par agar sudama ko bhi sex karne ka moka milta to or maza aata...... Khaer koi nahi but ab aap aage koi nayi story likho ya Shazia ko hi continue karo ya apni koi puraani story ko ye aap pe hai..... Par story apne hisaab se likhna readers ke suggestions ya galat comments se frustrate hoke story me naye characters laane ki jaldbaazi mat karna...... Ek or baat story me female lead hi rakhna.... Ek ladki kai mard nayi situation me..... Haa beech beech me ek do female characters add kar sakte ho flavour ke liye par main heroine ek hi rakhna...... Or aapne iss story me kai baar ye use kiya hai" esa kyu hua ye aage pata chalega"...... Isko zada use mat karo balki reader ke liye surprise rakho ki jo ghatnaya story me pehle ho chuki hai unke piche ki wajah kya hai...... Isse mere khyaal me readers ki dilchaspi badegi.......
Or aapko bohot bohot thank you jo aap apni niji zindagi se time nikalke humare liye esi nayi or manoranjak story laate ho..... Thank you very much bhai......
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अच्छी कहानी थी लेकिन अंत इतनी जल्दी से होगा सोचा नही
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