[Lorutt]

Or bhai ab xossipy pe v koi aacchi story nahi aa rahi hai to mujhe nhi lagta ab kuch interested rahenga agar tun v chale jao

[Blackak.aa]

Critism is creation ! I have read this somewhere and also wrote 5 page essay on that topic. I find many faults in stories of other writer. Sometimes the way they narrate the story clearly convey that this type of scenario can't be happened in this real world... But why am I not able to critiae ur story.How do u write such a captivating plot that the reader can't help but to read the story. Keep writing maybe one day u will be a public writer just like E. L James or Vladimir Navakob

[Blackak.aa]

I'm deeply grateful of u that u have fulfilled my fantasy. U worte the way I wanted. But the ur kutiya story was the best story of urs till now. I hope the best or master piece is yet to come. Why do I love ur story kutiya? Because it's ur own creation and it's a new type of story. This plot and the way it was narrated was new for me. U are writer bro u should create more out of urs imagination just like mastram did in the past.. I'm sorry if my words hurt ur sentiment in any way

[Silverstone93]

Bro April 11 is too long

Just to let you know brother, Today is April Fool's Day.

I will post story in 2 days for sure.

[Lorutt]

Oo ok bro only you left as good writer in xossipy

[Silverstone93]

I know u wont believe this but I have Bookmarked ur stories! I frequently check ur story in the hope of next update. Sometimes more than 3 times in an hour.
These day i only visit this website for ur story. I a reader of this website since 2013 . I have never gave feedback to any writer.
I f

Critism is creation ! I have read this somewhere and also wrote 5 page essay on that topic. I find many faults in stories of other writer. Sometimes the way they narrate the story clearly convey that this type of scenario can't be happened in this real world... But why am I not able to critiae ur story.How do u write such a captivating plot that the reader can't help but to read the story. Keep writing maybe one day u will be a public writer just like E. L James or Vladimir Navakob

I'm deeply grateful of u that u have fulfilled my fantasy. U worte the way I wanted. But the ur kutiya story was the best story of urs till now. I hope the best or master piece is yet to come. Why do I love ur story kutiya? Because it's ur own creation and it's a new type of story. This plot and the way it was narrated was new for me. U are writer bro u should create more out of urs imagination just like mastram did in the past.. I'm sorry if my words hurt ur sentiment in any way

Thank you so much Blackak.aa bhai.. I have no words to express my gratitude. All these stories are just my random imaginations with now future, no past. I am honoured to have you a my reader. Tbh, I thought people don't like my stories that's why they don't comment.
But, your comment gave me new strength. I'll try my best to give updates frequently.

Constructive criticism is the key to develop great stories. I always wait for someone to point out my weaknesses. It will actually help me to work on it. No writer can progress without criticism. You can honestly point out the area's I lack. I'll work on it for sure.

[Silverstone93]

Oo ok bro only you left as good writer in xossipy

There are great writers on this forum. I am nowhere near to them.

Best ongoing story in English forum. : Click Here

This story is by far the best ongoing story and I request you all to read it.  

[Silverstone93]

A Family Secret

(A suspence mystery Erotica)

Part - I

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Hemanta Mukherjee :49 years old



Tanya Mukherjee : 20 years old



Hemanta aur Tanya samne samne baithe the. Room me khamoshi thi.

Hemanta : maine tumhe kitne pyaar se pala hai, tumhe pata hai na?

Tanya :Y..Y..Yes Daddy..

Hemanta : aur tum ho ki Daddy ke pyaar ko bhulkar kisi aur se pyaar karne ke sapne dekh rahi ho.. Mujhe ye bilkul achha nahi laga..

Tanya : S..So...Sorry Daddy..

Hemanta : No..No...No..Sorry se kaam nahi chalega.. You know that no one is allowed to touch you besides me, right?

Hemanta ab uthkar Tanya ke paas baithta hai aur uske badan par se hath ferne lagta hai. Tanya apne aap ko Hemanta se door karne lagti hai.

Hemanta : Tumhari maa chali gayi aur ab mujhe sirf tumhara sahara hai beta.. Jab koi ladka tumhare paas aata hai to mera khoon khaul uthata hai.. mann karta hai ki uss ladke ko maar du...

Tanya ke rongte khade ho jaate hai ye sunkar.. Wo Hemanta ko dekhti hai.

Hemanta : Hehehe.. Don't worry beta.. maine sirf uss ladke ke hath aur pair tod diye hai.. hehehe..aur shayad...ummm.. uske daat bhi... hehehe..

Tanya ke chehre pe khauf chha jata hai ye sunkar..

Tanya : D...Dad..Daddy.. uss..usko chhod dijiye.. please.. mai fir kabhi kisi ladke se nahi milungi... please..

Hemanta : ohh...my poor girl.. rona nahi .rona nahi.. maine usko kab ka chhod diya hai.. hehehe.. Par ab tumhe uski jagah par saja bhugatni hogi.

Hemanta Tanya ka hath pakad kar usko khichta hsi jisase wo Hemanta ki god me gir jati hai..



Hemanta : Pata hai, tumhari maa jab bhi koi galti karti thi,tab mai usko aise hi saja deta tha...

Sattaakkk....



Ek tez chamat Tanya ki gori faand par padti hai aur Tanya jor se chillati hai..

Tanya : ahhhh..

Sattaakkk!!! Sattaakkk!!! Sattaakkk!!!

Hemanta ab lagatar Tanya ki jawan gaand par thappad marne lagta hai. Tanya chillate hue rone lagti hai..

Hemanta : Oohh.. don't cry my girl.. sorry..sorry.. Daddy sirf tumhe batana chahte hai ki unke alawa kisi aur mard se tumhe milna nahi hai.. okay?

Sattaakkk!!!

Tanya : aahhh..so...so..sorry Daddy..it's hurting..

Hemanta ab Tanya ki laal gaand ko dekhne lagta hai. Uski safed color ki panty dekh ab Hemanta uss par se hath ferne lagta hai..

Hemanta : Wow... Ye maine tumhe 19th birthday pe di thi.. you're still using it?  Tumhe mere diye hue gifts itne pasand hai? hehe..

Wo ab apne hath me Tanya ki panty pakadta hai aur puri takad se usse faad deta hai aur Tanya ke muh par maarta hai...

Trrrrr!!!!



Tanya : aaagghh..

Hemanta : Uss ladke ne mere gift ko chhua isliye maine uske hath tod diye.. Ab wo fir kabhi kisi dusre ke gift ko hath nahi lagayega... Hehehe.. .maine thik kiya na beta??

Tanya darr ke maare kuch bol bhi nahi paa rahi thi. Wo waise hi Hemanta ke god me leti rehti hai..

Hemanta ab Tanya ko niche bitha deta aur khud khada ho jata hai..

Hemanta : Ab bolo, mai tumhe kya saja du uss ladke ke sath ayyashi karne ki..

Tanya : I am s..so..sorry d..daddy.. mai wo galti fir se nahi karungi..

Hemanta : Sorry is not the excuse beta.. aaj daddy tumhe bahut der tak saja denge taaki tum kisi aur ladke ke sath ayyashi karne ke baare me soch bhi na sako..

Hemanta apni pant utarne lagta hai aur ab apna kala musal lund hilate hue Tanya ki taraf dekhta hai..

Hemanta : Ye dekho.. you like daddy's dick, right? Aaj, Daddy tumko pura din apna dick denge.. Tum khush ho na?

Hemanta apna lund ab Tanya ke muh par le jata hai aur usko hontho par rakh deta hai..

Hemanta : Now, open your mouth. Daddy apna chocolate tumhe khila rahe hai, muh kholo..aaa..karo..aaa..

Tanya ab apna muh kholti hai aur Hemanta apna lund uske muh me daal deta hai.

Hemanta : aahhh....my best girl...wooow... Kitne dino baad aaj tumne mera chocolate khaya hai..aahh..



Tanya ab Hemanta ke lund par se juban ferte hue uske lund ko chusne lagti hai. Hemanta bhi aankhe band karke aahe bharne lagta hai..

Hemanta : aahh..my girl.. kitni dino baad..tum ye kar rahi ho.. I'm happy..

Hemanta uske baalo me se hath ferne lagta hai aur apna lund ab Tanya ke muh ke aur andar dalne lagta hai.

Tanya : Umm..slurp....ummmm..slurp..

Tanya ab Hemanta ka lund jitna ho sake utna apne muh ke andar le rahi thi. Hemanta bhi ab apne kapde utarne lagta hai.. Ab wo pura nanga ho chuka tha aur ab Tanya ke muh se apna lund nikal kar wo Tanya ke mathe ko chumta hai..

Hemanta : you are the best, Tanya.. Maa hoti to aaj garv mehsus karti..hehe..

Tanya ab khadi ho jati hai. Hemanta ab uske dress ko nikal deta hai aur wo puri nangi hokar bed par baith jati hai aur apni komal chut ka darwaja kholte hue Hemanta ko dekhne lagti hai.



Hemanta : Hehe..meri beti aaj khud hokar mere liye tayyar ho rahi hai.. hehe.. tumhari maa ne bhi kabhi aisa nahi kiya..

[Silverstone93]

A Family Secret

(A suspence mystery Erotica)

Part - II

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Wo ab apne lund ke tope ko thuk se bhar deta hai taaki wo apni beti ko dard diye bina chod sake.. Hemanta pichle 2 mahino se chut ke liye bhuka tha aur aaj Tanya ki gulabi chut dekh uska kala lund kaafi sakht ho chuka tha. Wo bina deri ke bed par chad jata hai aur apna bada lund uski Komal si chut par rakh kar usme apna topa ghusane lagta hai..



Tanya : aahh..daddy...

Hemanta : aahh.. Tanya..my sweet girl.. tumhari chut aaj bhi waisi ki waisi hai.ummgh.. it's so tight..

Tanya : aahhgg..daddy..aap..aapka lund bhi..bahut bada hai .aahhgghh...

Hemanta ka lund ab Tanya ki chut ko chirta hua pura uske andar sama jata hai. Tanya ko Hemanta ke bade tatte apni gaand par mehsus ho rahe the...

Hemanta :aahhh..this feeling..pichle 2 mahino se mai is garamhat ka intezar kar raha tha.. aaj jakar mujhe sukun mil raha hai.. aise tum har roj meri room me aaya karo beta..aahh..

Tanya : aahh..daddy..it's so big.. your dick is the best.. daddy..ahhh..

Hemanta Tanya ki baat sunkar khush ho jata hai aur apna lund bahar nikal kar fir se andar pel deta hai..

Tanya : aahh..ooh..daddy...go harder.. daddy..

Hemanta ab apni beti ko jor jorse chodne lagta hai. Tanya bhi aahe bharte hue uska sath dene lagti hai..

Tanya : Oohh..daddy.. you're the best..no one can beat you.. aap ke samne sab namard hai..aahh..



Hemanta : ooh..beta..sachhi? Wo..Wo ladka bhi?

Tanya apne Daddy ko dekhne lagti hai. Hemanta ke aankho me chamak thi. Wo apni beti se apni tarif sunane ke liye taras raha tha. Tanya ke chehre pe hasi chha jati hai.

Tanya : aahh..yes..daddy....you are better than him..wo..wo ladka bhi aap ke samne kuch nahi hai..

Hemanta ki khushi ka thikana nahi tha. Uski speed badh jati hai aur ab Tanya apne pehle orgasm ke kareeb aa jati hai. Wo Hemanta ki gardan ko pakad kar usko apne jism se chipka leti hai..

Tanya : Daddy...mera paani nikaln..aahhh..daddy..fast...faster...yes...fuck...aahhhhgghhh..

Wo puri takad se Hemanta ko apni baaho me jakhad leti hai aur apni gaand utha uthakar jhadne lagti hai.. Thodi der Tanya aise hi Hemanta ko pakde rehti hai. Hemanta ab apna lund nikal kar apni beri ki geeli chut ko sehlane lagta hai.

Hemanta : Kaisa lag raha hai beta?

Tanya : Hahh..it was amazing, daddy.. it was the best orgasm I ever had..

Hemanta ab Tanya ke hontho par apne kale honth rakh deta hai. Tanya bhi bina kisi sharm ke apne pitaji ke hontho ko chusne lagti hai. Hemanta ab ek taraf apni beti ki chut sehlane lagta hai aur dusri taraf uske mulayam hontho ka ras pi raha tha.



Thodi der taka aise hi chumte rehne ke baad Tanya Hemanta ko bed pe lita deti hai aur khud uske upar baith jati hai..

Hemanta : hoho.. to aaj beti baap ki safar karne wali hai? You always like this pose..

Tanya Daddy ke lund ko apni chut pe tikakar  uspe baith jati hai. Dono baap - beti jor se aahe bharte hai..

Tanya : Aahh.. yes..daddy.. mujhe ye pose bahut pasand hai..kyu..kyunki isme mai dominant Alpha hu, aur aap mera submissive beta(symbol) ho..

Wo Hemanta ke ghane balo wali chhati pe hath rakh kar upar neeche hone lagti hai. Hemanta bas bed pe leta apni beti ki chuttad pakad kar uski gaand upar niche kar raha tha..



Tanya : Ohhh..daddy..this is the best..aahh..aapka lund meri..aahh..chut me bahut andar tak jaa raha hai..aah..



Hemanta ab apni beti ki kamar pakad kar apna lund tezi se andar bahar karne lagta hai. Tanya ke chhote chuche hil rahe the aur Hemanta ko apni beti ke expressions dekh kaafi maja aa raha tha. Tanya ki jawan chut ab paani chhodne lagti hai aur usme Hemanta ka lund nahane lagta hai. Wo ab Hemanta ke upar gir jati hai aur saanse bharne lagti hai.

Hemanta ab Tanya ko bed pe ulta lita deta hai aur ab uske piche jakar apna lund uski chut me ghusa deta hai..

Tanya : aahh..daddy..wait a minute..I just came..

Hemanta : Sorry beta.. itne mahino baad tum meri room me aayi ho aur ab mujh se raha nahi jaa raha hai. Pata nahi fir kab aaogi tum meri room me?



Wo apna lund Tanya ki chut me ghusa kar usko chodne lagta hai. Tanya bhi ab apni daddy ki baate sunkar excite ho jati hai..

Tanya : Oohh. Daddy.. don't worry.. mai aaj aayi hu kyunki aapne kaam hi itna achha kiya hai. ahh... Isliye mai aaj aapko gift de rahi hu..aahh..

Hemanta : ohh my good girl.. I can do anything for you.. Ye to bas mamuli kam tha..aahh.. I can kill anybody for you..

Tanya muskurane lagti hai. Hemanta ab apni jawan beti ki chut me lund ghusakar maje le raha tha..



Tanya : ooh..daddy...mujhe pata hai ki aap mujh se kitna pyar karte ho..aahh..jitna aap mummy se bhi nahi karte the..hai na?

Hemanta : aah..yes...beta..I love you more than anybody else.. more than your maa..aahh..

Hemanta Tanya ko ghodi banakar chodne lagta hai. Tanya ki chut bhi lagatar paani chood rahi thi aur un dono ke paseene se ab puri room me ek alag si badbu chha jati hai..

Tanya : oooh...yes..daddy..aap bas mujh se hi pyaar karte rehna..mai bhi bas aap se pyaar karungi...

Hemanta : yes ..yes...I love you only, Tanya...aur tum janti ho ki jo koi hamare bich mai aaya, wo kabhi iss ghar se...aahh.. jinda bahar nahi gaya..aahh..hehe..

Tanya : aahh..yes..daddy.. aahh... Koi nahi aana chahiye hamare bich me..naa meri mummy..or....or..

Hemanta : na wo ladka..hehe..

Dono ek dusre ko chodte hue hasne lagte hai....

Hemanta : ahh...beta..lagta hai mera nikalne wala hai..aah..

Tanya : Yes..cum in my mouth daddy...let your daughter taste your cum..aahh...

Hemanta apna lund Tanya ki gulabi chut se nikalta hai aur Tanya kisi bhuli sherni ki tarah Hemanta ka lund chusne lagti hai..

Hemanta : ohh baby...yes..suck it.. ahahh..

Tanya : cum for me daddy..ummm.slurp... give me your cum...yes .aahh..ummm...

Tanya Hemanta ka pura lund nigal jati hai aur uske tatte jorse masalne lagti hai..

Hemanta : ohhh shit...baby, I am cumming..ooh...open your mouth..ahahh..

Tanya apna muh kholti hai aur Hemanta chillate hue apni beti ke muh me jhadne lagta hai..

Hemanta : aahhh...take it baby...aahh....mera paani pi ja.. meri jaan..aahhn..fuck..



Lund se garma garam paani Tanya ke muh me girne lagta hai aur wo bade chaav se wo saara apani nigal jati hai.. Hemanta wahi baju me bed par gir jata hai. Tanya ab apni ungli chatne lagti hai aur waha se khadi hokar khidki me jakar khadi ho jaati hai.

Uski najar garden ki taraf jati hai jaha 2 ped lagaye the.. Ek ped kuch salo pehle lagaya tha. Wo ab kaafi bada ho chuka tha. Tanya ki najar dusre ped pe jaati hai jo abhi 4 din pehle lagaya tha. Tabhi TV pe ek breaking news jhalak ne lagti hai..

"Shantanu Moitra, PENSU ka students union president, jo 4 dino se gumshuda hai, usme nayi jankari samne aa rahi hai.. Family aur Friends ka kehna hai ki Shantanu ko opposition wale students ne agawa kiya hai.."

Tanya wo khabar dekh muskurati hai aur TV switch off kar deti hai.

Hemanta : beta...maine tumahra kaam kar diya na..ab to meri janjir khol do..please..

Tanya apne bebas baap ko dekhti hai, jiske pairo me ek badi si janjir thi. Tanya Hemanta ke baalo me se hath ferti hai aur bina kuch bole waha se bahar jati hai aur room ko lock kar deti hai.

THE END

[Saravroman]

There are great writers on this forum. I am nowhere near to them.

Best ongoing story in English forum. : Click Here

This story is by far the best ongoing story and I request you all to read it.  

FanArtic 074 - fan comment

You are too kind in your comments, Bro - many thanks for recommending my thread!

[Saravroman]

FanArtic 075 - Fan Appreciation

It's been quite a while since I was so aroused reading a short snippet!
The 1st half of Tailor story had THE FLAMING FIRE!

Waiting for more such MIRCHY HOT MASALA stories!
It reminded me of your first thread in pictures Forum (Rohini & Soha & all the initial round of spicy stories)!  

[Silverstone93]

FanArtic 074 - fan comment

You are too kind in your comments, Bro - many thanks for recommending my thread!

I recommended your story because it is indeed the BEST STORY in my opinion. There is everything present in your thread.

Lots of writers write stories without any emotional touch ( Maybe I am one of them), but your story has that emotional touch. Maybe you are the only writer who started a thread with pre-planned plot in mind.

I will always support and promote your story.  

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[Silverstone93]

FanArtic 075 - Fan Appreciation

It's been quite a while since I was so aroused reading a short snippet!
The 1st half of Tailor story had THE FLAMING FIRE!

Waiting for more such MIRCHY HOT MASALA stories!
It reminded me of your first thread in pictures Forum (Rohini & Soha & all the initial round of spicy stories)!  

Glad you loved that story. I do not know how to write MIRCHI HOT MASALA stories. I don't decide about the story beforehand, just a random idea comes in mind and all I do is convert the idea into the words and present them in front of you. Hope, my future stories will qualify for"Hot Masala" stories league.    

[Silverstone93]

Hello Friends,

"A Family Secret" is my first attempt to write a suspense erotica. I would like to know whether it was worst or best.
I would love to read your point of view on Tanya (Main protagonist) and her relationship with her Father (Hemanta). Though everything is in front of you, I am still looking forward to your comments.

Why comments are important?

- Comments help the thread to attract new readers. It helps the thread to rise in the list and more people can read the stories.
Just reading the story and not commenting will eventually lead the thread go out of new readers sight and also lead writers to give up on writing.

[Silverstone93]

Summer Day

Only advantage of Hot Summer days is.....

[Blackak.aa]

Family erotica was worst in my eyes

[Blackak.aa]

I'm sorry to say ur story family secret seems baseless and it lacks to be called a thriller or suspense it's a very much bakwas. If u ur self read the story again u will notice the fact!!

[Silverstone93]

Family erotica was worst in my eyes

I'm sorry to say ur story family secret seems baseless and it lacks to be called a thriller or suspense it's a very much bakwas. If u ur self read the story again u will notice the fact!!

Thank you so much Blackak.aa bhai... I will work on this genre cause I don't have any experience in it. Yes, it looks quite baseless cause I decided to use this genre in short story. This type of genres are for long stories and I'll refrain from using them in short stories to avoid confusion in readers.
I am really happy and motivated with your honest reaction and it'll surely help me to write better in future.

Keep supporting the thread.

[Lorutt]

Bhai meri fanstasy ka kya hua

[Saravroman]

Summer Day

Only advantage of Hot Summer days is.....

Sultry smelly SWARG!