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banarsi panwala by Pinkbabu
bedroom main jaa kar Cheddi laal ny dobara sy Neha ko apni bahoon main ly lya or usy usky bed py ly aaya ..... Neha ko bistar py litaya ...or khud usky qareeb beth ky uski shirt ky oper sy usky boobs sy khailny laga ..... ahista ahista unko dabaany laga ..... phir us ny Neha ki shirt ky button kholny shuru kr dye ..... or Neha ky boobs usky saamny uski brassier main aa gy ........ Cheddi laal ny Neha ki khoobsorat transparent bra main sy usky boobs ko jhaankty hoy dekha to khush ho gya ........

Cheddi laal uski bra ky oper sy usky boobs ko sahlaaty hoy bola .... bari mast lag rahi ho is main to tum ........
Neha sharmaa gai .... or doosri taraf monh kr lya ..... or CHeddi laal ny neechy jhuk ky uski transparent bra ky oper sy hi apny hont usky nipple py rakhy or unko choosny laga .....
itny main darwaza khula or Savi aik tray main doodh ka jug or aik glass ly ky aai ........ usy dekhty hi Neha jaldi sy Cheddi laal ko peechy hata ky seedhi ho ky beth gai .... or apni shirt theek krny lagi ..... usky chehry py sharmindgi ky expressions thy ... magar Cheddi laal abhi bhi usky saath jud ky betha hoa tha ......

Neha .. main ny tum ko cold drink ky lye bola tha or tum yeh doodh ly aai ho
Savi tray side table py rakhti hoi boli...... main ny socha ky Cheddi laal ny meri maim sb ko chodna hai to doodh ly ky jaati hon thora dum daar chudaai kry ga doodh pee ky ...... pr yeh to mery aany sy pahly hi aap ky doodh py hi shuru ho gya hoa hai ........
Neha ny sharam sy monh neechy kar lya ............
Cheddi laal apna haath Neha ki shirt ky andar daalty hoy bola .... ary maim sb ky mammy hi itny tight hain ky hathon ko rokna hi mushkil ho jta hai ..
Phir Savi ky saamny hi Cheddi laal ny Neha ki shirt utarni shuru kr di ...... Neha ny thori mazahimat ki magar Cheddi laal ny uski shirt usky jisam sy utar di ...... or phir uski bra ko neechy kheencha or Neha ky boobs ko bahir nikal lya ....... or Savi ky saamny hi usky nipples ko monh main ly ky choosny laga ...... Neha ahista sy boli ..... Cheddi Savi ko to bhejo ...........

magar woh bina uski suny Neha ky nipple choos rha tha kabhi aik to kabhi doosra ...... kabhi daanton sy usko kaatny lagta ... or Neha ky monh sy siskaaryan nikalny lagin ............ khud ko poori trah sy Cheddi laal ky supurd krti hoi us ny Savi ko bahir jaany ka ishara kia ....... Savi ny muskraa ky Neha ko dekha or phir boli .......
Savi ..... maim sb main ghar jaa rahi hon ...... main darwaza lock kr joun gi aap lagy raho ......
Neha chup kr gai .... or jaisy hi Savi kamray sy bahir nikli to Cheddi ny ahista sy usky nipple ko kaata to Neha ny tarap ky apni bahain Cheddi ki gardan main daal ky usy apni taraf kheench lya ....... lazzat or mazy sy Neha ki ankhain band ho rahi thin ....... or woh tarap rahi thi ............
kuch dair tak Neha ki choochi ko chosny ky bad Cheddi laal khara hoa or bed py khary ho ky apni dhooti khol di .... uska mota kaala lund akar ky Neha ky saamny tha ......
Cheddi apna lund Neha ky monh ki taraf barhata hoa bola ..... aaj to isy monh main ly na maim sb
Neha uski taraf dekhny lagi ....... buhat ganda hai yeh
Cheddi ... pahly bhi to lya tha na tum ny monh main
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Neha . pr tum kabhi isy saaf nahi kr sakty kya .... koi bhi kaisy monh main ly sakti hai isy
Cheddi apny lund ko Neha ky honton sy lagaaty hy bola ..... acha aainda saaf kr lon ga aaj to choos ly na meri jaan
Neha ny uski taraf dekha or usko hansi aa gai ....... us ny apna goora goora haath aagy barhaa ky usky lund ko pakra ..... or usy ahista ahista ragadny lagi ... sahlaany lagi ........ usky goory goory haath main Cheddi laal ka kaala seyah lund buhat ajeeb lag raha tha .......
Neha Cheddi laal ko dekhti hoi boli ... dekho to kitna kaal hai tumhara yeh mery haath ky goory rang ky muqably main
Cheddi laal ny neechy jhuk ky dekha .... or hansa ..... meri jaan tery isi goory rang or tery hussan ny hi to diwana banaya tha na mujhy tera
Neha uski baat py hans pari .......
Neha .. aik tera yeh itna kaala hai or oper sy tera yeh pait mota bahir ko aaya hoa hai ..... kaisa mard hai na tu ...... itna ganda sa ...... moota kaala saandh ho jaisy ....... Neha ny usy tease krty hoy kaha ........

Cheddi laal apny lund ko aagy ko krty hoy usky monh sy lagaty hoy bola ....... ary meri goori maim sb ..... kal isi mooty ky kaaly saandh ky kaaly loudy sy hi chudwaa rahi thi na mazy ly ly ky .....
Neha .... woh to tu ny zabardasti ki thi mery saath
Cheddi laal ..... aaj to nahi kr raha na tery saath koi zabardasti .... aaj to tu apni marzi sy hi chudwaa rahi hai na ........
Neha ny uski taraf dekha or muskraa ky boli .... nahi ji .. meri koi marzi nahi hai tery saath kuch krny ki ......
Cheddi laal ... nahi teri marzi chudwaany ki to main jaoun phir
Neha .. tease krti hoi ... haa jaa
Cheddi .... theek hai chor mera lund main jata hon
Cheddi ny jaisy hi peechy ko hatna chaha ............ to Neha ny hansty hoy uska lund foran sy apny monh main ly lya ...... or muskraati hoi nazron sy CHeddi laal ko dekhny lagi ..........
Cheddi ....... saali ab kyon rok rahi hai ..... jaany dy na ab mujhy agar tujhy nahi chudwana to ........

Neha ny uski balls ko apny aik haath main lya or doosry sy usky lund ko apny haath main aagy peechy krny lagi ........ uski topi py apni zubaan phairty hoy ......
Neha ..... haan ja na jaana hai to ..... or jaa apni jhonpar basti ki un gandi aurton ki hi laina ........ meri nahi mily gi phir tujhy
Cheddi laal ny haath barhaa ky usky chehry ko pakra ...... or neechy ko jhuk ky usky honton ko choomty hoy bola ...... behnchod teri yahi adaain or nakhry hi to alag hain sub sy .......
Neha usko kiss deti hoi muskraa rahi thi ........
Cheddi laal ...... monh khol ...
Neha ny uski taraf dekhty hoy apna monh khol dya ....... Cheddi laal ny apny monh main rakha hoa paan ...... jisy woh pata nahi kab sy chabaa raha tha .... woh Neha ky monh ky andar daal dya ........ Neha ny apna monh band kia ...... or bura sa monh bana ky Cheddi laal ko dekhny lagi ......
yeh kya harkat hai cheddi ...... Neha boli
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Cheddi laal usky honton ko choomty hoy bola .... khaa ly na mera paan .......... phir us ny khary ho ky apna lund dobara sy Neha ky monh sy laga dya .......... Neha ny apna monh khola or Cheddi laal ka lund usky monh ky andar daakhil ho gya ...... Cheddi laal usky monh main apna lund ahista ahista andar bahir krny laga ....... aagy peechy ko hoty hoy .....
Cheddi laal ky moty lund sy Neha ka poora monh phoola hoa tha ... woh apna poora monh khol ky usky lund ko andar ly rahi thi ............. aagy ko jaaty hoy Cheddi laal ka lund usky halaq sy bhi takraa raha tha baar baar ...... or jub Neha ky monh main aagy tak lund jaata to Neha ki naak main Cheddi ky lund ky oper ky baal dakhil hony lagty .......
pata nahi yeh chooty log apni safaai kyon nahi rakhty ..... jisky dekho bal itny barhy hoy hoty hain ........... pahly Jagya tha to usky baal bhi aisy hi thy ...... or ab isky bhi itny bary bary ...... pata nahi itny gandy kyon hoty hain yeh log ........ Neha us gandy Cheddi laal ka lund choosti hoi yeh soch rahi thi .... pahly pahly Neha ko jo bura lag raha tha ...... ab waisa nahi tha .......
Cheddi laal ny Neha ko bed sy neechy khara kr lya ....... Neha ab Cheddi laal ky saamny khari thi ........ usky badan py siraf aik sufaid rang ki bra or blue tight jeans thi .......... Cheddi laal usy oper sy neechy tak dekh raha tha ...... Neha ko ghumaa ky uski nangi kamar or tight gaand ko dekhny laga ...... phir uski gaand py aik zoor ka thappar maara ........... Saali kya mast gaand hai na teri ......

Neha ki siskaari nikal gai ...... dard or lazzat sy ............
Phir Cheddi laal bola ..... chal apni yeh pant utar .......... or ho ja nangi ...
Neha uski baat py sharmaai ..... magar phir khud sy hi apni pant kholny lagi .......... uski tight jeans ahista ahista neechy utarny lagi ....... tight jeans ahista ahista neechy utar rahi thi ....... or jaisy hi neechy utri thori to Neha ki panty nazar aany lagi .......... Neha ko sharam bhi aa rahi thi ........ or choot bhi garam hoti jaa rahi thi ...........
Jaisy hi Neha ny jeans utar ky phainki ...... to Cheddi laal ny usky nangy jisam ko foran hi apni bahoon main ly lya ..... woh bhi apni shirt utar ky poora nanga ho chuka hoa tha ..... Neha ka goora nanga badan Cheddi laal ky nangy kaaly badan sy mila to Neha ky poory jisam main lazzat doud gai .......... Cheddi laal ky haath Neha ki nangi kamar or chootron ko sahlaa rahy thy ......... Neha ny bhi apny hont Cheddi laal ky honton py rakhty hoy apny haath uski kamar py ly jaa ky phairny shuru kr dye ......... Neechy sy Neha ny CHeddi laal ka louda apni choot ky saath tikaa ky apni thighs main phansa lya ........ Cheddi ky garam garam lund ki garmi Neha ki choot ko paani paani kr rahi thi ..........
Cheddi laal Neha ky honton ko choosty hoy bola ........ mam sb maa kasam tera jisam buhat hi sexy hai ...... tujhy to chod chod ky kabhi bhi mera dil nahi bhary ga ......

Neha apni tareef sun ky hans pari .......
Neha ...... ab jo krna hai jaldi sy kar ly or jaa yaha sy ..... saara din tujhy apny ghar main nahi bithaay rakhna main ny .....
Cheddi laal ny Neha ko bed ky kinaary py litaya .. or uski panty utar di ....... Neha ki choot ab bilkul nangi ho chuki thi ..... Cheddi laal neecy uski tangon ky beech main beth gya ... or uski gulaabi choot ko dekhny laga ...... Neha ki paani tapkaati hoi choot ko dekh ky Cheddi laal ky monh main bhi paani aa gya ...... us ny jhat sy aagy barh ky Neha ki gulaabi choot ko choom lya ......
apny dono haathon ki unglyon sy Neha ki choot ky laboon ko khola or uski choot ky daany py apni zubaan phairny laga ......... jaisy hi Neha ki choot ky daany ko Cheddi laal ny apni zuban sy touch kia to Neha ka poora jisam kaanmp gya .... or uski gaand oper ko uchal pari ....
Cheddi laal ny usy sanmbhala .. or apni zuban sy uski choot ko chaatny laga .......... uski choot ky daany ko ragadny laga ..... Neha machli ki tarah machal rahi thi ........... Cheddi laal ny apni zuban Neha ki choot ky andar daal di ...... or andar bahir krny laga ........ Neha ny apny haath Cheddi laal ky sir py rakhy or usky baloon ko apni muthi main ly kar uska sir apni choot ki taraf kheenchny lagi ....... Neha ki choot sy paani nikal raha tha or Cheddi usy chaat ta jaa raha tha ...........
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Nishith apny daftar main betha hoa yeh sub dekh raha tha ... or ab apna lund nikaal ky usy masal raha tha ... muth maar raha tha apni biwi ko Cheddi laal ky sath dekh ky .......
Cheddi laal neechy sy utha or apny lund ko Neha ki garam choot py ragadny laga .......... Neha or bhi tarapny lagi ..... sisakny lagi .......
Neha ..... Cheddiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii ...... daal dooooooooooooooooooooooo isy andar daal dooooooooooooooooooo
Cheddi laal muskraya ...... or ahista ahista apna lund Neha ki choot ky andar daalny laga ... siraf aadha lund uski choot main daal ky Cheddi laal ny lund ko andar bahir krna shuru kr dya ..... Neha ny uski bazoo pakar li thin usy apni taraf kheenchny ky lye ..... dheery dheery Cheddi laal ka poora lund Neha ki choot main utar gya .... or woh usy andar bahir krny laga ....... Neha ki choot main ... usy chodty hoy ..... apny dono haathon ko Neha ky jisam ky dono taraf rakh ky us py jhuka or peechy sy dhakky maarty hoy usy chodny laga ..........

Cheddi laal ka jisam Neha py jhuka hoa tha ..... Neha ny cheddi laal ky seeny ko choomna shuru kr dya ..... uska kaala paseeny sy bhara hoa seena Neha ky honton ky saamny tha ....... jisy woh choom rahi thi .... Cheddi laal ky aik nipple ko apni zubaan sy chaat ny lagi ....... apni zubaan sy ragadny lagi .... jaisy jaisy Cheddi laal ka lund Neha ki choot main andar bahir ho raha tha waisy waisy hi Neha ki masti bhi barhti jaa rahi thi ........ masti main woh bhi ajeeb ajeeb harkatain kr rahi thi ........ us ny Cheddi laal ky nipple ko monh main lya or usy choosny lagi ........ aisa Cheddi laal ky sath kisi ny bhi kabhi nahi kia tha ,.......usy bhi maza aany laga .... or usky dhakkon ki raftar bhi taiz hony lagi ...... jitni zoor sy Neha ki choot main woh apna lund andar bahir kr raha tha ...... waisy hi Neha ky monh sy siskaaryan nikal rahi thin .... or thori dair main hi Neha ki choot ny apna pahla paani chor dya ........ uski aankhain band hony lagin ..... woh nidhaal ho gai thi ........
kuch dair aisy hi chodny ky baad Cheddi laal ny neha ko khara kia...... or usy bed py jhuka dya ..... or khud peechy aa ky apna lund uski choot ky andar daakhil kr dya ...... aik hi jahtky main .... Neha ki geeli ho chuki hoi choot ny bina kisi takleef ky uska lund sah lya ....... ab Cheddi laal aagy peechy ko hota hoa Neha ko chod raha tha .... or Neha bhi apni gaand ko aagy peechy krti hoi uska saath dy rahi thi ........ aakhir cheddi laal ky lund ny Neha ki choot ky andar hi paani chod dya ..... or dono hi bistar py lait gy ........

doosri taraf apni biwi ki Cheddi laal sy chudaai dekh ky Nishith ka lund bhi paani chor chuka tha ....... or woh bhi apni chair py nidhal ho ky betha hoa tha ...... usky dimagh main yahi baat chal rahi thi ky yeh sub khatam nahi kr sakta ......usy saaf nazar aa raha tha ky Cheddi laal uski khoobsorat biwi ky jisam ko hasil kr ky .... usy chod ky kitna khush hai ....... . usy mahsoos ho gya hoa tha ky Neha bhi ab CHeddi laal ky saath sex ko enjoy kr rahi hai ........ or Neha ki trah woh khud bhi to is sub ko enjoy kr raha tha ...... to phir kaisy woh yeh sub rok sakta tha ............ jub sub hi khush thy to kaisy woh sub ki khushyan khatam kr sakta tha ...........
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Sarit bhai kya ye complete ho gayi? Shayad kuch aur updates bhi hai?
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Hey friends yeh small part pichly update ka hi hissa hai jo ky main ny jaan boojh ky post nahi kia tha ....... or aaj ky lye rakh chora tha .......... isy main aaj post kr raha hon aap sub ky lye ........ with the good bye .......... and wishing to see you soon in some new thread..............


aik last baat ........ i know ky buhat sy doston ko mera is story ko is trah end krna pasand nahi aay ga ..... lakin i want to share one thing .............


"If on a flight, the pilot suddenly falls sick
and passenger knows how to fly the plane takes
over, he is supposed to take it to the original
destination. If he does otherwise that will be
hijacking - no matter how skillful he might be."



In the end once again thanks to the orginal owner of the theme for allowing me to write and also for such a good theme of story.



See you soon friends.


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Kuch dair rest krny ky baad Neha ny Cheddi laal ko zabardasti ghar sy bheja ... warna uska to aik or round khailny ka mood ho raha tha ...........


Cheddi laal apny lund ko sahlaata hoa bola ........ ary meri bulbul .. aaja aik baar to or chodny dy na teri choot .......


Neha jaldi sy inkaar main sir hilaati hoi boli .... na baba na .... main nahi dobara jhail sakti isy itni si dair ky baad


Cheddi laal ...... acha to iska matlab hai ky tu dobara bhi dy gi


Neha hansi ...... jaisy agar main na krny don to tu jaisy baaz aa hi jaay ga na .........


Cheddi laal hansa .... or Neha ki choot main apni ungli ghusaaty hoy bola .... saali tujhy aik baar chakhny ky baad koi bhi tujh sy door nahi rah sakta .........


Neha ny aik baar to apni gaand ko hilaa ky apni choot main uski ungli ka maza lya or phir uska haath pakar ky uski ungli bahir kheench di .......... or usy boli .... bus ab jaao tum ..... mujhy ab ghar ky buhat sy kaam krny hain naha kar .......


Cheddi laal ..... chal na main tujhy nahlaa deta hon na ..


Neha ... bed sy uth ky uski dhooti or shirt uski taraf barhati hoi boli ...... nahi rahny dy tu ........ main khud hi naha lon gi ......
tu bus ab jaa yaha sy .......


Akhir Cheddi laal ny apny kapray pehny or jaany ky lye tyyar ho gya ........ Neha ny gown pehn na chaha usy gate tak chorny jaany ky lye ....... magar Cheddi laal ny rok dya usy .....


Cheddi laal ..... aisy hi aaja na ..... gate tak hi to jana hai ... tu ny kon sa mujhy dukan py chorny jana hai ........


Neha muskraai ........ or usy aisy nangi hi gate py chorny chal pari .......... Gate py ruk ky jaany sy pahly Cheddi laal ny aik baar phir usy apni bahoon main bhar ky usky honton ko chooma ..... or usky nipples ko apni unglyon main ly ky zoor sy masla ........ jis sy Neha ki siskaari nikal gai ..........


Neha ..... apny nipples ko sahlaati hoi boli ..... sssssssssssss uuuuffffffffffff ........ kya krty ho tum bhi na


Cheddi laal hansa .... saali teri choochi dekh ky to na haathon ko sukoon aata hai or na hi monh ko ..... bus man hota hai ky inko choos lon monh main ly ky ...........


Neha hansi.... bus kr dy batain bnana .... or jaa ab .....


Akhir Cheddi laal ghar sy chala gya ...... or Neha muskraati hoi wapis apny kamray main aagai ....... kmray main idhar udhar bikhry hoy apny kapray samaity or bed py beth gai ............ kuch sochti hoi .........



Nishith jo yeh sub dekh raha tha ........ Neha or Cheddi ki chudaai ky baad ki chaid chaad bhi ........ Neha ko aisy betha hoa dekh ky sochny laga ky ab yeh aisy kyon beth gai hai ....... kya soch rahi hai yeh ....... apna sub kuch is trah sy lutwaany ky baad ..... kya cheddi laal ky jaany sy udaas ho gai hai Neha ...... abhi to khush thi jub usy gate py chor ky aai thi ...... usy kiss bhi kia tha us ny ......... pr ab kya ho gya hai ..... kya Neha such main Cheddi laal sy pyar krny lagi hai ........ nahi nahi Neha us mooty sy kaisy pyaar kr sakti hai ...... woh to hai bhi itna ganda sa ...... pr usky saath sex bhi to kia hai na Neha ny ....... to woh sub bhi to meri wajah sy hi hoa hai na ........ main ny hi usy majboor kia tha na yeh sub krny ky lye ........ main ny hi aisy halaat paida kye thy na ky woh Cheddi laal sy chud jaay ........ uuuuufffffffffffff ........ yeh fikra hi kitna lazzat deta hai na ky Neha Cheddi laal sy chudi hai ........ aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhh .............. kya mujhy Neha ko rokna chahye ..... nahi nahi ........ main usy nahi rokon ga ........ abhi Cheddi laal sy chudny ky baad Neha ky chehry py kitna sukoon tha na ....... kitni khush thi na ........ to kia main Neha sy uski khushi cheen lon ...... nahi yar ........ yeh sub Neha ny meri wajah sy hi kia hai na ..... uska kya kasoor hai .... to phir yeh cheating to na hoi na .......... or phir woh mujh sy bhi to itna pyaar krti hai na ..... woh kabhi bhi mujhy nahi chory gi yeh mujhy pata hai .......


Dosri taraf Neha ky dil main bhi yahi batain thin ....... kya main ny theek kia hai ..... kya mujhy yeh sub krna chahye tha Cheddi laal ky saath ....... main ny us gandy sy insaan ky saath kaisy kar lya ..... behak gai thi kya main .......... nahi nahi .... behki to main bus Jaggya ky sath thi na ........ Cheddi laal ky saath to main ny apni marzi sy kia hai sub kuch ........ pata nahi kya jadu hai us kaminy mooty main ........... jo us ny mujhy aisy apny chakkar main phansa lya ..... Neha muskraa uthi..........Jaggya ..... nahi nahi Jaggya ky sath or kuch nahi ho ga ...... jitna usy mil gya buhat hai usky lye ...... or nahi ..... aainda main usy apny qareeb nahi aany don gi ............ or agar aaya to .........???????? agar aaya to main apny Cheddi laal ko bol don gi ..... phir dekhna kaisy usko theek krta hai ...... Neha muskraai ..........


Cheddi laal ky saath to ab khatam nahi ho paay ga na ......... pr jo bho hoa hai ......... meri marzi sy hi to hoa hai na ...... or phir itna maza bhi to aaya hai na ....... kya main is mazy ko chor paaon gi ........ nahi na .......... pr Nishith ....... yeh usky saath to dhooka hai na .......... is baat ny Neha ko udaas kr dya ........ lakin main to apny pati sy buhat pyar krti hon na ....... or agar usko kabhi bhi nahi choron gi to phir to kuch ghalt nahi hai na ....... aisy hi Neha ko khud ko mutmaeen kr rahi thi ............ khud ko Cheddi laal ky saath taluq rakhny ky ly raazi kr rahi thi ........ kuch nahi hota ....... woh Savi bhi to aisa krti hai na Cheddi ky saath .......... or woh kahti thi ky or bhi aurtain hain jo Cheddi laal ky sath sex krti hain ..... iska matlab hai ky kuch ghalt nahi hai ........or phir main kon sa dunya ki pahli biwi hon jo yeh kr rahi hon or pareshaan ho rahi hon ........ kuch nahi hota agar yeh sub chalta rahy to ...... bus Nishith ko pata nahi chaly ............ aakhir Neha ny bhi Nishith ki trah hi is sub ko jaari rakhny ka faisla kr lya ...... apni apni lazzat ky lye ......... apny apny mazy ky lye ..................




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Behad behad...afsosjanak hai aapka is tarah se end karna.....is tarah se saaf pata chala hai ki aapko hum chahne walon ki zara bhi fikr nahi
Aapko sirf 2--4 so cald critics ki zyada parwaah hai
Theek hai...jaisa aap theek samjhain
Yahan per koi kisi ka kisi pe bhi zor to nahi...bass pyar ki n respect ki hi value hoti hai
Jo aapko nahi
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lakin aisa nahi hai jaisa aap kah rahy ho

apny fans or aap jaisy doston ki wajah sy hi main hon

yeh aap logo ki mohabat hai jo mujhy itna oper ly gy ho aap log warna main kuch bhi nahi

jo bhi ho aakhir aik story ko end to hona hi hota hai na then why not now.

yes you are right ky kuch log hoty hain jo ky story ko kharab krty hain

yeh bhi theek hai ky is baar main ny is story main different logo ki opinions lin... jin main sy kuch ki suggestions achi thi magar kuch ny story ko barbad bhi kia .... i know it

lakin apni aadat ky khilaf main ny pahli baar aisa is lye kia kyon ky main is story ko seriously nahi ly raha tha bcoz it was not my own story. main siraf fun ky lye isy likh raha tha kyon ky actual writer buhat slow likh rahy thy apni masroofyat ki wajah sy. is lye main ny woh likna shuru kia jo main is main hota dekhna chahta tha ...... or wohi kuch aap logo ky aagy rakh dya ...

aap ky last msg main woh baat aap ki bilkul theek thi ky jo log criticism krty hain woh bhi story likh ky dekhain

aap aik baat meri note kr lo or poory xossip py check kr laina ky koi bhi writer jo ho ga na woh kisi bhi doosry ki story ko condemn nahi kry ga balky usy encourage kry ga or hamesha positve advise dy ga ..... as for example is story main Ramesh1990 or rajkumar buhat positve rahy hain

hamesha tanqeed krny woh log hoty hain jo kabhi aik story bhi nahi likh paay hoty.. aik writer kabhi doosry py ghalat tanqeed nahi krta ...

anyways main inka asar nahi laita kuch masroofyaat hoti hain jinki wajah sy aap logo sy door ho jata hon magar aap dosto ki mohabat phir kheench laati hai .

i hope ky aap isko accept kr lo gy as my appology

agar aisa nahi kro gy to phir majbooran mujhy wapis aana pary ga na .........

pinkbabu
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Dear pinkbaby
you are amazing writer of ADULTRY ..
I read all of your previous story from ej ajab si pass to
Wafaon ka imetehan,Also major saheb.
their is lot of potential in the story " meri biwi aur banarshi panwala.. You ended the story very early..
You can write at least 9-10 Update more ...
I request you to write at least 10 episode more ...
You don't need any type of suggestion but here are some suggestion that will be very useful..
1 .chotu should fuck neha ..
2. Neha should get a double penetration from chedilal and chotu..
3.Neha should get a tight fuck from chedilal at night when her hushband sleeps. ( write at least 3-4 encounters session in night also involve chotu at night make threesome)
4.Neha get fucked in chedilal shop..
5.Neha should get a Sexual punishment from chedilal as she fucked by jagya and chedilal did not like jagya ....
6.dont involve savi b/w neha and chedilal..
I request you once again please restart from where you lleft ...


ALSO if you don't want to start this story then please write a sequel to your All time blockbuster story EK AJAB SI PYAS ..
A modern high class young housewife getting fucked by her lower class middle age servants , driver..
Handled by someone like neeru...
Tab sana thi ab kisi Fatima yaa Aisha yaa Nassra ko lao ...please it's a request ..
ALSO from long Time aapne koi khud ki nayi story shuru nahi ki hai to ek ajab se pyaas ki sequel hi likh do ...xossip pe bahot saare writers dirty or kinkier part likhne ke liye aapki ki style se inspiration lete hai ...aap ko likhne me aasani bhi ho hogi ..
Please please please .. and please reply ..what is your decision

Thank you

Quote:Thanks brother for so much appreciation and liking. these almost all the scenes which you have suggested were in my list and plan but some how I had to end up this story earlier so plz forgive me.


you suggested the second part of ik ajab si pyaas but didn't mention what could be in that. It shouldn't repeat the previous scenes and situations. So if you have some ideas then you can pm me.


Thanks

pinkbabu
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Just .....amazingggg... pinkbabu ..u are so amazing and great writer ..tht I believe u r as good as legendary pinkbaby...
Hats off man
I was really missing pinkbaby's magic for yrs now .. today I felt that same magic ehen i read this story..its going absolutely great.. i cant appreciate u enough for jagya angle.. wat a twist erotica u brought out there ..when everyone was expecting the obvious thing tht chedi will do ..u brought a master stroke.. just wow lovedd it..

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Bro you have taken a well deserved rest by now. This story still has got lot of potential and only you with your fabulous style can do justice to this. So I request you to please start this story again. off late it is seen that there are lots armchair critics have grown up those having not a single story in their credit but force so much advise that writers are irritated and eventually leave the story.
I request you and all the great writers here that don't let your writing style affected by the remarks/suggestions, though some really good
can be incorporated in the story at your own convenience.
Once again request you to start this one bhai...!!
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Thanks very much Sarit bhai ise post karne keliye
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Write more episode on this story.. Plz..U can write still 9 to 10 episode on this so plz come back and write..
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Mast story hai kya yh aage nhi chal sakti thi kya?????????
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isse continue kare
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